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|To-do list for Developmental psychology:|
- 1 Image
- 2 Evolutionary process
- 3 Removed mention of movie "Sixth Sense"
- 4 Psychology side bar (template)
- 5 Steiner's descriptions of child development
- 6 Criticism Criticism
- 7 History
- 8 Intelligence
- 9 Quality
- 10 Comment from subpage
- 11 Template:Humandevelopment
- 12 The point of the Prenatal section, under Stages of development
- 13 Order of entries in "Theorists & theories" section
- 14 Gruber, 1977?
- 15 Language development in isolated deaf children
- 16 Child Psychology
- 17 Improving this article
- 18 On the Removal of Ecological Systems Theory section
- 19 Roles
- 20 Question
- 21 Early childhood and onward
- 22 Sensorimotor development detail
- 23 New to Wikipedia
- 24 Social Context, Cultural Context, and Socioeconomic Context
- 25 Class Project Proposals
- 26 PSY 401 C: Peer Reviews for Lindy.williams
- 27 Stages of moral development
- 28 Peer review
Is the image entirely relevent?--22.214.171.124 21:28, 6 April 2006 (UTC)
How about an image that portrays a life-span approach to developmental psychology? --Mcfa0750 04:22, 5 September 2006 (UTC)
Evolutionary process is continuos and develops in a step-wise fashion. This should also applies to the evolutionary development of cognition. It is my belief that cognition is developed in modular blocks. As evolutionary process progresses from species to species, these blocks are preseved, modified, expanded, etc. Human brain is at the top of such process. -- (126.96.36.199) 20:40, 4 September 2003
Removed mention of movie "Sixth Sense"
I removed a recent addition that featured the movie "Sixth Sense" as a popular culture reference to Developmental Psychology. I really liked this film, but it's just not related to Developmental Psychology (which is an area of scientific study). This movie does feature Child Psychopathology (which is a mental health profession). Maybe that would be a better page for this? -- khg 08:41, 15 April 2004 i dont knw anytin about dat.............................................
Psychology side bar (template)
A side bar was added to the article about Developmental Psychology. It contained a list of some areas, sub areas, and therapeutic approaches of Psychology. There are two reasons I felt it should be removed. First, it cluttered the article without any real benefit. There is already a set of hierarchical categories to help people find out about other areas of Psychology. You can also already navigate directly to related areas of Psychology from the final paragraph. Second, I am concerned that this side-bar is convoluted and biased in its structure. An example of it being convoluted is listing both therapeutic techniques (e.g., psychodynamic) and research areas (e.g., cognitive psychology) as “approaches.” An example of bias is the way it gives a select group of sub-areas in Psychology (e.g., Evolutionary, Self) the same status as broad areas of research (e.g., Cognitive, Social , Developmental). I tried to find a page to edit the side-bar, but couldn’t. Could someone please explain where the discussion and development of these things is happening? -- khg 15:03, 1 November 2004
- The Psychology side bar (template) was already here when I looked recently (November 2005), but I added it to several other pages 19 November 2005. Although I don't agree that it adds nothing (and neither would the many others who've made or approve of similar templates for other subjects), I think it's worth having a conversation about its contents. I saw a claim somewhere that the items included were based on a review of what was most often referenced in textbooks (the template does not contain "self psychology" now), but I can't find that comment now; it's not on the template's page. -DoctorW 10:56, 20 November 2005 (UTC)
- DoctorW, thank you for showing me where to go to edit the side-bar. Somebody added the sidebar back soon after I removed it. I never felt it worth continuing to debate. But I still feel it's clutter. The fields that are related to Developmental Psychology are listed in the text with direct links. At its best, that makes the side-bar redundant. And I still feel the bar is biased. Notice how it puts Humanistic, Gestalt, Evolutionary, Sensory, and Linguistics on par with areas like Clinical, Developmental, Social, and Cognitive. The former are arguably sub-topics of the latter. I know you might make convincing arguments that some of the former deserve to be viewed as independent branches of Psychology. But shouldn't the inter-relationships between sub-disciplines be a topic for the relevant articles? I just feel sticking these things into a side-bar implicitly endorses one way of organizing psychological knowledge. -- khg, 6 January, 2006
Steiner's descriptions of child development
There is a question as to whether these should be included; one user removed them with the justification that 'developmental psychology comes from a specific literature of peer-reviewed scientific research'. This is an artificial distinction; Steiner's model of development is more widely used practically than most of those cited. I have restored the reference. Hgilbert 01:25, 4 January 2006 (UTC)
