User talk:Mmarsy/Tcheng Yu-hsiu

Student of Sac State working on wikieduaction History class.

Hi. This is Professor Siegel. I am just testing out writing on your Talk page. You can ignore this message! MLSiegel (talk) 19:21, 3 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! I am happy about your research on Tcheng Yu-hsiu. Your group did an excellent job on adding new sections to Tcheng Yu-hsiu. The live article had less information but your rough draft did an amazing job on providing new sources and content to her Wikipedia page. I believed this will help the general population get a better understanding of her achievement for the Women's Suffrage. HappyWriter99 (talk) 19:09, 9 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I like how you broke the headers into sections that include the Paris Peace Conference and Later Life specifically. The only other section that you might choose to include is a section on Tcheng Yu-hsiu's Early Life or Childhood or Upbringing. In the section titled Paris Peace Conference you mention that she was the Chinese Delegate for the conference. Do you plan on adding a little more about her involvement in the talks? In the bibliography section I notice some sources are highlighted in red meaning missing a piece of the citation. Are you keeping those sources? Overall, really good start and almost finished piece. The questions I asked are just slight suggestions to possibly consider. Very interesting woman and topic! MollyanneC (talk) 20:31, 9 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Great wikipedia article on Tcheng Yu-hsiu! I just have a couple of notes on some grammatical changes that could be made. In the short introduction section, where her name is introduced, you could add "also known as..." or "also written as..." before mentioning the two other ways her name is written. Likewise, in the following paragraph on the introduction section, you could add "became president" instead of "was president", "...returned to Shanghai to practice law, became president of a court...". In the Biography section, one of the sentence's states "...where she learned English but refused the religion." The "refused the religion" part could be reworded. In the last sentence of The Revolution of 1911, "...where it is believed she met other political figures...", the "it is believed" part could be rewritten to write who believes that she met with other political figures (like historians believe). The Rosebush Gun section could be written in the past tense instead of using "would". For example, the sentence "Tcheng would be an active critic against the agreement that China would give Shandong to Japan after they took control of the peninsula when it was left behind by the German." The sentence could be rewritten to say "Tcheng was an active critic of China's agreement to give up Shandong to Japan, after Japan took control of the peninsula when the Germans left it behind." When mentioning WWII, the number could be rewritten as II instead of 2. Overall, the content of the article is interesting and informative. The addition of the Rosebush Gun section is great as the story of the "gun" is one that is not very well known. Your group's work is also cited very well. Awesome job! Perez103 (talk) 21:58, 9 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]