User talk:Taybegg91

Please leave me comments with your signature , Thank you Taybegg91 (talk) 22:41, 3 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review

Hello Taybegg91!

I thought that you picked an excellent article related to your topic that offers more insight into magical thinking and how it relates to development. However, I think that delving further into the results of the study with more clarity will add even more to the wikipage. I also think that closer proof-reading is necessary because I picked up a few errors like “there” instead of “their” and some confusing wording that can easily be changed. For example, “The study also uncovered disorders that arose as a result of magical thinking which included particularly panic-agoraphobia, separation anxiety and generalized anxiety.” If you drop “particularly” in favour of a colon, it will be much more accessible to the reader. Also, providing links to the wikipages on these disorders (found in the results) would offer more information to potential readers. Overall, I think that you are headed in the right direction and have made excellent choices in your changes. Good luck with the final edit! Khughe26 (talk) 04:01, 8 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]