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Have been working on this start-class article and am looking for some constructive criticism. RM Gillespie 04:42, 1 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Kirill Lokshin

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Quite nice, overall. I've fixed up some of the more obvious formatting and categorization points. A few issues to consider, though:

  • Units, events, etc., should generally be linked the first time they're mentioned. For example, the Studies and Observations Group isn't linked, nor is the Tet offensive of 1969; the casual reader should be given an easy way of navigating to the background material on these.
  • I'd suggest using {{details}} in place of {{main}}, as it produces a less cryptic rendering.
  • A few points that need to be cited:
    • The quotes from Nixon at the end of the "Planning" section.
    • "Surprisingly, North Vietnamese forces did not oppose the evacuation, though they could easily have done so."
    • The paragraph starting with "John Shaw and other historians..." in the "Conclusion" section.
    • "Millions of Cambodians would pay the ultimate price as a result of those decisions."
    • (More generally, a few more citations in the "Supporting operations" and "Repercussions" sections might not be amiss.)
  • The self-references to the article should be reworded; e.g. "whose fate was basically ignored by all but a few historians listed below" → "whose fate was ignored by most historians".

Kirill Lokshin 05:39, 1 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]