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This page is for nominations to appear in the "Did you know" section on the Main Page. For the discussion page see WT:DYK.

Contents

List of DYK Hooks by Date
Date # of Hooks # Verified
May 28 1
June 6 1
June 7 1
June 12 2
June 13 1
June 15 3
June 16 1
June 17 3
June 18 3
June 19 1
June 20 4
June 21 1
June 22 1
June 23 4
June 24 4 1
June 25 4 1
June 26 2
June 27 4
June 28 2 1
June 29 3
June 30 4 2
July 1 3 1
July 2 4
July 3 1
July 4 3 2
July 5 7 3
July 6 14 2
July 7 7 2
July 8 1
July 9 2 1
July 10 2
July 11 5
July 12 7 1
July 13 8
July 14 1
July 15 15 5
July 16 9 3
July 17 7 1
July 18 13 6
July 19 8 1
July 20 9 1
July 21 7 2
July 22 13 5
July 23 8
July 24
Total 204 41
Last updated 11:18, July 24, 2014 (UTC)
Current time is 11:35, July 24, 2014 UTC (purge)


Instructions for nominators[edit]

Create a subpage for your new DYK suggestion and then list the page below under the date the article was created or the expansion began (not the date you submit it here), with the newest dates at the bottom. Any autoconfirmed registered user may nominate a DYK suggestion (if you are not a registered user, please leave a message at the bottom of the DYK project talk page with the details of the article you would like to nominate and the hook you would like to propose); self-nominations are permitted and encouraged. Thanks for participating and please remember to check back for comments on your nomination (consider watchlisting your nomination page).

If this is your first nomination, please read the DYK rules before continuing:
Official DYK criteria: DYK rules and supplementary guidelines
Unofficial guide: Learning DYK

To nominate an article[edit]

Read these instructions completely before proceeding.
For simplified instructions, see User:Rjanag/Quick DYK 2.
I.
Create the nomination subpage.

Enter the article title in the box below and click the button. (To nominate multiple articles together, enter any or all of the article titles.) You will then be taken to a preloaded nomination page.


II.
Write the nomination.

On the nomination page, fill in the relevant information. See Template:NewDYKnomination and {{NewDYKnomination/guide}} for further information.

  • Not every line of the template needs to be filled in. For instance, if you are not nominating an image to appear with your hook, there is no need to fill in the image-related lines.
  • Add an edit summary e,g, "Nominating YOUR ARTICLE TITLE for DYK" and click Save page.
  • Make sure the nomination page is on your watchlist, so you can follow the review discussion.
III.
Post at Template talk:Did you know.

In the current nominations section find the subsection for the date on which the article was created or on which expansion began, not the date on which you make the nomination.

  • At the top of that subsection (before other nominations already there, but below the section head and hidden comment) add {{Did you know nominations/YOUR ARTICLE TITLE}}.
  • Add an edit summary e.g. "Nominating YOUR ARTICLE TITLE for DYK" and click Save page.
  • Consider adding {{Did you know nominations/YOUR ARTICLE TITLE}} to the article's talk page (without a section heading—​the template adds a section heading automatically).

How to review a nomination[edit]

Any editor who was not involved in writing/expanding or nominating an article may review it by checking to see that the article meets all the DYK criteria (long enough, new enough, no serious editorial or content issues) and the hook is cited. Editors may also alter the suggested hook to improve it, suggest new hooks, or even lend a hand and make edits to the article to which the hook applies so that the hook is supported and accurate. For a more detailed discussion of the DYK rules and review process see the supplementary guidelines and the WP:Did you know/Reviewing guide.

To post a comment or review on a DYK nomination, follow the steps outlined below:

  • Look through this page, Template talk:Did you know, to find a nomination you would like to comment on.
  • Click the "Review or comment" link at the top of the nomination. You will be taken to the nomination subpage.
  • The top of the page includes a list of the DYK criteria. Check the article to ensure it meets all the relevant criteria.
  • To indicate the result of the review (i.e., whether the nomination passes, fails, or needs some minor changes), leave a signed comment on the page. Please begin with one of the 5 review symbols that appear at the top of the edit screen, and then indicate all aspects of the article that you have reviewed; your comment should look something like the following:

    Article length and age are fine, no copyvio or plagiarism concerns, reliable sources are used. But the hook needs to be shortened.

    If you are the first person to comment on the nomination, there will be a line :*<!--Make first comment here--> showing you where you can put the comment.
  • Save the page.

If there is any problem or concern about a nomination, please consider notifying the nominator by placing {{subst:DYKproblem|Article|header=yes|sig=yes}} on the nominator's talk page.

Frequently asked questions[edit]

Backlogged?[edit]

This page is often backlogged. As long as your submission is still on the page, it will stay there until an editor reviews it. Since editors are encouraged to review the oldest submissions first (so that those hooks don't grow stale), it may take several days until your submission is reviewed. In the meantime, please consider reviewing another submission (not your own) to help reduce the backlog (see instructions above).

Where is my hook?[edit]

If you can't find the hook you submitted to this page, in most cases it means your article has been approved and is in the queue for display on the main page. You can check whether your hook has been moved to the queue by reviewing the queue listings.

If your hook is not in the queue or already on the main page, it has probably been deleted. Deletion occurs if the hook is more than about eight days old and has unresolved issues for which any discussion has gone stale. If you think your hook has been unfairly deleted, you can query its deletion on the discussion page, but as a general rule deleted hooks will only be restored in exceptional circumstances.

Search archived DYK nomination discussions[edit]

Instructions for other editors[edit]

How to promote an accepted hook[edit]

  • In one window, open the DYK nomination subpage of the hook you would like to promote. In a separate window, open the prep area you intend to add the hook to.
  • Paste the accepted hook and the credit information (the {{DYKmake}} and {{DYKnom}} templates) into the prep area. Make sure to follow the guidelines at Wikipedia:Did you know/Preparation areas.
  • In the window where the DYK nomination subpage is open, replace the line {{DYKsubpage with {{subst:DYKsubpage, and replace |passed= with |passed=yes. Then save the page. This has the effect of wrapping up the discussion on the DYK nomination subpage in a green archive box and stating that the nomination was successful, as well as adding the nomination to a category for archival purposes.
  • In your edit summary, please indicate which prep area you are moving the hook to.

