User talk:Rachelseagren/sandbox
Peer Review by Charlotte Wallace
I think your introductory section presents all the necessary information and is the perfect length. The introductory section is a little bit lacking in syntax variation and that could be improved to make it more engaging. A couple of the wikilinks do not have a space between them and the preceding word, but those typos can be easily fixed. The history section definitely needs some work. I'm seeing a lot of grammar errors. How Buddhism spread to each country (trade routes and etc) would be interesting to include in detail in the history section. The Khmer empire section is interesting but more similar subsections on other ways Buddhism spread would benefit the article. I agree with your decision to cross out the random, irrelevant section in the history section, but I think the crossed out part could make another sub-heading in the history section if organized properly. I'm having difficulty following the sections after the crossed out information. I think the sentence on the origins of Theravada Buddhism in SEA should be expanded and added to the history section. You do a very good job explaining Theravada Buddhist belief in SEA. The Buddhism in SEA today section presents interesting statistics in an organized way, and you did a good job making that section of the article less confusing and more legible. I think your article would benefit from a few more sources. Watzek has some great bibliographies on Buddhism that you could use to find some.
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