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Addressed comments from Crisco 1492[edit]

  • Nineteen of the RAAF's fleet of 24 C-130s - per WP:ORDINAL, "comparable quantities should be all spelled out or all figures"
  • Air Officer Commanding Home Command - per SEAOFBLUE this should be avoided if possible.
    • De-linked Air Officer Commanding
  • Short PD 16/1 - Is this model worth a redlink?
    • Probably not: this seems to have only ever been a 'paper' design and the work cited here is the only reference I've been able to find on its existence, so it's unlikely to be notable. I imagine that it was a design developed specifically for the RAAF requirement, or which Short Brothers were hoping that the RAAF might fund. Nick-D (talk) 08:10, 7 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • as the other two types did not meet some of the most important elements of the requirement. - such as?
  • ad hoc - italics?
  • 14.7-million-pound contract - Above you give dollars and pounds. Why just pounds here?
    • The source didn't provide a conversion here, and as an economist I'm rather wary of doing my own conversions for things like this (it's an area where non-economists think its really easy, but it isn't). Nick-D (talk) 08:10, 7 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • for a cost of $86 million - this one's missing the pounds / failing to note that Australia converted to the dollar.
  • doppler navigation systems - worth linking?
  • Worth linking?
  • Project Peacemate - notable?
  • The Australian Government ordered - If you just have "the Government" above, why use the Australian Government here?
  • At the time the order for the twelve C-130Js was placed, the Government also took out options for a further 27 Super Hercules, - WP:ORDINAL again
  • The Hercules were also used to transport back to Australia the bodies of servicemen killed in Vietnam. - "back to Australia" looks to be in a wonky place.
  • seven C-130s and about 100 air and ground crew - WP:ORDINAL
  • Communist forces - Someone unfamiliar with the Vietnam war may not realise you mean N. Vietnam here.
  • soldiers were subsequently embarked - or should it be soldiers subsequently embarked
  • Consider standardising linking of political bodies (you link some countries, i.e. East Timor, but don't link several states and major cities).
  • deep maintenance - anything to link to (so we can see how it's different than regular maintenance)?
  • Iraq War and recent operations - the paragraph immediately preceding this one has some information about Operation Slipper (i.e. the Iraq War). Should it be reorganised?
  • An American contractor travelling on an Australian C-130 in Iraq was killed on 27 June 2004 when the aircraft was struck by gunfire shortly after it took off from Baghdad. - Is this the first combat fatality in an Australian Hercules? You don't seem to mention any earlier ones, or crashes
    • Can't be sure this was the first fatality on an Australian Herc (unless one of Nick's sources has that) but definitely been no crashes. I thought we covered that by saying "accident-free flying hours" or words to that effect when each model was retired but perhaps we need to revisit that. I'm not sure if we have a recent source highlighting that no Herc of any model has had an accident, but we can check... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 06:55, 8 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
      • No source Ian or I could find identifies any of the RAAF's C-130s as having suffered a significant accident (and I went looking for this). Ian and I discussed this during the article's development, and we also couldn't find anything which remarks specifically on the type's apparently excellent safety record in Australian service, so not much more can be said. No source stated that the death in 2004 was the first on the type - it seems likely that some soldiers being evacuated from Vietnam would have passed away in-flight given the types of aeromedical evacuation missions which were being conducted, but again no source confirms this. Nick-D (talk) 10:39, 8 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Australian Government - I think this should be Australian government, as it's not a proper name, but rather a generic noun
  • Comprehensiveness: Number of crashes, accidents, incidents, and/or combat losses? Fatalities?
  • Duplicate links: aerial refueling, Operation Slipper
  • Otherwise that looks to be it. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:26, 8 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]