User talk:Schewevp/sandbox
Suggestions for Edits[edit]
Create more subtopics to break up topics like habitats You have two topics of habitats You have citations in your paragraph You're doing a good job, proud of you
My List of Things for Victoria to Consider Re-editing, but Not Things She HAS To Change[edit]
- First and foremost, pictures, pictures, pictures. People do say they are worth a million words. -Second, I would think about splitting up the sections that you have already into smaller subsections. This would not only make the article just have a nice overall flow, but it will also come off very professional looking. -Yo lastly, I think you could add more of those blue things that hyperlink to other wiki pages
Lead: - could remove 'swim and' in "Saltwater fish can swim and live alone or live in a large group together, called a school." - could include more of your paper in your lead section. like talk about your main points of your paper in the lead section, being sure not to give too much detail
Diet: - could link carnivores, herbivores, and omnivores to other wikipedia pages - could split this up to carnivores, herbivores, and omnivores and give more detail for each. i know its about diet, but splitting it up into sections could help
captivity: - could just add more subsections giving this section more structure to follow
habitats: - you have two of these, is that really needed???