User talk:Jkeagle/sandbox

Hi! You had a lot of information and kept a neutral writing style. Your citations all linked up and were from scholarly sources. I think your categories are nice and clear but I wonder if there is a way to make it more interesting. Could you find a graph to show the stores finances, discuss the employees of the store, or talk why people stopped shopping there? When was it the most popular? (these questions may not be answerable). You writing was especially clear. Don't forget to add images since they are category on the rubric. In over all polish, your linking to other pages is helpful and makes this article important. I would suggest instead of one major heading of the building to promote your subheadings to headings. Let me know if you have any questions about my feedback- Erin

Hey! I'm not sure if this is an official rule or not, but I'm pretty sure that when you paraphrase a few sentences of something by the same author, you can just cite the author once at the end of the paragraph. I noticed that you cited the same author for two sentences in a row a few times, so I think you can just cite it once at the end. I think you do a really good job of explaining everything about department stores, and I like how you break things down. Your sources all look reliable as well! As Erin mentioned, I would just add some photos because it's part of the rubric. I also can imagine it would be hard to research a topic that is located in France/most of the information is in French, so really good job!! PaigePaigee33 (talk) 16:52, 16 November 2017 (UTC)