Talk:Media depictions of body shape
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Hi Channinged5 you're topic is really interesting. I've taken some classes that have touched on this topic but never divulged like I would like. I can't wait to read it!--Jcpasiec (talk) 16:53, 1 March 2012 (UTC)
The goal is to present facts backed up by citations. When you try to use words to prove a point it starts sounding like an essay. In order to sound less "essayish" I suggest you reword some of your sentences. Let's take these sentences: "It has been proven that media exposure often contributes to the development or on-going presence of disordered eating or body image issues in women" and "It was found that 28 primetime situational comedies, 33% of the central female characters were below average weight" In these sentences you can simply remove "it has been proven" and "it was found that." Now try reading the sentence: Media exposure often contributes to the development or on-going presence of disordered eating… Don't forget to cite. Also try reading your work out-loud, if it doesn't sound right consider revising it. Let me know if you need any more help Eff Gjeni (talk) 05:30, 11 March 2012 (UTC)
You might want to mention body types in media in your introduction, something like "media perpetuates these ideal in various ways". Just something to make mention that representation in media is the focus of the article. The sentence "As the thinness of a female character increased the number of compliments she received from men did as well." should maybe be followed by a backup fact/incident or citation because as it is it seems like a generalization more than an actual fact. Jtobyne —Preceding undated comment added 01:01, 29 March 2012 (UTC).
Looks pretty good so far to me. When you mention West in the intro do you mean Western Hemp or Western United States. Might want to be more specific there. Also when you talk about "In 2003 a study..." it might be nice to mention the study, idk just an idea. Other then that though I look forward to learning more as the semester goes on. Good work. Abulak —Preceding undated comment added 00:56, 1 April 2012 (UTC).
It's looking really good. You could also divulge into Jean Kilbourne I'm sure you've stumbled upon a lot of her journals in your searching, but she talks about the depiction of body shape in the media. It seems like you have a solid article though. For the video game portion theres a Sut Jhally movie it's one of the Killing Us Softly's where they talk about how women in video games look and how in real life the proportions of the women would make it impossible for her to walk, this is also known as the barbie effect. Good job though! — Preceding unsigned comment added by 220.127.116.11 (talk) 06:16, 20 April 2012 (UTC) --Jcpasiec (talk) 13:52, 23 April 2012 (UTC)
Hey the article is looking pretty good. Just a suggestion (and you may already be researching this), but I was reading an article recently about the inaccurate posing of woman in movie posters, typically action films, meaning they are photographed in a way that draws attention to their chest and butt while they are standing or sitting in what are actually very uncomfortable/unrealistic positions. I will try to find the article for you and posted it back on your talk page. ( Jtobyne (talk) 20:16, 23 April 2012 (UTC) )
Hey stumbled across an article of the effects of the media on body image and thought maybe you could do a section on the effects of the media. the link is this: http://www.tandfonline.com/doi/pdf/10.1207/s15506878jobem4802_3 I am unsure if this is something you would be interested in doing but I figured I would throw it out there anyways. Good luck (Abulak (talk) 13:33, 25 April 2012 (UTC))
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