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It was very nice to see the original published section on musculature for reference, and explicit notes about things that are planned to be changed. I also really liked the fact that the group has already created different sections and the fact that the page linked to bird anatomy page. It may be helpful to find images that would serve as an example of the anatomy found within Columbidae family. Niemolej (talk) 00:53, 23 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I like the edits you guys have made so far. I think it was smart to link out the Anatomy section to the Bird Anatomy page. I think the ideas you have for moving forward are really good aand will improve your chosen page. Depending on how your dissection goes you might be able to upload images of your dissection pigeon for musculature reference. Armystud77 (talk) 16:32, 21 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I really like how you included the original musculature section then inserted what you were going to change below. There are some very good ideas so far, but it seems like you talked about what you wanted to edit instead of actually doing it. In your guy's game plan you talk about how you were going to insert the circulatory system as well but couldn't seem to find it in your edits. Overall good start! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kxr 11 (talkcontribs) 16:32, 22 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Mena's Review

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The Columbidae section is really well done. I like the idea of separating out the description section. The ideas about muscles are a good idea but I can’t get a very good idea of what you are adding, it felt more like a list than a draft. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ryansnow (talkcontribs) 22:22, 22 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Alyssa's Review

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I thought your section was very well organized and your list of sources was great, all looked very reliable. I liked that you included original content then explained the edits you planned to make. I only found one grammar edit which is shown below:

  • Original: "Columbidae are excellent fliers due to the lift provided by their large wings, which results in low wing loading; They are highly maneuverable in flight and have a low aspect ratio due to the width of their wings, allowing for quick flight launches and and ability to escape from predators, but at a high energy cost."
  • Edit: "Columbidae are excellent fliers due to the lift provided by their large wings, which results in low wing loading; They are highly maneuverable in flight and have a low aspect ratio due to the width of their wings, allowing for quick flight launches and the ability to escape from predators, but at a high energy cost."BioBuzz (talk) 03:36, 23 March 2019 (UTC)BioBuzz[reply]