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I think that your article does a very nice job outlining the history of mastectomy and explains Halstead's impact on breast cancer treatment. You start to talk about modern medicine's change in approach to breast cancer. Although you may have been planning on writing this later, I think it would be helpful to discuss the prominence of a lumpectomy as treatment for breast cancer. This directly ties into mastectomy, as it is still considered surgery, but a lumpectomy is not as radical as a mastectomy.

Your article is well organized and is grammatically correct. Furthermore, it provides relevant links to other articles.

Aswett2 (talk) 18:37, 15 March 2017 (UTC)

Yes, I was planning on writing a section on modern treatments for breast cancer. I will take into account your suggestions and will think about adding a section on lumpectomy. Vchan10 (talk) 12:15, 2 April 2017 (UTC)

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I really like the lead of your article. I think it does a great job in summarizing Radical Mastectomy in a succinct way underscoring its value, how it revolutionized the treatment of breast cancer by the removal of the breast, underlying chest muscle, and lymph nodes of the axilla as well as acknowledging the founder of the technique William Halstead. It is important that as you expand on your article by including not only the breakthroughs of the new procedure but also any flaws that were associated with it in order to maintain a neutral view. I know that you might not have gotten around to it, but I think its important that you describe the procedure in a couple sentences. Just a short summary of the procedure to inform the readers, nothing too long that would overcomplicate the article. Lastly, I like how you are avoiding telling the chronological development of the procedure by categorizing the article.--Jdesai3 (talk) 01:36, 27 March 2017 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jdesai3 (talk • contribs) 01:22, 27 March 2017 (UTC)

Yes, I haven't thought about mentioning flaws to the technique, so that's a good suggestion. I will also elaborate on the procedure. Vchan10 (talk) 12:15, 2 April 2017 (UTC)