User talk:RebekahJazdzewski/sandbox
Peer Review
You both have a great outline set up and it looks like your article will be very informative. We would suggest including more details in the introduction paragraph that clearly defines the term/topic. The first sentence can be expanded as this provides the first introduction to the topic and currently seems too broad. It would be great to include a more clear definition. We would recommend adding more details and including more transition sentences that can serve to make the paragraphs flow better and be more connected. Perhaps adding examples of some stressors can help with adding more depth. In addition, including some information about what will be discussed later in the article such as the stress responses. You currently mention one manner in which psychological trauma can be observed, fMRI, it would be great to have more information on other methods. Overall this is an excellent start, the outline looks great!
Mercedes & Celeste