User talk:Claire.l.m/sandbox

Peer Review

Hello Claire.l.m, I assigned myself to peer review your article because of your woman scientists extensive, and current, resume. I am addressing your articles sections overall and just not this individual section. I also decided to write it on your sandbox so you can see it as your are working on your article and not on the articles talkpage itself. It seems like you chose to write more information and add onto the Anne B. Newman article that is already there. I like the fact that you add information in regards to what she is doing currently. I also like that you included more information regarding her studies. It could be possible that you might be able to track down a few of these studies and provide links for them so that the audience is better able to find her work. I do think that your lead paragraph has some general information that you could definitly add to the articles that is already there and would enhance the article overall by providing a more solid introduction about the article. I do think caution needs to be taken when you use adjectives such as distinguished because it sounds like you are trying to pursuade people that she is a very distinguished scientist. Let me know if you would like me to peer review some more. Thank you! TreyDumler (talk) 02:52, 20 November 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review Correction

Hey to make it easier for you to move your article, I moved my peer review to your sandboxes talkpage instead of on your sandbox. I apologize if it got in your way. TreyDumler (talk) 21:55, 1 December 2016 (UTC)