How to remove a rejected hook[edit]

  • Open the DYK nomination subpage of the hook you would like to remove. (It's best to wait several days after a reviewer has rejected the hook, just in case someone contests or the article undergoes a large change.)
  • In the window where the DYK nomination subpage is open, replace the line {{DYKsubpage with {{subst:DYKsubpage, and replace |passed= with |passed=no. Then save the page. This has the effect of wrapping up the discussion on the DYK nomination subpage in a blue archive box and stating that the nomination was unsuccessful, as well as adding the nomination to a category for archival purposes.

How to remove a hook from the prep areas or queue[edit]

  • Edit the prep area or queue where the hook is and remove the hook and the credits associated with it.
  • Go to the hook's nomination subpage (there is usually a link to it in the credits section).
    • View the edit history for that page
    • Go back to the last version before the edit where the hook was promoted, and revert to that version to make the nomination active again.
    • Leave a comment explaining that the hook was removed from the queue, and why, so that later reviewers are aware of this issue.
    • If the day title for the section that contained the hook has been removed from this page, restore that section.
  • If you removed the hook from a queue, it is best to either replace it with another hook from one of the prep areas, or to leave a message at WT:DYK asking someone else to do so.
  • Add a link to the nomination subpage at Wikipedia:Did you know/Removed

How to move a nomination subpage to a new name[edit]

  • Don't; it should not ever be necessary, and will break some links which will later need to be repaired. Even if you change the title of the article, you don't need to move the nomination page.

Nominations[edit]

Older nominations[edit]

Articles created/expanded on May 28[edit]

Paige (wrestler)

Created by LikeTheWind (talk). Improved to Good Article status by FairyTailRocks (talk), Starship.paint (talk). Nominated by FairyTailRocks (talk) at 02:24, 30 May 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg New enough (promoted to GA 28 May, nominated 30 May) and long enough. Article images are free. Original hook and ALT2 are acceptable (but see issue 2 for ALT1), and all are short enough. Original hook checks out with online citation #9. ALT2 checks out with online citations #107 and #108 (although Paige's championship tenures overlapped for just one month in May 2014, the hook remains true). No disambig links found. All external links accessible except one (see issue 1). The text is written in an objective and neutral manner, and is fully cited. I have checked external links in citations 1-9 for copyvio or close paraphrasing, and found none (citations 10-108 were not checked). Issues: (1) Citation #78 is a deadlink. (2) ALT1 needs to be written out in full in the text, with appropriate citations; at the moment I cannot easily assemble the parts of the hook and appropriate citations from the text, and cannot find evidence for "immediately". That is not to say it is untrue; just help us check it out, please. (3) QPQ not yet done. Summary: if issues 1-3 1 and 3 can be resolved, this nom should be OK. Note: the images in the article are free, and one of those could be used with your chosen hook if you wish. --Storye book (talk) 16:15, 16 June 2014 (UTC)
Suggesting minor corrections to hooks. Don't think AJ Lee is important enough, the other is phrasing. starship.paint "YES!" 03:31, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
I'm also proposing that this DYK be left pending, as a frequent editor of wrestling articles there are a few issues with the article that need to be sorted out. Namely, her 2010 / 2011 exploits need to be expanded before this appears on the main page as a GA. starship.paint "YES!" 03:31, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Thank you, Starship.paint. Issue 2 now resolved. I agree with your reasons for new hooks, and I have struck the original hook and ALT1 in favour of ALT2 and the adjusted versions ALT3 and ALT4.--Storye book (talk) 11:00, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Review of ALT3 and ALT4: Both acceptable, short and hooky. ALT3 checks out with online citation #9. ALT4 checks out online with citation #72.--Storye book (talk) 11:00, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Note to admin: This nom is currently waiting for the article to be edited up to standard, as per 24 June request of Starship.paint. Issues 1 and 3 (deadlink and QPQ) still pending.--Storye book (talk) 11:00, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
Deadlink is fixed. So is the Shimmer Women Athletes (2011) section. What's left is European independent circuit (2005–2011) - years 2010 and 2011. Missing info is as follows, bolded is more important; cancelled repeated opponents: Small and Red is now info not needed for inclusion in the article. Normal size is for inclusion, strikeout is already included. starship.paint "YES!" 13:57, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
2010
2011
  • Review update: Two issues remaining for this nom. (1) QPQ still pending. (2) Article still needs to be brought up to standard as per comments above by Starship.paint. --Storye book (talk) 16:19, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg It's been about two weeks, and the issues noted above, including QPQ, are still unsatisfied. The nominator hasn't edited for over a week; allowing until one week or 24 hours after the next edit, whichever comes first, to respond here. I hope it won't be necessary to close the nomination. BlueMoonset (talk) 06:04, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
  • @ BlueMoonset. I have messaged FairyTailRocks re the QPQ. Starship.paint has left a message with intention to edit the article within 24h. If no QPQ happens, I can then offer to donate one of mine, but we await Starship's help with the article-edits. --Storye book (talk) 18:57, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
  • @ FairyTailRocks. Thank you, QPQ partly done. Don't forget that even though the nominated article that you have reviewed is a new GA, you still have to do a full review for DYK. I'll accept it if you complete the review or if another editor completes it for you. --Storye book (talk) 09:31, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Remaining issues: (1) QPQ has been started with a partial review, but that needs to be completed as far as an initial review goes, by FairyTailRocks or another editor. (1) This nom article still needs to be brought up to standard as per comments above by Starship.paint. --Storye book (talk) 09:31, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
  • After thinking through a bit more, I've realised that there is no longer so much missing information to be included in the article. The European independent circuit were a bunch of minor promotions which are much less notable than the American ones. There's no need for so much detailed coverage, as her opponents are mostly redlinks. From 2005-2008, when she hadn't won a singles title yet, we only need tournament matches or title matches. I've removed a #1 contender determination match. From 2009-2011, successful title defenses are surplus. Only title matches where a title change are needed. As such, I have edited the missing info above. I have settled five of the six missing items already. starship.paint "YES!" 13:29, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I'm confident that the article will be settled 24 hours from now. starship.paint "YES!" 13:56, 8 July 2014 (UTC)

