User talk:HaishanLuo/Identity Tourism/sandbox

You copied content on your talk page and your sandbox. I've deleted it from the talk page as it should not go there. Also I see on October 13 you moved the article out of your User space-- DO NOT DO THAT. You are working through your edits in your Sandbox, but will eventually copy those over into the exisitng Wikipedia article. You aren't creating a new article.

Things to work on for your Week 9 continued edits:

Evaluate an article: Go back to your article evaluation and pull out the list of things you said you could improve on the existing article. Put that list here in the talk page and cross things off as you do them (you can also edit what I have said below and cross things off as you complete them).
Copyedits: It is not clear what/where you made copy edits in week 5, but you should be sure to read through the article to see if sections need copyedits. When you do copyedits make sure it is clear to me what you changed (copy the original sentence/section, followed by a version with your changes bolded). And publish each change as you go with explicit notes on what you changed from the original Wikipedia article. That way when you migrate your work to live Wikipedia you will be able to publish and explain each change as you go. Doing so is a required part of the Week 13 Wikipedia assignment.
Bibliography: You have a good start, and should start moving the summaries over to your sandbox with citations. You might also see what other sources you can add. In the sandbox, you also don't need a "bibliography" section (that is what the "references" accomplish). A bibliography in a Wikipedia article is used more as "further reading" on a topic, whereas the references cover the list of citations.
Citing sources: What you have done thus far is good, but you need to add more and also make sure it is clear where in the existing Wikipedia article your additions will go.
Adding media/hyperlinks: You added a needed hyperlink, but as you continue you should go through and see if there are things that should be hyperlinked in whatever you add and the existing article. You should also say in the edit note what hyperlinks you added, not just that you added them. The image you added is not showing up correctly, so if you plan to add media you should review that training. That said, be sure before you add media to the live Wikipedia article that it is actually necessary or contributes to the article (that is, you had to do it for this assignment, but in your final Wikipedia contributions don't add it just to add it).
Overall: You seem to be doing things week by week, but now you really need to focus on the bigger picture of what you plan to add/edit here. Is there more in the existing article that needs copyediting? More citations you can use to expand on the sections you are working on? The more planning you can do now the easier it will be for you to chip away at those edits between now and November 22 when you need to move your final edits to live Wikipedia.

Adrishaw (talk) 16:18, 21 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Week 12 feedback: I would remove the image since it is not working and is not required. Otherwise you have added a lot of good content here and it is ready to be moved to Live Wikipedia. Adrishaw (talk) 22:34, 16 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]