- I'm sorry; the fact that Developmental psychology is a scientific endeavor based on the conversations among researchers grounded in research (versus models that are not subjected to scientific scrutiny and are not a part of the main conversations researchers are engaged in) is not an artificial distinction. It is fundamental to whether the model belongs on this page versus another page. Whether or not Steiner's model can be considered to be used "widely" or not in education is irrelevant. If you think it is, make your argument for adding something about it on an "education" page. Steiner's model is certainly not a prominent one in Developmental psychology! I am familiar with its role as an educational model, but as far as I know (and I'm a Developmental psychologist), it plays no role at all in Developmental psychology. Also, I notice that all of the pages you (hgilbert) have edited have to do with Rudolf Steiner; you should be careful not to veer over the line into POV advocacy--this is an encyclopedia that strives for NPOV (see also Wikipedia:Neutral point of view). -DoctorW 00:56, 5 January 2006 (UTC)
- I have reread the Neutral point of view article carefully, and it clearly states that Wiki's version of neutrality is to include all relevant viewpoints. To exclude one because you do not agree with it or have not heard of it is not adequate. Steiner's is a serious model of child development, taught at a number of universities and colleges that I know about; there are a large number of book published that cover his model; there are a large number of educational institutions that use it practically (more than 2,500 to date, and increasing rather than decreasing). I know of no serious refutations of his work, which is in harmony with (but preceded) some of the other theories you do mention. I am not trying to put more emphasis on this model in the article than it deserves, which would be breaking NPOV; a factual mention is not a promotion of NPOV. I suggest you reread Wiki's policy. -- Hgilbert
- You are continuing to ignore the title of this page, "Developmental psychology." It is not "Education." In over 8 years of bachelor's, master's, and doctoral course work in Developmental psychology at leading universities, and in my years of research afterward, I never heard Steiner's name or a reference to his model mentioned once. If Developmental psychologists completely ignore someone's work, it cannot be considered a part of Developmental psychology, no matter how "serious" you and other non-specialists think it is. I don't have anything against Steiner's model, I really don't. Perhaps there are Developmental psychology textbooks or review articles in peer-reviewed Developmental psychology journals that I don't know about that refer to it as a major theory. The responsibility is yours to cite such Developmental psychology sources. If you find such sources that refer to it as a minor theory, perhaps you could find some place in this article for it that's more appropriate than among the major theories. -DoctorW 05:12, 5 January 2006 (UTC)
- HGilbert, I understand how you can feel Rudolf Steiner and Waldorf schooling are important, practical, ideas that you would like raise people's awareness of. But DoctorW really is right to say that this article is about Developmental Psychology, not educational philosophy. Like DoctorW, I also have a Ph. D. in Developmental Psychology and I agree completely that Steiner's work is not part of the scientific field, Developmental Psychology. Maybe you feel DoctorW and I just so happen to share the same idiosyncratic bias? To make sure we don't, I just looked up Rudolf Steiner in the name index / references of every Developmental Psychology textbook I have in my office. Across 16 distinct textbooks I did not find even one mention of Rudolf Steiner. That is, not only did his work fail to get into the substance of one of these books, but it did not even get into a side box that many books have which show important links between Developmental Psychology and other fields. These books vary in approach, difficulty, year published, and focus; they include 10 introductory books (Baldwin, 1980; Bee, 2000; Berger & Thompson, 2000; DeHart, Stroufe, Cooper, 2000; Feldman 2003; Gardner, 1982; Heatherington, Park, Gauvain, & Locke, 2006; LeFrancois, 1995; Papalia, Gross, Feldman, 2003; Santrock, in press; Siegler, DeLoache, & Eisenberg, 2003; ) , 2 advanced textbooks (Slater & Bremner, 2003; Smith, Cowie, & Blades, 2003) and 4 Cognitive Development books (Bjorklund, 1989; Flavell, Miller, & Miller, 2002; Siegler & Alibali, 2005, Small 1983). There are many things we could quibble about in this article, but Steiner's place in it is not one of them. His work just is not Developmental Psychology. -- khg, 6 January, 2006
- I certainly understand both your perspectives. Let me take another tack. Would you say that a description of child development that articulated three stages of psychological growth- an earliest stage of concrete, sensory-based representations; a second stage (beginning at 6 or 7 years of age) of pictorial thinking, and a third stage (beginning at 12-14 years of age) of abstract thinking - belongs to developmental psychology? If so, would you say that someone who articulated such a theory (articulating three sub-stages for each of the stages I have listed here), and did so before Piaget, has done work in developmental psychology? Most curious about your answer, Hgilbert 21:50, 8 January 2006 (UTC)
