User talk:Copywriter12

Comment about Marshall coming tomorrow DGG ( talk ) 05:29, 24 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

AfC notification: User:Copywriter12/sandbox/Perry Marshall has a new comment[edit]

I've left a comment on your Articles for Creation submission, which can be viewed at User:Copywriter12/sandbox/Perry Marshall. Thanks! DGG ( talk ) 07:04, 23 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

My apologies for the delay.[edit]

I've just combined the versions, putting emphasis where I think it belongs.  I've made two major changes with which you may disagree--1, it seems his religious work is more in the nature of an avocation that a series field of endeavor, and I kept the prior brief coverage. it shouldn't get more unles theres 3rd party comment on it.   2/ I removed the book titles from the lede paragraph; they are already listed twice over--once in the works section, and then in the bibliography. Three times is too many.

However, I replace the prior wording in the sections on his work with your revised wording, which is generally clearer. I kept the general quote on 80-20, becuse it's a good explanation.

I have some more work to do: I need to check the references to make sure that none of them are inappropriate unreliable sources. And I need to do a finalcheck on wording,and that the descriptions of the books match WorldCat,. DGG ( talk ) 07:51, 24 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]