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Nick's Comments

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In the introduction paragraph perhaps add a little detail about the usage of mini-grids.
Based on your comment on microgrids in the intro, I may add a small section detailing the differences between the microgrid and mini-grids.
The "Traditional Electric Grid section" seems a little disconnect from mini-grids, maybe link it somehow? Or combine that paragraph with the next section.

Millions of people remain without access to electricity today, and the U.N. Sustainable Development Goals commit the global community to provide a solution

Above sentence is a little awkward, might consider rephrasing.

the mini-grids larger size and flexibility

Should this not be smaller size?
I might elaborate more on the little section under technical components, or even remove it and let each subheading explain each section of the mini-grid.
Is the smart minigrid section supposed to be a higher level subheading?
Perhaps add a little more detail to the energy sources section as well as the smart mini-grid section.

Overall Thoughts

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The overall tone is good. Seems to be pretty neutral to me. A few sections could do with a little elaboration, or even bullet-points to make them seem larger. I might add a teeny bit more sourcing, but overall the sourcing seems good to me. --Nrjean (talk) 16:35, 24 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Sebastian's comments

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-good intro

-good neutral, unbiased, perspective

-Great sourcing

-the world map image's legend is a little hard to see so maybe change the size

-maybe rearrange the Technology section of the article, not sure the "Technical Components" header and introductory sentences are needed

-this is real picky but Motive for mini-grids sounds kind of awkward as a sub-header