User talk:Fabdalle/sandbox

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Good topic choice, nice plans.

Some suggestions about this sentence:

"There is a threshold for expression which is exceeded should the number of mutated mtDNA be greater than the normal mtDNA."

This sentence doesn't really give us much info - think about what it's really saying, which is that there is a threshold that is exceeded when it is exceeded. Think about rewording it to something like "MERRF results when the number of mutated copies of mtDNA exceeds that of normal mtDNA." This is saying the same thing, it's just a little bit clearer!

Great start! Vellichor (talk) 01:49, 5 November 2015 (UTC)