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Vince's Peer Review

Hi, this is my peer review on Permian Basin (North America). I would just like to first mention that I understand that the article was in existence before Hena began her edits, so some of my comments may be relating to other people's work, but I felt it may be helpful anyway to include these comments.

Lead section Great and concise intro; indicates where it is geographically (southern USA), what type of rock makes the basin, and indicates how the area is being used for extensive oil production. However it would be interesting to know how long the oil producing has been going on in this area for, as it mentions for the Sylvite being extracted since 1931.

Structure Good background of each of the 8 components making up the basin. Followed by the history of the area, this makes sense in terms of the structure and flow of the page. The next portion of the article after the depositional history is the Facies Tracts section, but this section is followed by Tectonic history. I think it would make more sense to include the textonic history after the depositional history section, so to keep all the history together.

The section titled "Generalized facies tracts of the Permian Basin" has some language that is quite complex for the average wikipedia reader. I only have a slight background in geology, and I found it hard to understand some portions. For example, the "Lowland Systems Tract" section mentions the word "peridital," perhaps a definition of this word here would be useful.

Regarding neutrality, the article highlights the populations of every county that is found in the basin. However this is not followed up with relevance as to why, other than the economic significance of the basin. Maybe including an interesting case study in one of the counties would be interesting, but simply listing all the populations of each county doesn't seem entirely necessary. Citations 9 through 15 were inaccessible, so I was not able to evaluate them to see their content matter, and two sections in the article have "Require additional citations." For the facies tracts, it looks like the citations were all put at the end of that section. I think it would be important to put the citations beside their respective parts (i.e in the Lowstand systems tract, it looks like there is no citation, however it is just mentioned at the end of the section).

The section titled "Hydrocarbon production and reserves" mentions the extensive drilling techniques and extractions values, however there is no comment on the economic and environmental impacts of this extraction. Is the permian basin for residents of the USA? Or is this being exported? Also, at what environmental cost is this extraction happening at?

The language in the article was very neutral, however the sentence "Due to its economic significance, the Permian Basin has also given its name to the geographic region in which it lies" feels like it isn't delivering enough information. Why is it economically significant (With examples, maybe?) also, how is the economic significance related to the name of the region? Maybe I'm the odd one out, but this sentence just doesn't feel appropriate here.

There is a good mix of peer-reviewed references as well as news sources. The article by John Hills is clearly well researched, however it is unfortunate that only the abstract is available for free access online. That being said, the abstract provides valuable, credible information for the article. The same can be said for the article referenced by Ward et. al.

The second reference "Permian Basin map at Department of Energy, National Energy Lab" redirects to a page that doesn't load, so maybe this could be looked into? A lot of the articles seem to be books that have been referenced, such as Sarg et. al. and Hoak et. al. The resources are indeed credible journals, however it would be nice to have confirmation that the wikipedia page is representative of these books.

The article is overall well written and organized. It leaves the reader with a better understanding of the Permian Basin. Some language used in the article is very technical and geared towards those with a geology background, so some more accessible language would make it even better. The references are informative and unbiased, however a few of them do not link to working webpages. A few more online references would be helpful. Elasticat (talk) 01:48, 3 March 2019 (UTC)