User talk:Jackie542/sandbox/Draft
AW Peer Reviewer:
At first glance you have a decent amount of information and it looks like it could be extremely beneficial to the currently struggling "Behavior Endocrinology" page. I like how within the first sentence not only do you introduce the hormone but you also link it to previous wikidepdia pages that correspond with "Kisspeptin" and the "Kiss1 gene" making it easily assessible for someone to go onto either on of those page if they have questions about it. Overall, I found the information included in your sandbox to be informative, necessary, and benefical in understanding the concept as a whole. I think the only thing I would tweak is the format of the information just because format does have a huge impact on the audience and how well they are willing to process the information. But additionally I would further elaborate on concepts like "GnRH propose a negative feedback mechanism towards kisspeptin", if possible try to include images that depict "the amygdala was shown to be the core processing center of emotions according to MRI images", and "this was tested by placing the rat underneath the MRI and showing sexual and non-couple bonding images". I would also try to see if you could gather more sources just so that when someone is going through your wiki page they don't think "this is really good information however it appears to be coming from the same two or three articles". Also, you already know this but I just thought I would reiterate try to explain the pathways that kisspeptin travels but don't forget that there could be a chance this aspect of kisspeptin hasn't been heavily explored. Overall, I think your wiki page is at a great place and I am excited to see how you finish it off. Additionally, after you have established a firm comprehension of the material (overall) and include all the information you want make sure it sounds like you and is comprehensible by anyone who might stubble across your page, but overall great job.
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