────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────Storye book, European independent circuit and Championships and accomplishments are updated. I'd say this article is finally GA and good to go. Is the QPQ in order? In addition, I think ALT3 can be improved. Source for "as a child" -> I couldn’t really get a grasp on wrestling at a young age ... It scared the crap out of me ... When I got a little older, like, 10 or 11 ... I would get in the ring now and again and mess around with one of my brothers, and he’d teach me some stuff. starship.paint "YES!" 04:12, 9 July 2014 (UTC)

  • Starship.paint, thanks for the updates and new ALT. I'm afraid the QPQ is not in order: the review was superficial and missed most of the criteria that need to be checked. I've noted the deficiencies on the template—FairyTailRocks, you have more work to do on the review for it to pass muster. If you need any guidance, feel free to ask, or you can check the top of any DYK template edit window: a summary of the review criteria for article and hook is there. (More detailed explanations are available at WP:DYK and WP:DYKSG.) BlueMoonset (talk) 06:02, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Sorry I can't donate a QPQ in this case (although as you know I sometimes do). I only donate QPQs if it will help clear the backlog or speed up a nom - especially where a nominator is having genuine difficulty. But in this case I don't think it would help. If I am making the wrong decision here, please let me know, and I'll donate a QPQ. This isn't about me being mean - some very capable editors would naturally object to being offered a free QPQ and I don't wish to offend. --Storye book (talk) 09:11, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
Yeah, I think you shouldn't donate. >_> Could the QPQ wait until the weekend, given that FairyTailRocks is schooling? In the meantime we could decide between ALT2, ALT4 and ALT5? starship.paint "YES!" 14:20, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
  • @ Starship.paint. I have struck ALT3 in favour of ALT5, which checks out with the source linked above. ALT2 and ALT4 are already approved. I am happy to put them all forward for the admin to choose, unless you would like to choose one yourself? I have run out of computer time now, so I'm leaving a note here to myself to check that ALT5 is written out in full in the article with its inline citation alongside. --Storye book (talk) 16:21, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
ALT5 is a combination of two sentences in two sections, one from Early life and one later in Divas Champion. I have no preference for any ALTs. I also think ALT2 could be improved to be made more subtle. starship.paint "YES!" 02:36, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
  • @ Starship.paint. Please would you kindly double-check the following citation numbers for me? The sources look almost right to me, but I don't know enough about the competition system to be sure. Thank you. When you have checked it, I can pass this nom. ALT4 checks out online with citations #84 and #85 (the debut bit is implied, not spelled out?). ALT5 checks out with online citation #9. ALT6 checks out online with citations #107 and #108 (although Paige's championship tenures overlapped for just one month in May 2014, the hook remains true). --Storye book (talk) 07:34, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Regarding ALT4, I actually added a source for "debut" back in April. Someone removed it, so I added it back now. So the new reference #84 supports ALT4. Whereas, ALT5 is supported by #8, #9 and the new #87. I just remembered ALT6 is not mentioned explicitly in the article... WP:PW members thought it wasn't important enough to be explicitly written in the article, so perhaps we could take ALT6 out of the running. starship.paint "YES!" 08:06, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
  • To acknowledge the niche standing of professional wrestling, I was thinking of a hook which doesn't mention professional wrestling. Tell less and entice more, I guess. Supported by references #103 and #104... Also, I've sent another talk page reminder to FairyTailRocks. starship.paint "YES!" 07:43, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
  • ALT7 ... that Paige was featured in the Channel 4 documentary Fighting with My Family?
  • Just noting that I have run out of computer time for today - I'm back tomorrow, unless someone else reviews it first. --Storye book (talk) 09:55, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg OK, I'm back. ALT7 is short enough and hooky enough, and checks out online with citation #104 for Britani Knight/Saraya being in the BBC documentary. To prevent this nom being delayed by questions as to the identity of Saraya with her two stage names Britani Knight and Paige, I'm confirming here that the links in citation #10 confirm that identity. So we now have three OK hooks, and we're just waiting for the QPQ to be completed. --Storye book (talk) 11:50, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
Storye book, I see that FairyTailRocks has done a more comprehensive QPQ at 2005 FA Community Shield, is that enough? starship.paint "YES!" 06:19, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
Talk:2005 FA Community Shield which FairyTailRocks reviewed ran on DYK on 22 July. Awaiting the return of Storye book from computer repair. starship.paint "YES!" 14:53, 23 July 2014 (UTC)






Articles created/expanded on June 6[edit]

Paano Ang Puso Ko?

