Template:Did you know nominations/Geneva II Middle East peace conference
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The result was: promoted by PFHLai (talk) 20:44, 7 September 2013 (UTC)
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Geneva II Middle East peace conference[edit]
... that in mid-August 2013 Lakhdar Brahimi and Ban Ki-moon worked "closely" with Russia and the US to "kick-start" the Geneva II Syrian peace conference?
- Reviewed: Dolfinarium Harderwijk
originally created by Greyshark09 (talk), recently 5x expanded by Boud (talk). Nominated by Boud (talk) at 23:38, 1 September 2013 (UTC).
Article was originally created 28 July. Article should have been expanded 5x since the last edit (2 august) falling before of the nomination period of 1 September. Rapidly counting with Word I come to 872 characters on 2 August and 5221 now. So the article has been 5x expanded. The article is thereby also long enough. The article also complies with policy, it is neutral, cites its sources very well with inline citations and is free of copyvio's. There are however a lot of quotations of people in the article. My suggestion is to tone that down a bit by rewriting some of them to your own words. The hook has the same issue. Is it necessary to include the quotation marks? I understand that Syria is a sensitive issue, but still, does kick-start need quotations?. The hook does comply with the formatting guidelines (131 characters) is neutral and is interesting though not sparkling. QPQ done. So, once the quotations issue has been dealt with this one is good to go.Crispulop (talk) 14:38, 3 September 2013 (UTC)
- I've summarised some of the quotes in the article - hope that's better. For the hook, I would agree that "closely" can have the quotes dropped (especially since they could be interpreted as scare quotes), but "kick-start" is something of a stylistic choice - it's not common enough to put here without quotes - it's obvious we're just copying his metaphor. So I propose ALT1:
ALT1: ... that in mid-August 2013 Lakhdar Brahimi and Ban Ki-moon worked closely with Russian and US diplomats towards a possible Geneva II Syrian peace conference?
- How's ALT1? Boud (talk) 22:02, 3 September 2013 (UTC)
- I've summarised some of the quotes in the article - hope that's better. For the hook, I would agree that "closely" can have the quotes dropped (especially since they could be interpreted as scare quotes), but "kick-start" is something of a stylistic choice - it's not common enough to put here without quotes - it's obvious we're just copying his metaphor. So I propose ALT1:
- ALT2: ... that during the weeks before the 2013 Ghouta attacks, Lakhdar Brahimi and Ban Ki-moon worked closely with Russian and US diplomats towards a possible Geneva II Syrian peace conference?
- Or ALT2 - since the Ghouta attacks received a lot of publicity, this may help motivate people to read the hook and read/edit the DYK article. Boud (talk) 09:12, 4 September 2013 (UTC)
