User talk:Macylynn27/Women in music education
Review: "Previously, women were thought to be less creative than men." This is kind of vague, can you be a little more specific? "According to Lam" Context for who Lam is. In general when you say according to.... It would be helpful to give context as to who that person is and why their views are important. "universe are female!" University vs universe? Citations are needed Overall I think this is good! I like that you added a list of notable people at the end.
Peer Review[edit]
Peer Review: I think this is really good! I like that you are adding the section about social media and also the notable women. I would say giving more information on the people you are citing is needed. By just saying the last name, readers have no way of knowing who they are or how they are relavent to the point you are trying to make. Also sources are needed. (Klfeld (talk) 04:00, 22 November 2019 (UTC))