Talk:Who Am I? (Pale Waves album)/GA1
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:29, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
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- "the band members Ciara" reiterate Pale Waves here as this is the first para of the main body so it's fair to just link the band at this point.
- "(Heather Baron-..." never a fan of completely parenthesised sentences, good for a footnote.
- "nevertheless traumatic" according to whom?
- "also had a significant impact on the release of the album" why? Digital releases were fine?
- That's a good question! The source is not crystal clear, but I think it was logistics related to recording and touring. It seems that the pandemic forced them to record virtually and torpedoed a possibility of a tour, so they bumped it all back a bit. But that's a guess on my part.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 00:48, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- " think the first batch of demos" this is a huuuuge quote. What's the really significant part? Can it be trimmed down just a little?
- "told Coup de Main that " what's that?
- "So important was Luck..." there are a few direct quotes hereafter, they should really be inline cited immediately after each quote.
- "Baron-Gracie told NME, "I know" NME is overlinked.
- "in Los Angeles, California as Baron" comma after Cali.
- "Heather Baron-Gracie and Ciara Doran" unless there's any chance of ambiguity, no need to repeat first names.
- "with NME magazine " overlinked. And no need to explain here it's a magazine.
- "Promotion and singles" descends into proseline. Try making a couple of engaging paragraphs out of those factoids.
- "Smith of NME magazine' see above.
- "emo pop" link?
- Accolades table doesn't need to be sortable. Just one entry.
- " the Official Physical Albums Charts (OOC), the" overlinked, and how does OOC work??
- Spaced hyphens in the following refs should be en-dashes: 33, 39, 41, 45.
- All time ranges e.g. 10:23-11:59 need to be en-dashes.
- Are you linking websites/publishers first time, all times, randomly? What's the strategy?
That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:16, 9 September 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: How does this all look now?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 00:49, 10 September 2021 (UTC)