User talk:Hoang1nguyen/Women in Japan

Peer Review

Overall, I really like the subsections added to the political status section in the women of japan article. I think the brief history is a really strong start to the section and creates a basis of current status of women. The women’s movements section definitely needs to be elaborated on. I think examples of a few recent movements and a little bit of background about the issues that surround them would be a great addition. I really like the inclusion of the explanations of low female representation section, but I think there needs to be additional sources. While everything is mostly verified, I think a lot of the statements are based on one study. Since the statements are a broad reflection of Japanese women’s behavior, I think they should be verified with one more study/source. I think the article is nearly developed, but needs expansion in the aforementioned sections. Devikajhaveri (talk) 04:41, 7 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, Women in Japan is an incredibly detailed article, with a wide variety of distinct lenses applied for analyzing the different standards and cultural expectations facing Japanese women. That being said, there is still some room for improvement. First, the lead-in section of the article does an excellent job previewing some of the economic issues facing Japanese women in the post World War II period, but that alone does not cover the full extent of the ensuing article’s narrative. Indeed, there is no mention of the historical periods prior to World War II (which the cultural expectations section explores), or the wide array of other policy disparities that exist for women in criminal justice, religion, education, and more. Additionally, there is some degree of vagueness when the article describes actions taken by certain groups in society, using phrases like “some organizations” and “media sources”, without explicitly explaining which organizations or media sources. This precision is critical in identifying how widespread certain practices are that impose far greater expectations on women than their male counterparts. In short, it is undeniably that the piece is incredibly well-developed, but minor adjustments would take an already phenomenally researched piece and make it flow for a wider uninformed public. --Hunerwithat (talk) 03:07, 9 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]