User talk:Jwall97/sandbox

Sources

I don't see your sources in the sandbox. Josef Horáček (talk) 17:05, 27 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Your sources look okay, but there are some errors with how you integrated them. Josef Horáček (talk) 17:24, 13 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The Lead

Your lead is decent, but there are some stylistic errors. At the very least, you should replace "a lost" and "a lose" with "a loss" in the third and fourth sentence. Loss is the correct noun. Josef Horáček (talk) 23:50, 14 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]