User talk:Niaeugene1/sandbox
Hello, I am Nia and this is me introducing myself to my talkpage, I think.
Peer Review
[edit]- This was a well organized draft. The headings are correlated to the information and the citing is very relevant compared to your topic.
- I like how you used this quote: "For instance, families have gone missing in the Grupo de Apoyo Mutuo case[1]." This is a good way to use an example and incorporate the topic at the same time and it makes the your article seem more valid because you have evidence to back it up
- I also think it was good to introduce the topic starting with the history and then expanding to different problems in Guatemala. It gives the reader some insight about what they're gonna be reading next. This is better than just jumping straight into the topic itself.
- I would add some more points and expand a little on the last sentence "A bill proposed in 2017 bans students from learning about other sexual orientations and also bans same sex marriage.[3]" so that you can give the reader a little more information before they look at your sources. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jaishawilson (talk • contribs) 03:49, 2 November 2018 (UTC)