Created by 001Jrm (talk). Self nominated at 06:35, 6 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol possible vote.svg I do not see any plagiarism, copyright infringement, or close paraphrasing. The image follow fair use guidelines. Article was created on time. However, the article is only 1335 characters, and 1500 needed to go on the Main Page. Lists such as cast listings and awards do not count toward the character count. Also, the only sources I see here are IMDB and the movie itself. The movie is a reliable primary source about itself. IMBD I know is controversial - can someone with more experience help me out here on when IMDB is acceptable and when it is not?
This aside, the article needs coverage from reliable sources independent from the subject - what makes this movie notable? Is there any critical analysis of it? What was the commercial reception? As it stands, this article needs a LOT of work. It would be nice to see it brought up to standard as we need a lot more non-Western oriented topics.--¿3family6 contribs 02:23, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
Thanks for the review! I didn't know that new pages have to have at least 1500 characters, and so I already added more info. (thanks for telling me that as well) Philippines is one of the countries to have limited resources, though I did get old newspapers (thanks to google) to use for the critical and commercial reception. :) 001Jrm (talk) 06:36, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
Symbol question.svg Much better now! Just FYI, 1500 characters isn't required for ALL new articles, but it is a good benchmark to avoid deletion, and 1500 IS required for DYK. I hope that clarifies things. My only hesitation with promoting this now are the IMBD sources - some IMBD content is staff-generated, some user-generated, and some user-generated and reviewed by staff. I don't know enough about IMBD to know one way or the other. If you can get that info somewhere else, it might be best. Otherwise, we'll have to wait for someone with more experience with IMBD to weigh in here.--¿3family6 contribs 14:27, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
  • @ 3family6. The answers to your question about the authority of IMDb are here and here. Broadly speaking, they have contributors just as WP does, but at IMDb all contributor input is vetted before publication, and contributors with a record of unreliability get more closely scrutinised than the rest or might be banned. IMO it's probably the best and most reliable resource for movie credits, second only to the credits on DVDs. I fear that WP might be a little out of date on the subject of IMDb as a source though - so although I think it's a valid source for movie credits, you might still get hassle in a DYK nom if you use it as refs. I should add that IMDb does have public comments/opinions sections at the bottom of some pages, and of course those sections cannot be used as sources. I think that on IMDb if you can't edit it, then that bit has been staff-vetted, and in a section where you can add an opinion, that bit is not staff-vetted. --Storye book (talk) 13:58, 27 June 2014 (UTC)
For what IMDb is being used for in this article, I see no problem with it. The only reason I questioned it above was because I wasn't sure of what the guidelines for Wikipedia are regarding its use. It's up to you, 001Jrm.--¿3family6 contribs 14:45, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
Thanks for all the comments. I'll try to look for other sources other than IMDB, but it will take a long time. 001Jrm (talk) 08:25, 1 July 2014 (UTC)


Articles created/expanded on June 7[edit]

Pauline Bennett

  • Comment: Bennett will be celebrating her fiftieth birthday in the house, thus could this be mainpaged on her birthday.

Moved to mainspace by Launchballer (talk). Self nominated at 17:42, 7 June 2014 (UTC).

Symbol confirmed.svg Length, history and reference verified. Have we missed her birthday? Daniel Case (talk) 04:47, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg (edit conflict) Article was new enough when nominated. Article is long enough. Article appears to be within policy. Hook meets length requirement (101 characters). The problem is that there's no evidence that the DNA remix of Shocked charted (versus the original song). The fact Bennett was in the song is easily found online but isn't reliably sourced in the article, either. Editor provided no evidence of QPQ. Chris Troutman (talk) 04:57, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
I have no idea when her birthday is; it would appear we have missed it, but I can't find any evidence to suggest that she has celebrated it. As for the DNA remix, the source says that only the DNA remix was released as a single (which was the only mix to feature Bennett) and The Official Charts Company attributes the chart entry to "Kylie Minogue ft. Jazzi P". QPQ done.--Launchballer 09:45, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Launchballer, the "Shocked" remix is sourced to a Kylie Minogue fan site (FN3: KylieUnlimited), and thus not sufficiently reliable; you'll need to find a reliable source for this. Furthermore, the one Official Charts Company source you do have (FN4) does not mention Jazzi P (is it "Jazzy" or "Jazzi"?) as an artist on "Shocked"; it's credited solely to Minogue. If there is another Official Charts page with an entry that does mention Pauline under her stage name, you'll need to source it in the article. BlueMoonset (talk) 16:40, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
I've fixed the "Shocked" remix, but I can't find a consensus as to whether it is "Jazzy P" or "Jazzi P" thus I am loathed to include it for fear of bias. I am considering writing a new section giving a balanced argument between the two names. Or would it be removed as unencyclopedic?--Launchballer 13:36, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
I have no idea whether Discogs is a reliable source (very possibly not), but this page gives no fewer than five variants of her name. Writing an entire section based on variant spellings strikes me as WP:UNDUE; if you just mention in a single sentence that there are a number of variant spellings including Jazzi P and Jazzy P (and cite a couple of sources for each) that should be sufficient. A 1991 source reviewing the Minogue single that mentions Bennett might be nice, and give an idea of contemporaneous credits. The use of the BB episode to source that the Minogue single wasn't originally going to be released strikes me as dubious; I'd want a "time" during the episode for anything that specific. I'm still waiting for an Official Charts source that includes the "ft. Jazzi P" part, since the one source you give from them does not mention a featured artist. BlueMoonset (talk) 16:50, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
Discogs anyone can edit, so no, it's not a reliable source and honestly I'm surprised you don't know that. No Official Charts source exists that includes the "ft. Jazzi P" bit, and I can't find any reviews which mention Jazzy P. I don't know the time, but I think Bennett said it before she went into the house.--Launchballer 17:34, 8 July 2014 (UTC)








Articles created/expanded on June 12[edit]

Salamat, Kaibigan

  • Reviewed: Doing...

Created by Sky Harbor (talk). Self nominated at 22:26, 17 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg The article currently has only 1164 characters of readable prose.--Skr15081997 (talk) 12:52, 27 June 2014 (UTC)
    • I'm currently expanding the article: I just haven't been saving it yet as I'm currently participating in a conference. :) --Sky Harbor (talk) 21:07, 27 June 2014 (UTC)
  • @ Sky Harbor. I hope your conference went well. As of today, the article still stands at 1164 char. Any chance of a bit of saved text and a QPQ yet? --Storye book (talk) 14:38, 2 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Hi, Storye book, and yes, it did go well. I started expanding the article's public reaction section, and I'm currently going through more material. :) --Sky Harbor (talk) 04:30, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Thank you, Sky Harbor. The readable prose character count is now 1721, but I had better not review it until you have finished your current edit. Please ping me when the article is ready for review. Meanwhile the hook is OK and checks out online with (currently) citation #5 (currently Netizens-Rapper).--Storye book (talk) 09:17, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svgThe article is new (as of 17 June) and long enough (1721 characters), written in dispassionate tone, the hook is interesting and within limit. The hook fact checks out with ref #5. No plagiarism or close paraphrasing detected. All we need is the QPQ.--Skr15081997 (talk) 10:09, 23 July 2014 (UTC)

