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Peer-Review

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By: Dmvasconcelos (talk) 16:23, 6 April 2017 (UTC) and Vladams (talk) 16:25, 6 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Introduction

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  • The examples with the links to their Wikipedia pages are great to help further explain how crop diversity can threaten global food security.
  • The last paragraph is a great lead-in for the rest of the article, however you shouldn’t use ‘therefore’ because it is not an analysis-based article. Also, add a sentence or two at the end about the international organizations because you say one sentence and then end the intro.
  • We would suggest adding some more information or rewording the part about the two components. It can be hard to understand at first, we had to read it a few times.
  • Also, add citations and reference numbers to the facts in this introduction.