User talk:Nhomziak/sandbox

This is a nice draft of the page. I think that the first line is kind of confusing and the first two sentences could be merged and avoid redundancy. The format for the citations in the las two sentences of the first paragraph should be fixed, although I also think you need some citations in the middle of the paragraph, when you refer to their dietary preferences. The taxonomy section is good, however, because this includes a lot of technical workds (The current definition of the Erebinae is based on the results of the molecular phylogenetic study of Zahiri et al.[6], who recognized several morphological synapomorphies for the subfamily: proboscis with smooth apex and sensilla styloconica dorsally, modified seventh abdominal sternite in the female, divided in to two lobes surrounding the ostium bursae. )I would suggest that you use hyperlinks if there are other pages that describe those terms. If they are not available, I would suggest some detail or brief explanations on what they are. The last sections of references should go with the same format as the others, unless they are external links or additional sources that haven't been cited. Javieraav (talk) 15:13, 2 March 2017 (UTC)

Feedback from Emily

Emilysessa (talk) 19:09, 15 April 2017 (UTC)

Very nice updates to this page!

Fix the multiple citations to [3] in this line, and make it a superscript: which has the widest wingspan of all Lepidoptera[3][3][3][3][3][3].

I think you should separate out some of the morphological details into a Morphology heading; most pages would not have this much information in the top paragraph. Usually that paragraph is a brief introduction to the topic, with more detailed information in subheadings below. Your article would conform better to this standard if you moved some of the information out of the top paragraph, and since most of it is morphological details, that seems like a logical subheading to add.

Taxonomy section, fix redundant wording in first sentence: "most erebinae Erebinae were". Erebinae is also misspelled a couple lines later as "erebine". Also need to remove the commas that follow some of the author names in this section, before the citation numbers.

Make sure that you link to external pages when possible - there are a few Latin names in the taxonomy section, for example, that probably have their own wikipedia articles that could be linked to.

Nice addition of the photos at the bottom!

Response from Nick

Thank you for your suggestions Emily! I made the suggested edits on the main Erebinae page

19:02, 20 April 2017 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Nhomziak (talk • contribs)