User talk:Felixdevries717/sandbox
Draft Review[edit]
Hi Felixdevries717,
You have a pretty solid article here, but I would love to see more about the habitat of the Acherontia atropos. Where are they most common, how do they interact with the environment around them, that kind of stuff
Otherwise this is a solid article so far, keep up the good work!
The second section is really well written. There seems to be too much information in the Gender Expression section of your article. It seems like better word choice could have been used in the final section. The article considerations section could use some more information, since it seems shorter compared to others. The article seems to have good word choice, but could use better word choice in the Article evaluation, and maybe the first section.
From the article evaluation you had a plan and carried it out really well. Every section of the article is filled out, you cited your sources, and it is unbiased. Great job, and keep up the good work.
Hi Felix, I really like what you have so far, there's a lot of good information. I know it's not done yet and that someone else already mentioned this, but I would love to know more about the habitat and environment of these moths! Claire.pixie (talk) 21:14, 31 October 2018 (UTC)
Draft feedback[edit]
Hi, Felix!
You've made really good and significant additions to this so far! I can see a nice blend of areas of your draft where you've improved/expanded on existing material from the article and areas where you have generated entirely new sections of information. I am a little curious how you will blend these changes/additions into the information you aren't making changes to in the existing article, but overall this is in a strong draft space. As a result, here is some super-specific feedback as you continue working on this! --the first paragraph of the introduction ends with "...from which is its common name is derived." There is something about the "is its" that doesn't quite work that would be good to look at in your editing/proofreading stage --another super-picky proofreading note is to make sure the latin name capitalization is consistent throughout --you note that it isn't clear why these moths make the sound they make, but that there are theories...it would be a worthy expansion to give an overview of the primary theories/schools of thought about this --what else do you still plan to add? It seems like there might be more information available on behaviors, habitat, diet...?
I look forward to seeing what else you add to this! Nicoleccc (talk) 02:03, 30 October 2018 (UTC)