- I don't see the Steiner thing at all. RickM Oct. 27, 2006
The page asserts that "For instance, results from twin and adoption studies indicate that IQ and the Big Five personality traits are heritable, meaning that they run in families due to genetics." Though a citation needed tag is present, I'm going to remove this sentence, becuase it doesn't flow from the surrounding sentences which are more reasoned, and flow, and furthermore, this kind of language fundamentally misunderstands the purpose and strength of the heritability indices. These studies, which are fundamentally no different than 19th century studies by Francis Galton, measure concordance of traits, given known genetic variation, and although we know that genes must surely play a role (as they do) these tests prove very little about genetics, and often prove that developmental and contextual forces play some role. Though this is also without proper citation, I'm pretty sure that adoptive siblings have higher "heritability" concordances for IQ and Big Five traits than first cousins. Thought I think that some measure of balance between nature and nurture perspectives is appropriate in this article, I think that claims about the explanatory power of genetic information shouldn't be over estimated, or recklessly deployed. Tychoish —Preceding comment was added at 04:07, 7 November 2007 (UTC)
I have made a modest attempt to provide some historical background to the existing article. Please feel free to modify (especially to add to) this!!! I hope all feel that Shakespeare, Rousseau and Steiner -despite not being professional or empirical psychologists - do belong to the tradition of describing psychology developmentally. Hgilbert 16:59, 15 January 2006 (UTC)
- I just want to commend Hgilbert on a job well done. Experts on the intellectual figures mentioned (and their relation to developmental psychology) can edit and expand this new historical background section - a welcome addition - and Steiner's being mentioned briefly in this historical context seems appropriate (certainly much more so than in the introductory paragraph). -DoctorW 03:13, 16 January 2006 (UTC)
Where is any information on intelligence and the use of IQ tests? This seems to be a POV agenda. Please add them, if you can't I will. Let me know.--Tstrobaugh 02:19, 30 July 2006 (UTC)
I'm very surprised this was rated as a B. Whoever did so must not have read the article, it is very low quality. I think this needs to be greatly expanded, reworded to be more neutral (not to mention free of typos) which I have started off by editing two sections. I think we need input of some real psychologists and psychiatrists here, or at least some textbooks respected in the field.
This reads like a grooming guide, is very generic, and unscientific. For example, in the adolescense section, it says the person 'has' to develope romantic relationships. This is simply not true. Rather than a guide on how to raise, it should remain psychology, which is ANALYSIS, not treatment or guidelines, which is how it is currently. Tyciol 16:47, 23 October 2006 (UTC)
Comment from subpage
Obviously Developmental Psychology deals with becoming mature (psychologically). I often find people referring to this, His response was immature, or, Her behavior was mature.
I find this area needs careful examination and explanation - I suggests a topic of its own, although one may already exist. Often it involves Projection [] and other defence mechanisms, but to cover this aspect properly I think it needs to be brought together under a healthy, rather than a patholigical, approach. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 188.8.131.52 (talk • contribs)
The point of the Prenatal section, under Stages of development
I don't see any developmental psychology being discussed under the "Prenatal" section. It seems to be about prenatal physical development rather exclusively. Or is there a point I'm missing? Figma 20:11, 21 December 2006 (UTC)
- I have attempted to address this question, I hope the edit is useful. I thought the previous content related mostly to pre-natal development and was dealt with at length in other articles such as that one. Some content did not seem to relate clearly to Developmental psychology so removed. Finally Primitive reflexes covers the full list of reflexes in more depth, I hope the summary style is o.k. Comments welcomed.Finereach (talk) 21:47, 12 October 2009 (UTC)
Order of entries in "Theorists & theories" section
Although it may be difficult to agree on an order, I've kept the cognitive theorists first (Piaget, Kohlberg, Bruner), followed by the "social context" theorists (Vygotsky, Bronfenbrenner), then Kagan, then the attachment theorists (Bowlby, Harlow, Ainsworth), and finally historical theories of development (Erikson, Freud). Please propose a rationale for significant changes. -DoctorW 00:00, 7 January 2007 (UTC)
This is extensively cited, yet no link or reference is provided. I am having difficulty tracking down what study the article reference. Reaper Man
Language development in isolated deaf children
