User talk:Za'atar94

Work section improvements

Discussion continued from Talk:Interpal

Hi, I was having a look at the 'Work' section of the Interpal page and I feel that the content and format of this section can be improved.

I have worked on this and a draft can be seen here. Here are my thoughts on this:

Interpal is notable for being the largest charity in the UK providing humanitarian relief to Palestinians, therefore I think it justifiable for the work section to be expanded to reflect this notability. To prevent any expansion becoming unbearably long I thought it a good idea to split the original section in two.
The first is ‘Mission and Values’ (This title is used in other charity articles so I have used it here but if anyone can think of a more appropriate one please suggest it!) This creates some background information which I think is important and relevant considering Interpal is a significant charity involved in an significant and unstable area.
NB: This section initially failed to mention that it is because of Interpal’s work in the Middle East that allegations of terrorist financing arose.
The second section is ‘Work’. This has good information in it which I have added to and improved its layout. This section is now given greater prominence because this is surely the most important part of the article considering that this is what it was founded for.

Do you agree that the suggested edit improves the article while maintaining its neutrality? Za'atar94 14:49, 15 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]