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Hello, looks like your sandbox is empty. Please update me and Jen when this is fixed so we can peer edit your work! ATran34614 (talk) 01:03, 27 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]


Looks good!

What does the article (or section) do well?

-good job writing without bias -included a lot of facts/statistics

What changes would you suggest overall?

-add sources/citations to back up your stats -add image/chart/or graph Jpolster (talk) 15:47, 28 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]


What does the article (or section) do well? The section maintains neutrality well.

What changes would you suggest overall? Grammar: combatting – combating Content: “Recently” – include a date? Like a year to show how recent

What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? Words and phrases like “suspected” and “may affect” should be removed, because they are just speculation and not factual. You should also insert a source link for your two references.

ATran34614 (talk) 17:18, 28 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]