Purabá de Santa Bárbara

Neighborhood in Purabá de Santa Bárbara

Created by Mvblair (talk). Self nominated at 18:14, 14 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg Prose 3636B (565 words), created 12 June (2 days before nomination), neutral and well-sourced. Sources are in Spanish, so I AGF that they they have been used accurately without copyvio or close paraphrasing. The only image used is CCS3-licensed by the creator of the article.
    The hook fact is sourced, but the link is to a website which currently fails to load and isn't in the internet archive.
    I suggest a slight tweak to the hook, to clarify where the district is located ("Purabá de Santa Bárbara district in Costa Rica) ... but the question for me that while the hook fact appears mildly interesting, it doesn't say whether growing sugar cane at this altitude is unique to this district (which would be very hooky), or common in Costa Rica (in which case it is less hooky).
    Can the nominator please clarify this? --BrownHairedGirl (talk) • (contribs) 20:48, 19 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Thanks, BrownHairedGirl. I checked the link and it appears to be working at the moment. Growing sugarcane at that altitude is unique to Costa Rica, but more unique to the, well, altitude. I'm not an expert in agriculture, but I've read that it's mostly grown at sea-level or just a few feet above (I tweaked the hook to hopefully reflect that). Do you think another hook might be better? Perhaps something like "... despite the twenty-four wells and springs in the area, Purabá de Santa Bárbara still has water delivery problems?" Mvblair (talk) 14:56, 20 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Mvblair, thanks for the reply. The link still fails to load, with a message about data corrupted in transmission. Maybe the internet isn't so global after all :(
    Anyway, I am happy to AGF on the refs. As to the hook, water delivery problems seem very weak. Heck, even here in wealthy Ireland (widely mocked as a very rainy place), significant parts of the country have water supply problems. So that's not really front page news.
    I reckon that the sugar cane thing is the one to go for, so long as you don't appear to be claiming that Santa Bárbara is totally unique; instead, why not use it to illustrate your point that Costa Rica tends to grow it at high altitude, and this is an extreme case. Can you expand the article a little to make that point? If so, we got a hook :) --BrownHairedGirl (talk) • (contribs) 15:45, 20 June 2014 (UTC)
  • BrownHairedGirl, good suggestions. Let me see if I can rustle up a source or two and expand that section of the article! Mvblair (talk) 23:09, 20 June 2014 (UTC)
  • I appreciate your help with the hook,

BrownHairedGirl; however, I'm going to submit an alternative hook. It is unusual for sugarcane to be grown above 1,000 meters, but from what I'm reading, it is still done in many places. How about the following? I think it provides more general interest, in any event. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mvblair (talkcontribs) 02:50, 26 June 2014


  • Symbol possible vote.svg Mvblair, I think that the hook would be OK if it was supported by the reference. The source is in Spanish and I don't read Spanish, so I used Google Translate. The translated version is slightly garbled:
From when I was a child I have few memories almost did not have to work, because I had the opportunity to study, but if I had to help my dad with the land where he used to plant tomatoes and bananas. I enjoyed my childhood of playing make mills in a ditch with the branches of the banana tree, also my dad made us rag dolls and wooden.
... but I don't see it saying anything about the ubiquity of sugarcane, and it refers only to one child making a play sugar mill (rather than this being a common practice). Please correct me if I am being misled by a poor translation, but as it stands I think that the hook is unsupported by the source. --BrownHairedGirl (talk) • (contribs) 22:43, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
The translation is up to the usual machine standard, but you are right that it doesn't mention anything about the ubiquity of sugarmills (that whole paragraph in the article is a bit dodgy). Belle (talk) 15:08, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
  • this link says that the district is "Set on the flanks of the impressive Barva Volcano". Great hook but it's part of a sales hype. Can we get a better (maybe Spanish-language) citation for the volcano location? --Storye book (talk) 13:09, 3 July 2014 (UTC)
This says it extends from the foothills of the Barva Massif at 2.400m above sea level down to 1.000m above sea level at San Juan. Not sure that is that hooky for non-geologists (it would be different if it was hidden in the crater and was only accessible by swimming through a gas-filled cave or by ninjas with grappling hooks) Belle (talk) 15:08, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Thank you, Belle. I have added the ALT2 hook, extra information and citations into the article. --Storye book (talk) 18:05, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
  • ALT2: ... that the highest part of Purabá de Santa Bárbara (pictured) is in the foothills of Barva Volcano? --Storye book (talk) 18:05, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Citations #8 and #9 for ALT2. Note: the image shows an unknown part of the area, i.e. not necessarily the highest part - so you may wish to remove the image. Pinging BrownHairedGirl in case you would like to review the new hook?. --Storye book (talk) 18:05, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg New reviewer needed to check ALT2, and weigh in on image question. (BrownHairedGirl has not returned.) Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 17:43, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
    Sorry. I think that I am kinda burnt out on this article, and that is better if I leave it to someone else to take it from here. --BrownHairedGirl (talk) • (contribs) 19:51, 21 July 2014 (UTC)










Articles created/expanded on June 13[edit]

