User talk:Yusur.alj/sandbox
- I loved how this wiki article was formatted. It was easy to read and understand from an average reader. You did great on citing a source after each paragraph, linking some keywords that are relevant, and having bullet points that made it clearer to read.
- I suggest maybe having a paragraph that briefly talks about the signs/symptoms rather than just a list of them. Maybe add more information instead of going straight to the point.
- Only part was I was confused was wouldn't blood in the stool (listed as one of the diagnoses) be one of the signs and symptoms rather than the diagnosis?
- Same with the signs/symptoms, briefly write a paragraph talking about the treatment and then listing specifics which is what you did.
--Asomo101 (talk) 02:46, 17 November 2020 (UTC) asomo101
- I think your best section was the signs and symptoms category. It was clear, precise, easy to read, and had the least amount of grammatical errors. I like that you listed everything that was relevant without listing too many symptoms.
- There are a few simple spelling errors throughout the article. For example, in the first sentence the word "occur" should be plural and not singular. The next sentence says "however it is can also..." this does not make sense. I would suggest maybe reading through what you have again and account for any spelling errors or punctuation errors.
- In the pathophysiology section I felt a little lost, it definitely has some grammar errors again and I think that plus the wording is making it a little confusing and hard to follow. I would recommend condensing what you have into easier ideas and then word it a little better.
- The diagnosis section should probably be a paragraph with explanation rather than bullet points. I probably would eliminate blood in stool because that is likely more of a symptom rather than a diagnosis.
Emily Lindquist (talk) 18:08, 18 November 2020 (UTC)
- Background is not a section. You need an abstract or "lead" and it should not have a heading.
- I'm confused by the last sentence of the background.
- Diagnosis could use some explanation, in addition to the list of tests.
- If it's not a bullet point, it needs to be a full sentence. There are a lot of sentence fragments here.
- Needs discussion about the development of the tumor in the mechanism section.
- Some discussion of treatment goals, etc, would be helpful. Again, some explanation beyond the bulleted list.
- The first sentence of prognosis is confusing. It doesn't seem to connect with your actual topic.
- Missing research section.
- Well-cited throughout.
- When you reuse a citation, reuse it in the citation manager. Do not add a new copy.
- I would encourage you to have someone read through this with you for clarity. I think that you have collected a lot of great information, but need to make sure that it hits the page in a way others can understand.