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Critique an Article: California 2013 Prison Hunger Strike vs. Community Development

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- Unlike the Community Development article, the prison hunger strike article does not have an introduction.

- The prison Hunger Strike Article is also not as coherently organized as the Community Development article. There is no contents page, and sections that could be put together are not.

- In the prison article there is irregular capitalization, and sporadic hyphenation of words.

- The links for "see also" could be more robust similar to the Community Development article, including links to other prison strikes not just hunger strikes.

- Now that there has been more time since the hunger strike, there could be a more thorough conclusions or facts of the aftermath of the strike.

- There are long paragraphs without citation, especially those including statistics in the prison article.

- Unlike the Community Development article there is not a section for definitions. There should be for this article to explain what solitary confinement means.

- There is vague language used in the Prison article such as "possibly" and unidentified "four out-of-state contract facilities" which is not found the Community Development article