Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/Pilgrim at Tinker Creek/archive1

Lede

• "... in 1999 it was listed in Modern Library's 100 Best Nonfiction Books." For some reason this wording bothers me. It implies that it was a list, but it could have been an individual publication or whatnot. I feel as if you are missing a descriptive noun.

• How about, "it was included in Modern Library's list of 100 Best Nonfiction Books"? María (yllosubmarine) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

Background

• "After she would finish a chapter, she would bring it to Moore to critique." -- Perhaps "After finishing a chapter, she would bring it to Moore to critique." or "Each chapter she wrote was brought to Moore for critique upon completion."

• Sure; changed to your first suggestion. María (yllosubmarine) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

• "Moore in particular recommended that she expand the book's first chapter..." -- As opposed to?

• Not sure what you mean? I don't see it as oppositional -- more like "particularly", "especially", "specifically". Would one of these words work better? María (yllosubmarine) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

• Specifically seems to work better in my opinion.

• Changed. María (yllosubmarine) 14:03, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

• "... was dedicated to Dillard's husband, Richard." -- Do we really need his name here again? His name was given in the first couple of paragraphs.

• Good point; removed. María (yllosubmarine) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

Summary

• "In the afterword of the 1999 Harper Perennial Modern Classics edition..." -- Is the link to "afterword" necessary?

• Eh, it doesn't hurt. :) María (yllosubmarine) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

Style and genre

• Overlinking? I count three links to Walden thus far

• I removed a couple. María (yllosubmarine) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

Themes

• Theodicy - perhaps a very brief definition for those like me who have never heard the word?

• Sure, added. María (yllosubmarine) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

Reception and awards

• Walden is linked again.

• I kept it in the image caption, just in case people don't want to scroll up. María (yllosubmarine) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

• If I remember the guidelines correctly, the date (1854) should be with the first mention of Walden above (at the very least in the background section.)

• Added to the lead. María (yllosubmarine) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

• "... Tickets for a Prayer Wheel (1974, University of Missouri Press)" -- Worth a redlink?

• Sure, added. María (yllosubmarine) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

• Apparently it's an album :-/. Perhaps Tickets for a Prayer Wheel? Crisco 1492 (talk) 13:53, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

• Whoops, changed to Tickets for a Prayer Wheel (book). María (yllosubmarine) 14:03, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

• A very interesting read and I look forward to supporting once I no longer have any issues (mostly nitpicks, looking back). Crisco 1492 (talk) 11:00, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

• Thanks so much for the review, Crisco! I really appreciate it. Just one question above, if you don't mind. María (yllosubmarine) 13:24, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

• You're very much welcome. Crisco 1492 (talk) 13:53, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

• All done, I think? María (yllosubmarine) 14:03, 6 March 2012 (UTC)