User talk:CensorshipStudent123!/sandbox
Saisha's Peer Review: Hate Speech
[edit]- consider turning the first sentence into two sentences, i think it would sound better
- you dont really need to explain your draft in your sandbox, but you should explain when you transfer the changes to the main page.
- what does "going off" mean in the second to last sentence in Supreme Court Case Law? I would use other language here.
- you can link words to other pages in your sandbox draft - instead of waiting to do it till you move stuff to the main page.
- I thought your edits were neutral/without a slant. Good pick of sources!! They are neutral and reputable. :)
Chloehyman (talk) 18:40, 16 November 2018 (UTC)
Peer Reviews From Joseph
[edit]Random House:
Lead Section: I know you're not drafting the lead section, but I think it may be good to add a citation to the last sentence of the lead section.
Structure: The structure seems perfectly fine.
Balance: Your balance seems pretty good, but I would like to see a little bit more in the Challenges with Technology section.
Neutrality: The tone here seems perfectly fine.
Sources: Your sources seem good and you use them well.
Hate Speech:
Lead Section: The lead section of the article here could also use a citation (after the sentence about the 2017 case).
Structure: I like the structure. I feel like the case law portion could use some more structure, at least some sub headings.
Balance: The balance seems good.
Neutrality: This seems perfectly tone neutral.
Sources: Again, your sources seem good and you use them well.