User talk:MarcellaP13/sandbox
I liked how you listed the symptoms especially since they are common symptoms and viewers tend to scroll down to read that part of the page first. I think you can go more in depth on the the diagnosis part and explain the tests and how they determine the specific disease. Also for the recent research portion, it would be helpful if you referred to the article that you found the research on and more about the hypothesis or results from the article. Overall, great start to the page! -- Roma Patel
You're off to a really good start! you definitely need to elaborate more on each of the sections, but i think you probably already know that! your abstract is really short but i think finding background information for this should be really easy. Try finding articles on GoogleScholar for articles/research related to your topic, that worked for me! -Nidhi Patel — Preceding unsigned comment added by Nidhipatel826 (talk • contribs) 20:42, 14 November 2017 (UTC)
You have a very good base for the article. More information needs to be added to each section, but I'm sure that was your plan already. Some suggestions I have are to mention what the esophagus is and does within the abstract instead of the mechanism, explain each procedure in the diagnosis and how each is performed, and lastly place the grading section within the diagnosis since that pertains to how a physician diagnoses a patient. Also, at times, the sentences seemed slightly choppy so I would suggest improving the flow of the sentences. Overall, you have a great foundation! - Jasmine Crank — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jcrank07 (talk • contribs) 12:20, 16 November 2017 (UTC)
- This is a good backbone, but that's it. Everything needs to be fleshed out more, starting from the abstract.
- When fleshing it out, make sure to add lots of links.
- Don't lose the other pic in the original!