User talk:HugginsLogan/Woodlouse spider

I think the first and last sentence should be placed near each other because it provides for a better flow and better read since they both talk about the jaws/bite of the spider. If it is not already mentioned on the current wikipedia page for the Woodlouse spider, I would also put why it has such a powerful bite. Not only that, but I personally would put that the bite only causes a pain and itching sensation for a certain amount of time to humans if you can find that from a reliable source. Also, it may just be an error on my computer, but the references mostly lead to the same page which should be changed because citations and references should come from multiple sources. Gmoore12 (talk) 16:47, 18 October 2021 (UTC) GM

Dr. White's critique of your first draft

The Woodlouse Spider’s powerful jaws are made to impale the thick armor of woodlice and are strong enough to give humans a painful bite. Rather than spinning their webs at night, they use this time to search warm places for prey. [1] During the day, these spiders spend their time in special hiding places covered in silk. [2] These hiding places serve as a nest for the female's sac which can carry up to 70 eggs. [3]Although the Woodlouse Spider is a dangerous predator to woodlice, it is not known to be a health hazard to humans or smaller animals.[4]

References are formatted incorrectly. Are they different from each other? Trust, Woodland. "Woodlouse Spider (Dysdera crocata)". Woodland Trust. Retrieved 2021-10-13. Trust, Woodland. "Woodlouse Spider (Dysdera crocata)". Woodland Trust. Retrieved 2021-10-13. Trust, Woodland. "Woodlouse Spider (Dysdera crocata)". Woodland Trust. Retrieved 2021-10-13.Error! Filename not specified. University, Utah State. "Woodlouse Spider - School IPM - USU Extension". extension.usu.edu. Retrieved 2021-10-13.

Overall you did a good job. You added a lot of good information to the species list, but a lot of the information is already in the article. You need to specify to what section you are adding each piece of information. Nice addition of an image and GREAT job with in text citations. You should also add links to other Wikipedia pages. Your peer reviews have a few good suggestions as well. Whiteamphipod (talk) 16:25, 22 October 2021 (UTC)