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20:59, 20 April 2018 (UTC)~~After reading your article, I really liked how put together the information was. It all flowed together and your citations were done well. The only critique that I can think of at the moment is that in some cases, there were sentences that would flow a little bit better if they were combined together. Particularly in the first paragraph this was the case. Otherwise, everything looked good and the paragraphs all come from a neutral standpoint.

I re-arranged the sentences to create a better organizational flow. Thank you for the feedback! CassLong (talk) 02:25, 24 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]