User talk:Pjbpdx/sandbox

Evaluations

Arne Quinze "Camille"

Sculpture

Inaugaruated in 2010, the Rouen Impressionnée hosted the contemporary urban (re)development[1] installation sculpture 'Camille' by Belgian artist Arne Quinze. Quinze's use of interlocking systems in sculpture employ wood, concrete, paint and metal. The Quasi-Quinze[2] method of sculpture utilizes structural integrity and randomness as key elements for 'Camille'. Located on the Boieldieu Bridge in the center of Rouen, this intentional location was chosen by the artist to magnify the historical separation of its city's citizens[3].

Arne Quinze "Camille"

Essay.svg This is a user sandbox of Pjbpdx. A user sandbox is a subpage of the user's user page. It serves as a testing spot and page development space for the user and is not an encyclopedia article. Get Help ^ de Smet, Aurelie (2013-11-12). "The role of temporary use in urban (re)development: examples from Brussels". Brussels Studies. La revue scientifique électronique pour les recherches sur Bruxelles / Het elektronisch wetenschappelijk tijdschrift voor onderzoek over Brussel / The e-journal for academic research on Brussels. doi:10.4000/brussels.1196. ISSN 2031-0293. ^ Baerlecken, Daniel. "Judith Reitz/Daniel Baerlecken." Susanne Schindler/Axel Sowa/Ariane Wilson (eds.) Constructing Knowledge––Das Wissen der Architektur 50 (2009): 61. ^ http//www.figure8.be. "Camille". Arne Quinze. Retrieved 2019-04-15.

1st Edit Peer & Prof Evaluations

4/23/2019 Evaluation by User:Sackhy

Points: 40/40 Grade: 100%

Spelling/Grammar — No major spelling or grammatical mistakes in the work — Exceeds standard.

Language — Good use of Proper English — Exceeds standard.

Organization — The work was easy to follow and had a natural flow — Exceeds standard.

Coding — Good coding — Exceeds standard.

Validity — Good information with reliable sources — Exceeds standard.

Completion — Brief concise work was provided — Exceeds standard.

Relevance — All the information provided were relevant to the topic. No irrelevant information. — Exceeds standard.

Sources — Good quality sources provided — Exceeds standard.

Citations — Properly formatted — Exceeds standard.

References — Properly formatted — Exceeds standard. Sackhy (talk) 10:32, 23 April 2019 (UTC)

4/23/2019 Evaluation by User:Katemackie

Points: 40/40 Grade: 100%

The only thing I would change would be to make the title a header. I made this change in the talk page here. Otherwise, good work! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Katemackie (talk • contribs) 16:46, 24 April 2019 (UTC)

5/3/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright

DrMichaelWright (talk) 17:51, 3 May 2019 (UTC)

• Points: 30/40
• Grade: 75%

Spelling/Grammar

Nearly meets standard Much of what is written is written in the present tense, when the sculpture was a temporary one, nine years ago.

Language

Meets standard

Organization

Meet standard.

Coding

Meet standard. There look to be some problems with the formatting of the references, which may be code-related, but I will assess that below.

Validity

Does not meet standard. Given that the sources do not clearly support what the text says, it is difficult to come to the conclusion that the text is valid. The final sentence seems to be a creative interpretation of what the source says.

Completion

Meets standard.

Relevance

Nearly meet standard. Since this was a temporary sculpture, it is questionable if it should be in the Wikipedia page, given that there are probably permanent sculptures that deserve mention above this one. At the very least, it should be mentioned that the sculpture was a temporary one, standing for just about two months.

Sources

Does not meet standard. There are three sources mentioned (which is good). The first two look like they would be solid sources, except that the first one does not seem to have much to do with the information it is supposed to support, nor does the second one specifically mention this sculpture, even if it looks like it might.

Citations

Does not meet standard. The first and second citation could be better placed at the end of their sentences, rather than - confusingly - in the middle of them. The first source seems to be about things in Brussels. Arne Quinze is mentioned in the article, but not anything related to this artwork. Also, in this paragraph Quinze is mentioned after the citation. So, what information is coming from the cited source? The second source does mention the Quasi-Quize, but does not mention it in relation to Camille.

References

Does not meet standard. It looks like maybe Wikipedia's automatic engine was used for this, in which case it failed. Particularly the second two sources seem to be bizarrely formatted.

2nd Edit Peer & Prof Evaluations

5/15/2019 Evaluation by Kate Mackie

Points: 32/40 Grade: 80%

Spelling/Grammar Meets Standard.

