User talk:CJManalo25/sandbox

Peer Review

Hi Charisma,

I think your proposed edits are all really great ideas. The structure of how you’re aiming to apply your edits to the article and the edits in general are very clear cut. Certainly tackling hyperlinks to other pages is an easy fix and bringing in more sources will help the page. All the edits you want to do seem neutral. It might seem like you’re doing too many? I feel like you could focus on two of the bigger edits you’d like to make that include bringing in sources. But if it feels like a manageable job to tackle everything you’ve drafted, then go for it.

Have you found any sources you’d like to add yet?

On The Nile (talk) 19:13, 1 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review

Hey Charisma,

It's a me, Bi. Neutral content: This draft seems like it's a neutral content for now. Again, you can't really take team to talk about respiratory system Reliable sources I don't see any proposed source (s) that you are trying to write in here, as of 04/02/22 Clear structure:

   Is this draft well organized? Can you follow it easily
   - you proposed to add in more sources, so I can't really give you more feedback until you add it in
       What pages will be edited?
   -  you want to edit the respiratory system of the Shark Anatomy page
       Who will do the editing/adding of what topics/ pages?
   -  seems like you and your two teammates will do this
       Does there seem to be an even distribution of contribution from all team members?
   -  can't tell for now, but seems like there is
       What sorts of contributions with regard to images are planned?
   -  you are planning to add more images of the dissections into the wiki page.
   Do you see where this content might fit from the information provided?
   -  Charisma wants to add a subsection called the Ventilation into the Respiratory system, and last time I checked, Ventilation is part of the Respiratory system so it will fit.
       Meaning...can you see what part of an article and what page this will go in?
       -  yes

Integration:

   Does anything link up with something you or your team is working on? How can you help each other?
   - not really... We write about birds, and she is writing about sharks, so no.
   Do they link to other relevant pages in the text of their draft?
   - yes

Bitran0205 (talk) 04:20, 3 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review

Hey this is Jasmine doing your peer review. Overall looks pretty good, maybe just list some sources! Neutral content: The content seems neutral Reliable sources: I don't see any sources listed. If you have them make them more clear, or maybe find some reviewed sources. Clear structure: Is this draft well organized? Can you follow it easily: I can follow the outline pretty easily. I am not sure if the edits have or have not been made yet and that is the only confusing part. n What pages will be edited? the shark anatomy pages, specifically the section on respiration. Who will do the editing/adding of what topics/ pages? it looks like embedded links will be added. And that a subsection will be edited. Does there seem to be an even distribution of contributions from all team members? Yes. What sorts of contributions with regard to images are planned? They seem to have plans to add images, just haven't done it yet. Integration: Does anything link up with something you or your team is working on? How can you help each other? I dont think this lines up with any6thing that I am working on. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jazzmk2000 (talk • contribs) 22:27, 4 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]