User talk:Grahamcrackered/sandbox

Placement for info on P source for genealogy of A

This would be a splendid item to insert in Abraham's family tree, aka Genealogies of Abraham, which has little or no historical-critical info. But not in Genealogies in the Bible, which has not info on Abraham except a link to Abraham's family tree. (Granted, in that spot there should be a summary or précis of the Abraham family tree article. You are welcome to add one. But that's different that writing new info based on Coogan, as assigned. Do you get what I mean?) Thanks! ProfGray (talk) 01:44, 11 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Peer review for Mendenhall paragraph

The first thing I would suggest is to make sure you add a citation to the article. The only grammar error is the letter a in the first sentence after reign needs to be taken out and in the last sentence after the word under should be a comma not a period. I would also maybe mention something about how the article said the people of the land assumed since Lord had already committed himself to bless them under the past covenants, they didn't have to do anything else. Everything else looks great. Good job! Dkcincy (talk) 19:52, 11 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review for Mendenhall

I would agree with User:DKCincy about the citation. Also, I think that the theme of the paragraph is well-established with your opening two sentences. However, I would like to see some clarification of the last couple of sentences. It would be great if there was elaboration on why the Lord being a witness matters in terms of what kind of treaty it is. I think it would be very helpful to include details about the vassal treaty itself in order to clarify the meaning there. For example, if the Lord was a witness, presumably the King was the suzerain and the people were the vassals? Perhaps the last sentence could be slightly revised as well. I was a little uncertain about the meaning-- did that mean that the new covenant was more or less incorporated into the old one? Other than that, definitely good ideas here!Slfirme (talk) 15:53, 16 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]