Felisa Vanoff

Created by Zigzig20s (talk). Self nominated at 16:08, 13 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg Entry is new enough, long enough, within policy, and hook is confirmed in all cited sources. Definitely an interesting person. There are only four cited sources, but they're all obituaries, so they're pretty dense with information. There must be more possible sources to cite, but that's surely more an issue with the entry than the DYK nomination.Penny Richards (talk) 17:19, 21 June 2014 (UTC)Penny Richards
  • Symbol possible vote.svg Returned from prep due to paraphrase issues identified by Yoninah at WT:DYK. Gatoclass (talk) 13:23, 26 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg I spent time with this article, adding sources and removing the close paraphrasing. However, it's still basically a chronological account of her life, following the line-by-line presentation of all of the sources. I'm not sure if we can do anything about this. I'd appreciate another reviewer's opinion. Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 22:24, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
The page layout was mangled by your edit and you also removed a secondary source. Please see my comment on the talkpage. I hope this either gets reverted or fixed. I have no idea why you would want to do this rationally. Thank you.Zigzig20s (talk) 22:43, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
  • What are you talking about? The page looks exactly as it did before I started. I added more national references and removed one very local, neighborhood paper (The Beverly Hills Courier), whose material was simply repeated in all the other sources. The nomination has been sitting here for over a week; why didn't you improve it yourself? Yoninah (talk) 23:55, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
I have fixed the layout, even though I tried to explain it on the talkpage first. Do you see a difference? Is it not looking better? Now, I disagree with removing a reference. Surely, one more reference is better than not. I would like to add it back. Why not? Again, see talkpage. Thank you.Zigzig20s (talk) 01:54, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
Symbol redirect vote 4.svg I restored the ref and the layout is fixed. Still calling for another DYK reviewer to decide about the line-by-line paraphrasing of the sources in regard to this article's eligibility for DYK. Yoninah (talk) 13:07, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg I just put the url of the article and the url of the first citation link into the dup detector, and loads of long close paraphrases showed up either side of the duplicated passages. And that was just the first citation source. So this is a no. Sorry. --Storye book (talk)
  • See your talkpage. Thank you.Zigzig20s (talk) 17:48, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
  • From the discussions on the talk pages of Zigzig20s and Storye book it looks like this nomination might be dead. Zigzig20s do you want to withdraw this nomination or are you planning to work on it? (don't ask me to fix it as I am busy running a Fortune 500 company, practising for the Rio Olympics, isolating the ageing gene, writing a sequel to the Bible and checking DYK nominations) Belle (talk) 09:35, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • We are trying to fix it. I still don't know what the problem is, so I have asked naysayers to be very specific. It's a short article and won't take long to fix it once we have a better idea of what needs to be fixed. But we can't fix anything if the criticism is vague.Zigzig20s (talk) 09:41, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • OK, there is no longer close paraphrasing apparently. Wasn't this the only objection to the nomination?Zigzig20s (talk) 10:04, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
(ec) What you certainly waited for: more criticism: I find the hook boring, why speak about her husband if she did interesting thing, just an example:
ALT1: ... that Felisa Vanoff became the first female choreographer for the Hasty Pudding Theatricals and was a lead dancer for the New York City Opera? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 10:08, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
The idea behind the original hook was that I created both her and her husband's page at the same time, so I thought it would be good to get more traffic for both pages. I also think the Kennedy Center Honors are quite a notable event. But your hook could work too.Zigzig20s (talk) 10:13, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I have removed the close paraphrasing tag from the article because I think the issue is not intentionally serious and I believe you want to correct this promptly before the tag gets put back, Zigzig20s. Here are some examples of close paraphrasing:
  • (1)

    pennsylvania state representative and her mother velma lindway was an artist and illustrator after graduating high school felisa moved to a manhattan boarding house and studied dance with

    the pennsylvania house of representatives and velma lindway a professional artist and illustrator after graduating high school felisa set off to new york city in pursuit of her

  • (2)

    weidman's dance theatre she went on to perform in concerts with peter hamilton and appeared on the fred waring and billy rose television programs in 1948 she

    joined charles weidman's dance theatre as lead dancer gave concerts with peter hamilton and appeared on the early fred waring and billy rose television shows in 1948

  • (3)

    for the new york city opera where she performed in carmen la traviata and don giovanni from 1953 to 1955 she was a lead dancer with the john

    opera company where she danced lead roles in operas including carmen la traviata and don giovanni from 1953 55 she was a principal dancer with the john butler

The solution is to find a way of writing the same information in a different order, and the easiest way to do that is to present it from a different perspective. A very simple example might be to change e.g. "she did blah then she did blah" to "before she did blah, she did blah". --Storye book (talk) 10:24, 15 July 2014 (UTC)

