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Peer Review

Hi Mengf, here are my some suggestions:

1. You could have a taxobox in your article, which includes classifications like family, genus, and species etc.
2. I think it would be helpful if you add links to vocabularies such as xerophilic, germination, substratum, and conidia etc., so it would be more easier and clear for readers, who do not have much mycology background, to follow.
3. Maybe you could add sections such as history/classification/naming (for example, who observed Aspergillus penicilloides? Any variations/synonym?), distribution and habitat (for example, does the fungus grow worldwide? What temperature range it grow best?), the physcal observations about the fungus (i.e. its morphology?)
I really like your sections on "impact on environment" and "health"! Overall, the article is very well organized and easy to follow.
Ciel0525 (talk) 19:01, 30 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! Here are some of my suggestions:

1) Some of the sentences sound a bit awkward, so it may be helpful to rearrange the word order or combine some sentences together. For example, the following sentence from your introduction paragraph may need to be reworded to be more clear: "The conidia often shaped first as ellipsoidal and become subglobose when older, with a dimension of 3-4(5)µm.[3]". I would be happy to help you edit or to offer more suggestions; just let me know!

2) It may be helpful to have a section just on distribution and the morphology of the fungus.

Overall, good job! :) MinnieVW (talk) 22:09, 30 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hey Mengf, thanks for commenting on and reviewing my article. Your suggestions are appreciated. I really like your article; you've got some nice things going with it, particularly the sections on environmental impact and health. Allow me to return the favour:

1. Your introduction mentioned your fungus' ability to grow in unfavourable conditions. If you can expand on that, you can add an additional subheading entitled 'physiology', where you can further discuss its ability to withstand harsher environments.

2. Continuing in that vein, I'd like to suggest you add a couple more sections to your article. While what you already have is great, a couple more wouldn't hurt (e.g. history, the previously mentioned physiology, morphology, etc). I myself am working on expanding my articles in a similar fashion.

Again, thanks for your help, and good luck with the rest of your assignment.

ARoble12 (talk) 00:31, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, thanks for the great feedback on my article, it is a great help! Your article looks really great, very easy to understand and very informative. Best of luck with the rest of the assignment BrigRein (talk) 18:44, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]