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There are a couple of issues with your first sentence. From the sentence, the topic is unclear. It reads like the topic is insulin regulation. Also, make sure to put the title of the article in bold in your first sentence to make the topic more clear. If this is just a subsection of the Lipogenesis article than it makes more sense though and you can ignore those comments. However, there are also quite a few grammar/punctuation errors in your lead. As it is right now, the first sentence should be "Hormonal regulation of insulin is hypothesized to stimulate lipogenesis."

Overall, I think that you did a good job describing the hormonal regulation of insulin. You might want to try and make it flow a little better so it is easier to read. As is stands right now, it may be difficult to understand for someone who does not have much background in the subject. Citation wise, I think you did a good job, but you may want to consider also having some sort of textbook citation or something else besides research articles. Avevanduz (talk) 01:55, 10 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]