  • Sorry there was an edit conflict so you didn't see the above explanation, Zigzig20s, before commenting. This nom is still delayed by close paraphrasing; I removed the tag because you were willing to put it right and were just waiting for information to help you do it. ALT1 is acceptable and checks out online with citation #1, and I understand that the original hook is still valid. So the only thing holding up the nom at the moment is the close paraphrasing. --Storye book (talk) 10:33, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
OK, I have changed the first two. I also changed the third one a bit, but I cannot rename the operas. Was that all?Zigzig20s (talk) 10:58, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
(watching): you can't change the opera names but sort them differently, like alpha, or in order she performed, or in order written, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:07, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
I'm sorry, but I find this ridiculous. She performed them in this order. Why would I mention the last one first?Zigzig20s (talk) 11:22, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg Please calm down, Zigzig20s. People are trying to help you get this nom passed. It's not about causing you difficulty. Close paraphrasing is where the text is a bit too close to copyvio, and copyvio puts WP at risk of being sued by fat, greedy lawyers, which is why we have to avoid anything which might encourage same lawyers. Close paraphrasing can be identified when you get some of the same words appearing in the same order as in the original, and nearly as close together as in the original, although there may be extra words inserted in between. However you have now made some edits in the article, which show some comprehension of the problem. The new edits have improved the article just enough for me to be able to pass it. So thank you. I take the first review of the original hook on trust. ALT1 checks out online with citation #1. Good to go with either hook. --Storye book (talk) 11:45, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Well, I am calm and (and very patient...), but no one could sue for stating the same title of an opera (or a book) in the correct chronological order. So it was an unreasonable request. Which is why you've passed it and thanked me. I think the first hook makes more sense, but if others are going to try and argue about this for weeks, I don't mind using the second hook, which is weaker in my opinion, just to avoid having to be patient again. Thank you.Zigzig20s (talk) 12:01, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I didn't request anything, just made a suggestion. The hook is also nothing but a suggestion, - how could I know that you wrote on the husband also? - About her, a funny name and a precise name of a major opera house (at the time) seems more attractive than a rather boring list of occupations. - Unfortunately it's too late to nominate him with his own hook, but consider that next time, - I stopped doing double noms long go ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 13:58, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • @ Zigzig20s. There were no unreasonable requests regarding close paraphrasing, and no request to change the title of an opera or book; your edits show that you worked out what to do. If anything, I was probably being a little too lenient in passing this nom. So before I change my mind ... --Storye book (talk) 15:28, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg Still good to go with both hooks. --Storye book (talk) 15:28, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Well, scroll up and see that Gerda wanted me to change the order of the operas she performed in...so that made no sense. I will not suggest more articles for DYK after this; it is too much of a power trip for some people. But as this is good to go, LET'S GO. You choose whichever hook you like best. Let's be done with this please. Thank you.Zigzig20s (talk) 21:54, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Btw, I decided to stop submitting articles for DYK because of the whole Lili Bosse drama (compounded by the Beverly Hills 9/11 Memorial Garden drama!), but I think Vanoff deserves the DYK nomination I suggested when I was naive about the whole process...She was very prominent in the entertainment industry!Zigzig20s (talk) 22:24, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • @ Zigzig20s Sorry I'm now going to have to withdraw the pass that I gave this nom. See comment by BlueMoonset on Talk:Felisa Vanoff#Close paraphrasing explanation. I have had to reinstate the close paraphrasing tag on the article page in response to that comment. This nom is not going to get promoted if I pass it by being too lenient about close paraphrasing. I have no doubt that Vanoff is a notable subject, but it is the articles which are checked for DYK, not the subjects alone; or to put it another way, Vanoff deserves a better article at DYK. I repeat that you have not been asked to change names of operas. Gerda wrote, "You can't change the opera names but sort them differently." That means something like, write opera 2 before opera 1 instead of opera 1 then opera 2. You do this e.g. by saying "Before she performed in opera 2, she sang the lead in opera 1." --Storye book (talk) 07:03, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg This nom now needs a new reviewer, and possibly some major practical help with re-editing the remaining close paraphrasing. --Storye book (talk) 07:02, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Yes, we need someone who actually explains what they want in a constructive manner; I tried to change it the way you wanted, and it's still not OK apparently, even though you changed your mind. So who else can help please? I also don't understand why you would change to make the page less chronological by mentioning operas she performed in later, before. And nobody would sue for this simple fact, that A comes before B, not B after A. I hope this makes sense. So who else can help please?Zigzig20s (talk) 07:07, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
  • In an effort to try and be more constructive, I have added two notes on the talkpage, about my failed efforts with Google Books and Google Scholar. However, I don't have access to databases at present, so if anyone does, they may be able to find more. Maybe better to talk about this on the talkpage rather than the DYK nomination page. Thank you.Zigzig20s (talk) 10:32, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Nobody has responded to my efforts to find more references. Looking at this situation objectively, this seems unconstructive of those who profess criticism but don't try to solve the problem at all.Zigzig20s (talk) 06:18, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Hello again. The article looks fine to me and I took pains to fix whatever problem you seemed to have with it. Unless you are able to show exactly how you want it to be improved further, I don't see a need for the "close paraphrasing" tag at all.Zigzig20s (talk) 09:03, 21 July 2014 (UTC)


Articles created/expanded on June 15[edit]

Foreign policy of Narendra Modi

Created by Lihaas (talk). Self nominated at 08:19, 22 June 2014 (UTC).

Dull hook, unless there's some context we're not getting (i.e., the king and PM having a history of hating India and/or Modi, or no previous Indian PM making their first foreign visit to Bhutan). Or something like that. Daniel Case (talk) 23:29, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
Then what do you suggest? that all SAARC members came for his inauguration as a first? Better to suggest something vs. complainingLihaas (talk) 12:52, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
Well ... that's a start. If you wrote the article, you are probably better positioned to propose a newer, catchier hook than me. Daniel Case (talk) 18:53, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
ALT1 ... that all member states of the regional body SAARC attended the inauguration of Narendra Modi marking his foreign policy priorities....?Lihaas (talk) 04:25, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg Lihaas, the ALT1 hook is problematic for a number of reasons: it doesn't read well, the article doesn't say "all member states" of SAARC, and there's nothing in the article to connect them (and SAARC) explicitly to his foreign policy except an unsourced statement in the intro. The article also needs copyediting, and there are many bare urls in the sourcing that need fixing. The article was nominated when still new, and is long enough. I have not checked for neutrality or close paraphrasing. BlueMoonset (talk) 18:04, 21 July 2014 (UTC)

Fiacre (carriage)

  • ... that in 1860 the Compagnie Impériale des Voitures in Paris operated 3,830 fiacres, owned 8,000 horses, and carried over 10 million passengers?

Created by Smerus (talk). Self nominated at 10:31, 19 June 2014 (UTC).

