User talk:Yanke.emma/sandbox

I would like to make revisions to this page. These revisions would concern formatting and construct clarification. I would like to add a section about the different types of work-family spill-over that can occur, such as "positive work-family spill-over." — Preceding unsigned comment added by Babaker137 (talk • contribs) 16:47, 19 February 2013 (UTC) Babaker137 (talk) 15:19, 21 February 2013 (UTC)

I have added a section about the three most recognized types of work-family conflict. Babaker137 (talk) 16:46, 5 March 2013 (UTC)

The only thing that distracted me was the section titled “Workaholism.” The article seems pretty neutral. The section on gender was assumed to be mostly about women but this has changed recently within organizations so I believe that this area needs to be updated. I would say that the section regarding gender is a tad overrepresented and seems to take up a large part of the article page. Most of the citations or links can be found within the first paragraph in the article. There can definitely be more references made within the article due to the updates on the information within it. The information comes from journals or websites. The sources seem neutral, but the bias would have to be included when discussing women and workplace-family conflict due to a woman now becoming more socially accepted as a worker instead of a stay at home mom. The citations are a little out of date. They could be improved upon by finding more modern citations because these issues regarding the topic have changed over time. There is discussion about revisions to be made regarding adding in positive work family spill over. The article is part of numerous projects. One is with feminism, another is involved with sociology, and then there’s another occupational safety and health. It is rated as a start-class as well as low-importance. Yanke.emma (talk) 02:14, 13 February 2018 (UTC) Yanke.emma (talk) 02:13, 13 February 2018 (UTC)

Peer Edits

Your article looks great! I think the different sections you used really make the article flow nicely. It is very well written! A couple of critiques:

Should there be an apostrophe after work family conflict in the first paragraph?
Something to consider: In the opening paragraph, the statement "It is important for organizations and individuals to understand the negative consequences linked to work-family conflict." sounds like you are making that statement alone without evidence to me. However, I understand it goes with the next sentence. Maybe there is a way you can make these two flow a bit better.
Is there any specific sources that you got the two forms of conflict from? The first two paragraphs don't include citations

Great job!

Madgrimm (talk) 04:40, 5 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I'd say this article is really well written, well organized, and is sourced throughout. Here are the little critiques I can give:

Say something about how workaholism is a form where work-to-family conflict manifests with a source instead of it just randomly popping up as a whole segment on the page.
In the segment "Reducing Conflict" you could add a link some more description on the words "telework" and/or "telecommuting" because the general audience might not be familiar with these terms.

Wish I could be of more help, but it looks good!

Dadezmay (talk) 15:13, 5 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, I believe your article is solid, and just needs to add some sources for the information you gave on the topic. Perhaps you can add one somewhere in here “Alternatively, those who are perceived as having to divide their time (and their commitments) are seen not as dedicated to the organization. Those who are required to divide their time usually do so between work and family. As research has shown, a manager's perception of a subordinate's role and commitment to the organization is positively associated with the individual's promotability.” I know you add a citation at the very end of the paragraph, but perhaps add one sooner. Also, why is promotability highlighted red and links to somewhere weird? This was just one small thing I picked out, but I think you are neutral and have good information throughout!

Steinhau.natalie (talk) 15:25, 5 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Edits

In the section "forms of conflict" maybe you could add more citations on statements.
Maybe you could elaborate a little more on the relationship between "workaholism" and "work-family conflict".
Watch out for minor grammar mistakes. In the first paragraph you may want to add a space within the last sentence after the comma and before the word "decreased".

Overall your article so far looks GOOD! You have done a good job describing conflicts and relating them to your topic!

Christen.aaron (talk) 15:31, 5 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]