According to this article, Nicaraguan deaf children who were formerly isolated from other deaf people could not develop a true sign language on their own, but when brought to schools with others they invented their own language -- 'the "source of language is within us but that the conditions for its emergence depend crucially upon community."' http://www.signwriting.org/forums/research/rese004.html I'm not sure if this is worth including, or, if so, what to say about it. Any input? Sten for the win 00:28, 3 June 2007 (UTC)
- on the origins of language you might look at Susanne Langer, Philosophy in a New Key, which is about symbol formation but contains refs to Wittgenstein, Cassirer etc and various anthropological studies. It is quite an old book (1940's) but the philosophical basis is there and can give an idea of what areas might have been developed subsequently. ArtLit 09:30, 7 June 2007 (UTC)
I don't think child psychology and developmental psychology are the same thing. Developmental psychology looks at the psychological forces that affect a person as he ages throughout the lifespan. Child psychology, while informed by developmental psychology, deals specifically with understanding the psychology of and treating pathologies in children. I do not believe that Child Psychology should redirect here. Steve carlson 04:35, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
Improving this article
The current article looks like a mess to me. I guess we first need to clean it up a bit and then we can see where it can be expanded. I would opt for a (commonly made) distinction between physiological, cognitive, and social development. Also, we can distinguish between child development and life-span development (most of developmental psychology is aimed at children, but that's not its sole purpose anymore). Any thoughts? -- Cugel 08:14, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
I agree that parts of this article need major work, particularly the Early Childhood and Childhood headings, which cite no research of any kind, and are each only one paragraph in length. Possibly the Infancy section should be a model for the following sections, at least in terms of depth.
184.108.40.206 16:40, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
The criticisms at the top of the page (by the orange exclamation point)are contradictory. They need to be updated by some kind of consensual process when substantive changes or improvements are made. Similarly, the quality "grade" of this article seems stuck at "Start". That may have been true in 2007, but that was then and this is now (2013). You folks need to have more confidence in your process. Don't wear the "fairness-in-documentation" persona like a hair-suit. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 220.127.116.11 (talk) 19:54, 17 March 2013 (UTC)
On the Removal of Ecological Systems Theory section
I've removed the Ecological Systems Theory section for several reasons. This is not a comment on the legitimacy of the theory, but an attempt to better organize this page.
The primary organizational structure of the page is by age: Infancy, Early Childhood, Childhood, etc. This is a useful way to organize, because under each heading, major positions in Dev. Psychology can be compared. If Ecological systems theory has a specific position on Infancy that differs from other theories, it could fit into this age-oriented organizational structure by adding, "Ecological Systems Theory, on the other hand, states that infants..."
A second reason for the removal is that the section does not suggest an experimental basis for the theory.
Dialectric 17:08, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
The second reason (lack of cited experimental evidence) is a legitimate complaint, but by that logic, why not delete the childhood and early childhood sections, as well? Lack of cited (but likely extant) evidence is a cause for putting in  flags, not for deleting ideas wholesale.
The first reason is rubbish. There are clearly theories of development that pertain to the nature of development itself, regardless of age, or that divide up the lifespan in different ways than age. Ignoring whole branches of a field just to keep the headings of a page pretty is irresponsible and misleadingly reductionist. 18.104.22.168 (talk) 04:57, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
Whilst it is only right that the role of fathers and new developments in that area should recieve proper attention, it does seem odd that the role of mothers only warrants four lines.Fainites barley 21:46, 7 March 2008 (UTC)
Way back I took a general psychology class, and we talked a bit about human development. I think we talked about a stage in which human children come to realize that a tool can be used in other ways besides the single function it was designed for. For example, a person might need to tighten a screw, but they don't have a screwdriver handy, so they use the tip of a butter knife or the side of a coin instead.
And I thought there was also a term for an impairment or disability in which a person lacked this understanding, and avoided using tools except for their primary function. So if they didn't have that screwdriver they wouldn't know what to do, they wouldn't be able to figure out that they could use something else.
Does this sound familiar to anyone? Is it on wikipedia right in front of my face and I can't find it? I want to do some research into it.