Language Nearly meets Standard. Some of your information could be altered. Such as, "...an event that has seen forward progress and resistance since" This statement needs to be added to in order to be clearer. I am wondering if the event has done more good than bad.

Organization Meet Standard.

Coding Meet Standard.

Validity Meets Standard.

Completion Significant Nearly Meets Standard. I feel like I am reading individual facts that sometimes flow together and others not. For example, "LGBT are more often seen as perpetrators or victims of violent crime than a part of the common daily life", go in to this more. How are they seen as perpetrators? Where are they seen as victims? Who sees them this way? There needs to be more connection between your information.

Relevance Meets Standard.

Sources Meets Standard.

Citations Meets Standard.

References Meets Standard.

5/25/2019 Evaluation by User:Sackhy

Points: 38/40 Grade: 95% Spelling/Grammar — No major mistakes in the work — Meets standard.

Language — Encyclopedia wordage, as well as a neutral tone — Meets standard.

Organization — Structured well and had a natural flow — Meets standard.

Coding — No problems with coding — Meets standard.

Validity — Most sources were reliable — Nearly meets standard.

Completion — Work was completed — Meets standard.

Relevance — No irrelevant information. — Meets standard.

Sources — Most sources were from Academic sources — Meets standard.

Citations — Properly formatted — Meets standard.

References — Properly formatted — Meets standard.

Sackhy (talk) 11:03, 25 May 2019 (UTC)

6/5/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright

DrMichaelWright (talk) 12:41, 5 June 2019 (UTC)

• Points: 40.5/40
• Grade: 101.25%

Spelling/Grammar

Meets standard.

• "...since it's first..." omit apostrophe. 'it's' is always a contraction of 'it is' or 'it has'. In the possessive, you do not use the apostrophe.

Language

Meets standard.

• The opening sentence in the passive voice could use revising. "Political authorities have resisted LGBT culture in Istanbul," which you can then also use to specify which authorities: the Turkish state government, the Istanbul city authorities, or both?
• "...and by 2014, the number of participants grew to over 100,000..." Using the term 'by 2014' you are indicating that before 2014 it had grown, which means that you would use the perfect past. However, since the pride happened in 2014, you would use the simple past: 'grew'. I think the latter best captures your meaning.
• "...participants grew to over 100,000 .[4]" omit space between 100,000 and period.
• "...2015.[5][6]Though Istanbul..." Please put a space after the notes.

Organization

Meets standard.

Coding

Meets standard.

• It would be helpful to link the first instance of 'LGBT' to the LGBT article on Wikipedia.
• Since there is already a Wikipedia article for the Istanbul Pride, it would be a great thing for this addition to the city's article to have {{See also|Istanbul Pride}} placed just under the header.
• Since you already have used the link to the Istanbul Pride proper, you do not need to link it again, as you do in "The gay pride march has continued..."
• It would be helpful to link 'heterosexist' in "...highly heterosexist environment..." to the Heterosexism article.

Validity

Meets standard.

• "...and encourage cultural development." That's a very broad phrase that sounds nice, but it doesn't seem to mean anything specific, nor is that phrase used in the source. Paraphrasing is a must, but please don't go so broad as to lose meaning.

Completion

Meets standard.

Relevance

Meets standard.

Sources

Exceeds standard.

• These are really wonderful sources that you have used.
• Where you mention the human rights organizations, it would have been a good thing to perhaps cite those reports directly. They're probably easily available through their websites. (No, they're not academic sources, but being from the horse's mouth is good too.)

Citations

Meets standard.

References

Meets standard.

• Your references are fairly well formatted, but here are some tips for further perfection:
  • In sources of this sort, you do not need to report the publisher or database, but I'm glad you're erring on the side of inclusion.
  • Instead of specifying the publication date with more than just the year, it is better to report the issue number of the journal that you are citing.
  • Issue numbers have a separate parameter (issue=), so the Fishman article would have had volume=11 and issue=1.
  • Adding a DOI number generates a link that will help someone get access to your sources. See what I have done to your Yenilmez reference below for an example.

• Note 7 mixes up the authors' names.
• Note 8 references an entire edited work.
  • When it supports just a single citation with a single bit of information just the one chapter supports that point should be referenced.
  • I do see that you're offering the page number, which is very good.
  • Editors should be listed separately. (See code of this talk page for how that's done)
  • See here how for how it should look: