Jump to content

User talk:RitzaP20/sandbox

Page contents not supported in other languages.
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

Your writing is great, but employs 12th grade writing, for an encyclopedic article it may be best to simplify the language a bit more in layman's terms to mitigate confusion or misunderstanding from readers.

You have successfully followed all of the criteria by having four sources, and writing at least 300 words for an entry.

I would clarify this one sentence: The researchers define unethical behavior as the presence of delay discounting and dehumanization. Delay discounting is the practice of assuming low future rewards.

Consider also researching the female adverse to these male studies: "Of existing studies, one of 359 college men found that high pornography use correlates to increased masculinity and body dissatisfaction."

This information on men's studies is very significant, but I would just reiterate my last point of looking for studies that included women and presenting that information in juxtaposition.

Very good writing though!