User talk:Jaicasn/sandbox

Hello Jaicasn

I really like your revisions. Really nice job. You incorporated meaningful new content throughout, especially in the section “Defense Campaign.” I am also impressed with the number of new references you added. It is a good mix of newspaper reports as well as books on the subject.

I am curious why Anthony’s and Stanton’s History did not include any reference to her, especially given the coverage they gave Vaughn in their publication, The Revolution. This leads me to my one suggestion for your article. I think it would be very helpful if you could add a sentence or two at the beginning of “Defense Campaign” to give context to Anthony’s and Stanton’s interest in Vaughn’s trial. As champions of women’s rights, why did they take up her cause?

Thanks for improving this article so much. Your changes make it much more substantial and detailed. Sequoia51 (talk) 13:46, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

Sorry for the delay, here's some feedback: Edits in opener paragraph: Hester Vaughn (or Vaughan)[1] was a domestic servant in Philadelphia who was arrested in 1868 on a charge of killing her newborn infant. She was sentenced to hang after being convicted of infanticide....added parens plus split sentence for clarity. Eventually Vaughn was pardoned by the governor of Pennsylvania, and SHE WAS deported back to her native England.

Other edits: In July, 1868, -- remove first comma; remove after other month + year's as well.

Tone: Great! I like that it also includes "according to historian ... Gordon" in places to signal where that info came from.

Aftermath: this left me wondering what her significance really was. Maybe you could highlight even if she was minimally important after the fact, she still had importance in her contemporary time? Great work! Lwieck (talk) 20:13, 3 December 2018 (UTC)lwieck