User talk:Catlyn.joy.holowell/sandbox

Rating = 2, but just need to make some easy fixes and this will be ready to publish. Capitalize oxford dictionary and provide a reference citation. Benefits section title is misspelled. As you've already told me, need to add reference list. I don't think the final Conclusions section really adds anything. Can be deleted. J.R. Council (talk) 20:04, 30 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Problem with duplicate references

I can't figure this out. Will ask Dr. Boyer. J.R. Council (talk) 17:49, 6 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Article Ready for Review

The references problem is fixed and the article is all ready for review and publishing approval!

Still doesn't look right

Now some of the references have things like [existing reference 1] instead of just [1]

Also, you have hard return signs that should be edited out.

You need to proofread carefully and replace phrases like "When it gets to the nervous system," This is too informal. Better - "Regarding the nervous system,". -- first sentence under Physiological. First sentence under History is another example: "The idea of relaxation in psychology really took off." "Became very popular" would be a better way to say this.

Please do a thorough proofreading job and let me know when to look at this again. J.R. Council (talk) 20:34, 7 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Reference issues still a problem

Dr. Council, We proofread the article and fixed any problems we saw in the article but the reference things are still not going away and both of us are at a complete loss on how to fix them or what to do. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Brenton.knutzen (talk • contribs) 02:31, 8 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

A few more problems to fix

1. Missing D in first heading 2. In the last section, "Benefits," the second-person "you" appears a number of times. This usage is not appropriate for Wikipedia. Change to third-person or impersonal. 3. I did several minor edits myself - it was easier than commenting on the problems. 4. I sent this last comment in email - I deleted all the references in the text that said [existing reference]. I then tried re-inserting a reference. Put cursor in place for reference citation, click on Insert, then Use existing reference. It worked fine. Do this with visual editor. You need to put the reference citations back in the text where appropriate. The ones I took out didn’t look right anyway.

After you make these changes, let me know. I'll probably give you the go-ahead to publish. J.R. Council (talk) 16:15, 8 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Corrections completed. Ready to Publish

Hi Dr. Council,

We went through and made all the corrections you told us about in the talk page and in email in regards to the reference errors and grammatical errors. I hope we are finally ready to publish. Just give me or Catlyn the go ahead and we will link it with the existing article on relaxation! Thanks! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Brenton.knutzen (talk • contribs) 21:45, 8 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]