-=-=-=-=-=-=- It is widely accepted however, that ACDC and other loud rock music is not good for an infant's state of mind either. Gimme a break! At least gimme a citation! —Preceding unsigned comment added by 22.214.171.124 (talk) 22:39, 16 October 2008 (UTC)
Early childhood and onward
The focus on schooling is ethnocentric, but I hate screwing the article up with templates.
Sensorimotor development detail
I have summarised this detail to Theory of cognitive development, where it has been for about a month with no objections. I have tried to preserve/integrate existing text in my edit. The rationale is to try to make the section more concise and put the detail in a directly relevant article. Finereach (talk) 09:56, 15 November 2009 (UTC)
New to Wikipedia
Hello!! I'm new to this and I'm doing a project for a class. I have been looking at the affects of stress on child development and wondered if it could be fit into this article. I was thinking of starting a general section on the some of the theories (PTSD in children, affects of cumulative stress...) that could be expanded upon later. If anyone has a better idea of where this kind of information should go, please let me know. I'm open to suggestions! Thank you! Galeri26 (talk) 02:57, 29 November 2011 (UTC)
Social Context, Cultural Context, and Socioeconomic Context
Hey everyone, I notice something strange about this article. In the first paragraph, the article says, "3 major contexts to consider when analysing child psychology are: social context, cultural context, and socioeconomic context." Until recently, this section had a link to the stub, Social environment. Now, I notice the terms "social context, cultural context, and socioeconomic context" no longer have a link, and are not explicated in a robust, substantial, or organized way. I suspect the link to Social environment was removed because the stub was not very helpful - the validity of the content was vague and the citation was expired and uncredible.
Here is what I propose: Let's get "Social Environment" back on its feet, and/or link "social context, cultural context, and socioeconomic context" to more robust articles so that readers can get a valid and useful understanding of these important topics.
Currently: (1) there is no article about "social context, cultural context, and socioeconomic context", 'and' (2) I have begun work on the article and discussion page for Social environment. I hope you'll check it out and help me get moving on this important and related topic. One suggestion is that Social environment, or more precisely something like "Social Location", helps us and psychologists explain the impact of systemic, internalized, and sublimated oppression on human development and psychological pathology. Thanks!
Class Project Proposals
As a class project we are editing this wikipedia page. We are interested in editing not only some of the sections (theories and theorist, research methods and life stages of psychological development) but also some of the ways in with topics have been organized. It appears that this article's sections are poorly titled and lack the ability to convey a cohesive conceptual understanding to a broad audience about developmental psychology. There is also a lack of references throughout the page and would therefore like to add more citations to it.
One of the things we are interested in doing is changing the way the theorists and theories sections is organized. The list that is hyperlinked does not match that which is described below and we would like it to. We would like to redo that list and describe those theories and theorist in the same order presented in the list. One concern we have is how should this list be represented. Ideas that we have had are making the list in chronological order, categorizing them by general theories (ex psychosexual, psychosocial....) and then naming all the individual theories and theorists found within them, or naming the the separate theories in alphabetical order and mentioning all the theorists that have had a hand in it. Being that sometimes theorists have a hand in different theories we would like to avoid making the list based on the theorists. Also, considering most, if not all, of these theorists and theories have their own wiki pages how much detail should we put into their descriptions? Should we glaze over it and only name terms and stages or should we give definitions and briefly describe them? If someone could please give us their opinion on this that would be great.
We also noticed that in this sections someone has made second topic for ecological systems theory and we would like to delete the one that is bulleted. They have also incorporated a nature/nurture and mechanisms of development topic which doesn't seem to belong under the theorists and theories section. We will not be working to fix those two topics but would at least like to give it a different heading look to remove it from looking as if though it is part of that section.
We also would like to make some changes in the life stages of psychological developmental section do to a couple grammatical errors we came across while going through this section. Also we felt like the infant section under life stages of psychological development could use some work like we could elaborate more on what infant perception really is, revise the bullets under infant perception due to a lack of clarity in some of the information and lack of organization/flow, combine the pain with the touch bullet, and to include the small section of language and the next main topic of critical periods of development in the introduction of infancy. Sections such as toddlerhood and early adolescence are seriously lacking in references. The references that are currently attached also need to be revised to make sure they appropriatly belong to the text. We would look for secondary sources that add substance to the secions that are lacking of important information.
