Talk:Nino Tkeshelashvili/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 22:30, 2 February 2020 (UTC)

Give me a few days on this, cheers.♦ Dr. Blofeld

Intro

• Rep of "time" = she completed the schooling available to her at the time in Tiflis and then worked for a time in Didi Jikhaishi as a Russian language teacher. Why not just "was partly educated in Tiflis" or something?

 Done SusunW (talk) 06:04, 9 February 2020 (UTC)

• " and co-founded the Caucasian Women's Society. " - when and with whom?

 Done SusunW (talk) 06:04, 9 February 2020 (UTC)

• "Together with other feminists, she turned to writing, becoming above all a children's writer in the Soviet era." - "together with other feminists" is repeated. I would just say something like "she became a writer, particularly for children". or something similar, something to simplify it.

 Done SusunW (talk) 06:04, 9 February 2020 (UTC)

Career

• "She lived in a boarding house belonging to Ivane Machabeli. One of the other tenants, Mariam Demuria [ka], was closely involved in public works projects. She worked as a journalist and regularly gave lectures to the general public. She also ran a Sunday school to offer education to workers and hired Tkeshelashvili to teach Russian language courses. " -problematic as you refer to two different people as "she"

Machabeli is a man, so I didn't think it was confusing, but I have clarified changing "She worked as a journalist" to "Demuria worked as a journalist". I did not change the next sentence, as Tkeshelashvili couldn't have hired herself. Hope it is clearer. If not, let me know. SusunW (talk) 06:15, 9 February 2020 (UTC)

• "Around 1912, Tkeshelashvili began publishing translations and original works in კვალი (Trace) and the children's magazine ჯეჯილი (Jejili, meaning "wheat shoots"), founded by Anastasia Tumanishvili-Tsereteli. That year, she also joined the editorial staff of ნაკადულის (The Stream), where she met writers Nino Nakashidze and Akaki Tsereteli. Writing under the pseudonym სუფრაჟისტკას (Suffragist" -shouldn't the titles be italicized? Check entire section and italicize the names in brackets

I think I got all of these.  Done SusunW (talk) 06:15, 9 February 2020 (UTC)

• "In 1914, during World War I, the Caucasian Women's Society began operating free canteens and sewing clothes for soldiers. She also " - surname needed instead of "she" as you were discussing the society

 Done SusunW (talk) 06:15, 9 February 2020 (UTC)

@SusunW: Thanks for your patience on this.♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:59, 8 February 2020 (UTC)

Thanks for the review Dr. Blofeld, I really appreciate it. Let me know if you need me to work on anything else. SusunW (talk) 06:17, 9 February 2020 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Good job SusunW!♦ Dr. Blofeld 14:33, 9 February 2020 (UTC)