Talk:Cork Graham

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Citations[edit]

I reworded part of the article to reflect what one of the citations say.--Work permit (talk) 00:35, 1 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I've added a total of three sources and added material from them. I've deleted many (not all) unreferenced claims, and removed most (not all) wp:peacock language from what remains.--Work permit (talk) 03:55, 1 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

From all sources I've gathered, Cork is notable for being imprisoned in Vietnam when caught looking for treasure buried by Captain Kidd. I find no other mention of his exploits in wp:rs. I'm not saying they didn't happen, just that they aren't what makes him notable in a Wikipedia sense.--Work permit (talk) 05:32, 1 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Photographer[edit]

I added "past" to combat photographer because it mentions it in the ICCA link '83-'86, which I assume is years of activity. Wikicops (talk) 07:27, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox[edit]

The Bamboo Chest does not satisfy the criteria for notability under Wikipedia:Notability (books). As such, we can't list it in the notableworks entry in the {{Infobox Writer}} template. I'm replacing the writer template with {{Infobox Person}}--Work permit (talk) 05:21, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Fines[edit]

All three newspaper articles call it a fine, NOT a ransom. The Washington Post article from 1984 says they were "assessed each a $10,000 fine". It later says he " has not yet been released although the fine has been paid". It later states they were "assessed each a $10,000 fine." The 1987 article says Graham was "released in 1984 after payments of fines totaling $10,000." The NY times says "Mr. Graham was released after his family paid a $10,000 fine." The 1984 Washington post article does also say they "are being held for what one western diplomat here bluntly calls "ransom" -- but the Vietnamese insist is a fine-- of $10,000 each for their transgression.". One diplomat said " "The Vietnamese think we are a charity," one said. The fine, he said "is essentially a ransom," and neither government would pay it." I'm editing to reflect that--Work permit (talk) 06:36, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Is it a ransom according to the "one western diplomat" or fine according to Vietnamese? Wikicops (talk) 07:22, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
All three western newspapers called it a fine. One paper then went on to quote the diplomat. Please read carefully what I said above.--Work permit (talk) 07:27, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

An interesting sidenote, according to Title 19, USC 1459, someone entering the United States illegally is subject to a $5,000 civil penalty (for the first violation, and $10,000 for each subsequent violation) in addition to a criminal fine of not more than $5,000, or imprisonment for not more than 1 year, or both.--Work permit (talk) 08:40, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Lede[edit]

The article does need a lede, per wp:mos. The only coverage of Graham in reputable third party sources is regarding the treasure hunt and imprisonment incident. --Work permit (talk) 06:49, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Quoting Wikipedia:Lead#First_sentence "The article should begin with a short declarative sentence, answering two questions for the nonspecialist reader: "What (or who) is the subject?" and "Why is this subject notable?" Graham is not notable as an author. He's notable for being imprisoned in Vietnam for illegal entry while looking for treasure buried by Captain Kidd. I think the lede sentence should read:

Cork Graham, also known as Frederick Graham Jr. is an former combat photographer imprisoned in Vietnam for illegal entry while looking for treasure buried by Captain Kidd.

All things considered, a single sentence is probably enough.--Work permit (talk) 12:20, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Brilliant! Wikicops (talk) 16:14, 3 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Sacred art of hunting[edit]

Didn't think it did from comparing other small book collection authors, like Po Bronson. Wikicops (talk) 07:17, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
From what I can see, his contribution is less then two pages. The section called "Moose hunt, healing hunt". Is that what you mean?--Work permit (talk) 07:25, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Yes. It appears to be a piece about his time in Central America. I also read his explanation of the book here on his PTSD blog: http://bamboochest.corkgraham.com/puppy-love/ Looks like a horribly edited/designed book in that it's hard to tell it's his piece from a quick scan Wikicops (talk) 07:32, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Yes. All the other author contributions appear to be about 2 pages. Wikicops (talk) 07:35, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
In that case you've cited it incorrectly. I'll cite it correctly in a moment.--Work permit (talk) 07:39, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

OK done. Now please discuss the Lede--Work permit (talk) 07:46, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

And there I thought it looks ALL great and I didn't want to mess with it at all! I'm beat. If you want to add all the repetitive info into lede, I'm not going to argue. I just think it looks inviting and tight to just have what Cork Graham is known for now in one declaritive statement, and then explain the rest as you've done so well in the rest of the text. If the "format" is to have a longer lede, then we should also do work with other articles, such as Bronson's and others I had run across in trying to edit this one. Wikicops (talk) 07:52, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
It really does need a lede. To be frank, the ONLY thing Graham is noted for is the Captain Kidd incident. Most of the rest of the article would be deleted by a more strict editor. I'll put back the lede, and take a look at Po tomorrow for you.--Work permit (talk) 07:58, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Ok. Thanks. Wikicops (talk) 08:00, 2 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Final restructuring[edit]

I've rewritten the article using all sources I could find through Factiva and NewsLibrary.com. That's a total of 10 articles. I have serious reservations including anything sourced from Bamboo Chest. Graham and amazon quote The Mercury News as reviewing the book with the quote "Make way Indiana Jones, here comes Freddie Graham Jr.". Yet I find no such article by the Mercury News (and I have found many others). Charlton Heston is quoted as saying "I'll look for it on the best seller list.", yet no verification from wp:rs that he ever read, let alone reviewed, the book. Looking through the book, there are no third party references that can be validated as well. All in all, I think it's best to use other articles as references for this one. As I stated above, the only thing Graham is notable of, in a wikipedia sense, is that he was imprisoned in Vietnam for illegally entering the country while looking for treasure buried by Captain Kidd. --Work permit (talk) 03:13, 5 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Grammar[edit]

I added a couple of words to the introductory line, as it was implying he remains imprisoned, rather than that he was.

Thank you very much--Work permit (talk) 20:47, 9 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

But did they find anything?[edit]

Surely this is a vital piece of information? Wolstan Dixie (talk) 10:27, 19 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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