The last part we would like to edit is the section entitled under "Research Methods". Overall, we propose that this section needs to be better organized and the first important edit that we would like to make is to change the title to "Research Methods in Developmental Psychology". From there, we create a subsection entitled "Research Methods" in which we added the different research approaches used normally such as "experimental design", "correlational", "case studies" etc. and elaborated on how they differed as well as their strengths and limitations. After that, we added a "Research Designs" subsection header and elaborated on some of the information that was previously posted there. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Koryna22 (talk • contribs) 21:42, 11 March 2013 (UTC)
- Welcome to Wikipedia! Looks like you're planning to do a huge job. As for your question about the theorists and theories section, I would personally recommend not to put too much detail into their descriptions. In some ways, writing an article such as this one is like trying to fit a whole big book into a couple of pages. A general comment: sources are important, and I hope you know that Wikipedia articles should not be based on WP:primary sources, but on reliable, published secondary sources (for instance, journal reviews and professional or advanced academic textbooks) and, to a lesser extent, on tertiary sources (such as undergraduate textbooks). WP:MEDRS describes how to identify reliable sources for medical information, which is a good guideline for many psychology articles as well. With friendly regards and good luck! Lova Falk talk 08:32, 14 March 2013 (UTC)
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PSY 401 C: Peer Reviews for Lindy.williams
Based on Dr. KM's instructions on giving peer reviews:
(a) Type of progress #: 4
(b) clearly written and easy to follow; included different factors, such as ethnicity, in parenting style that enriched the understanding of parenting style; explained what the results meant so that everyone could understand
(c) & (d) In the first sentence, please include some examples for parenting variables (e.g., gender? age?) and child outcomes (academic/athletic achievements?) so that readers can understand what you are talking about.
Is there any specific citation for Strange Situation Procedure (SSP)? Sometimes, you need to cite specific authors who developed that procedure.
Again, in the Parenting Style section, please include some examples for maladaptive outcomes of authoritarian style.
In the Parenting Style, instead of jumping into authoritative parenting, start with some opening sentences, such as defining parenting style or simply saying that you are going to explain two types of parenting style.
Also, if you want, you can divide the Parenting Style section into two subsections - one with authoritative style and another with authoritarian style so that readers can compare those two styles.
(e) Readability #: 4
Stages of moral development
In this section, the following is written:
Theories of morality that stem from Jean Piaget’s cognitive-developmental viewpoint emphasize shifts in the type of reasoning that individuals use in making moral decisions. Changes in the content of the decision they reach or the actions they take as a result does no occur.
Now, of course, as children grow older, they shift in the type of reasoning used to make moral decisions. But to state that the content of the decision they reach or the actions they take as a result does no occur seems highly unlikely. When faced with a moral dilemma, due to shifts in reasoning, a three year old might act in a different way than a ten year old, who might act in a different way than an adult. I don't have access to the source (by the way, what is the page number???) but could anybody, please check this out? Lova Falk talk 09:31, 28 April 2013 (UTC)
- Because nobody answered, I removed this text and copypasted a few lines from Lawrence Kohlberg's stages of moral development. Lova Falk talk 13:56, 21 June 2013 (UTC)
Based on Dr. KM's instructions on giving peer reviews:
(b). I like the accessible nature of the language - it makes attachment theories applicable to parenting rather than seeming like an unattainable theory, so well done!
(c) and (d). Introduction: - I like the clear description of the four attachment theories, but it might be helpful to change how you present them – i.e. instead of in paragraph form, make a bulleted list so that the four types are clearly distinguished and then followed by their descriptions. - The paragraph is also quite long, so splitting it up into two or three smaller paragraphs would make it less daunting and easier to read – perhaps by adding bullet points or something, you could split those up. - You mention daycare as one way children can find positive emotional development – does that extend to nannies or siblings? Maybe including a few other avenues besides parents if research proves that.
Parenting Styles: - Are there going to be more parenting styles than just authoritative? If so, perhaps also breaking those up into mini-sections or bullet points would be helpful. - I would move the sentence “this style can also have varying outcomes depending on ethnicity” above the sentence starting with “among African-American adolescents” since it encompasses that section. That way, the citations following the two claims about African-Americans and Asian Americans will follow and back up that claim.
Minor Changes: - Introduction: move the period in the first sentence to after “outcomes” and inside of the citation. o 3rd sentence: add “an” and remove the “s” in “reactions” - “monitor an infant’s reaction” to parallel with the phrasing in the next sentence. o Midway through the paragraph with the sentence “mothers who are attentive to their infants” – add a comma after “needs” - Make sure that all periods go inside of the citations instead of outside.