Symbol question.svg Promising article on good sources, but presently a bit too short. Please move the bolded redirect Fiaker to the lead. You might find something on them in Brugge. In the hook, I would mention the millions first, for those who won't read to the end, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:33, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
Thanks for adding, Belle, long enough now, please place a reference right behind the hook statement, and get rid of a bare url, more ref details welcome. My version would be shorter:
ALT1: ... that the Compagnie Impériale des Voitures in Paris operated 3,830 fiacres and carried over 10 million passengers? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 14:24, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
I used to rely on reflinks for that. I can't handle those citation templates. Belle (talk) 14:31, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
The author of the article is no friend of templates, hint, hint. But just add a title, publisher, accessdate, in the style of the other refs. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 14:37, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
Not sure about that. They are books, not online sources (although they are on Google books) so maybe they should go down in the references. Perhaps Smerus can sort them out as he wants them. (I don't enjoy trying to format refs, so I'm not going to do it. So, nur! Me, me, me!) Belle (talk) 15:03, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
I really think that User:Belle should be co-credited if this goes ahead as a DYK.......ALT1 is fine by me...I am also not too het up about reference formats.--Smerus (talk) 15:08, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
You, Belle, helped a lot, much more than needed, thank you. Credited! - Books should be in Bibliography if different pages are needed. - Now we only need a source for the hook (right behind it), or a different hook,
I have done the refs now. Best, --Smerus (talk) 15:22, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
I only did what Gerda told me to do as I was promised cheesecake when I finished. Belle (talk) 15:33, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
Cheesecake, schmeesecake. Come round to my place in Slovakia and you can have some slivovica. If you come by fiacre, you can have some hruskovica.--Smerus (talk) 15:38, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
Symbol voting keep.svg, offline sources accepted AGF, and an extra toast for collaboration! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 15:52, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg First paragraph under "In Paris" needs at least one cite, per DYK rules. Yoninah (talk) 21:26, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
That paragraph was inserted after I was ready to approve, - what do the rules say about that? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:51, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
I believe User:Yoninah to be mistaken. The eligibility criteria only refer to sourcing for BLPs. There are no other comments on sourcing, excpet as regards the hook (which in the preswent case is covered). If Yoninah disagrees with this, they should provide chapter and verse.--Smerus (talk) 21:58, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
Ah, an 'unwritten rule' as the header describes it..... We learn something every day. Over then to Belle who created the paragraph in question.--Smerus (talk) 22:15, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
The citation at the end of the next paragraph covered it; I split them for readability. That's rather a silly supplementary if you ask me (I know you didn't, but when did that ever stop me acting like you did) Belle (talk) 23:49, 9 July 2014 (UTC)

Symbol voting keep.svg @Belle: teh rulez, teh rulez ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 09:25, 10 July 2014 (UTC)

Symbol question.svg What happened? Now there are 2 more sections, "In Vienna" and "Today", without any cites. Yoninah (talk) 22:22, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
They were there before. The sky is blue. Fiakers run in Vienna. - Seriously: How would that be cited? [1] How that an act of Arabella takes place at the Fiakerball? I saw the opera. This is so. [2] - Other works are pictured. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:37, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
Yoninah, I've cited a bit of that, but the works should be self-citing (how I wish that everything was self-citing, it would make life a lot easier; maybe not life, just editing; a robot maid would make life easier) Belle (talk) 13:27, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
Zounds! Have added other cite. Yoninah, anything else?--Smerus (talk) 14:32, 16 July 2014 (UTC)









Horatio Chriesman

Created by Zigzig20s (talk). Self nominated at 10:03, 15 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg Length, date, hook checks out. But the article needs to be reworked to avoid close paraphrase, see [3] --Soman (talk) 09:58, 21 June 2014 (UTC)
  • I've done some rewording, if you want to have another look. For the most part, I think what you see as close paraphrasing is just matching words, not phrases. I don't think close paraphrasing exists, but perhaps someone else would like to weigh in on this. — Maile (talk) 22:52, 23 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg Thanks. I did a small change, and with your rewordings I don't see any problem anymore. --Soman (talk) 09:19, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg Actually the source states that he wanted a site near Washington on the Brazos selected, not the city itself. Gatoclass (talk) 03:15, 27 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg I found a 1907 online source that is a little clearer and edited the article accordingly. However, it still doesn't say it was Washington-on-the-Brazos. It appears to be a small community in the same county. How about:
ALT1 ... that Horatio Chriesman was a surveyor who helped choose the seat of government for the Republic of Texas?
— Maile (talk) 22:07, 5 July 2014 (UTC)
Sure, that's fine.Zigzig20s (talk) 22:20, 5 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg Review of ALT1: The above reviews of the article I accept as complete, and I take it on trust that it is satisfactory. I have a problem with ALT1. The inline citations provided in the article for this hook are #6, #1 and #7 in that order. Between them, they seem to say that Chriesman offered land for the seat of government, but that his offer was rejected. The text of the article does not say that he helped to choose, and neither do the online bits of the sources. So Zigzig20s, please could you (or anybody else) either (a) give us another hook, or (b) write ALT1 into the article with an inline citation (is it in offline citation #6?). Thank you. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Storye book (talkcontribs) 15:47, 9 July 2014‎ (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg It's been 12 days without either a new hook or a revision to the article that backs up ALT1 (if that material does actually exist; if not, then a new hook is the only option). Zigzig20s, we need to hear from you soon, and there needs to be some action. Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 18:09, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Sorry, I've been a bit burned out with DYK's because of Felisa Vanoff, but I have a question before I suggest a new hook. Where did you find that the site he suggested would be Gay Hill? Because there is no reference at the end of that sentence, and thus I am not sure. Is it the "quarterly" reference? If so, we should add the reference there to make it clear. Actually, it would be good to add Gay Hill to the hook, as I created it fairly recently and it has, if I may say so, quite a catchy ring to it.Zigzig20s (talk) 03:18, 22 July 2014 (UTC)

Articles created/expanded on June 16[edit]

Heramba

Heramba

  • ... that Heramba (pictured) is associated with fearsome rites which prescribed killing a victim?

Created by Redtigerxyz (talk). Self nominated at 13:36, 16 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg New enough, long enough, the hook is cited/short enough/interesting, but a little confusing. I think it can be written better grammatically. QPQ Done. Article conforms to Wikipedia policy. Jeremy112233 (Lettuce-jibber-jabber?) 21:25, 16 June 2014 (UTC)
  • I replaced "prescribed to kill a victim" with "prescribed killing a victim". MANdARAX  XAЯAbИAM 01:05, 17 June 2014 (UTC)
Thanks User:Mandarax. User:Jeremy112233, can you please check Mandarax's improved wording.--Redtigerxyz Talk 05:32, 17 June 2014 (UTC)
What meaning of "prescribe" is being used here? The killing of the victim is not mandated by the rites. Also the use of "fearsome" is obviously used as a substitute for the "fearful" of the source which strikes me as an adjectival flourish rather than an attempt to convey any real information. Belle (talk) 08:59, 17 June 2014 (UTC)
Belle, taking a cue from your copyedit. ALT ... that Heramba (pictured) is associated with rites by which the adept can cause the target to be killed? --Redtigerxyz Talk 12:19, 17 June 2014 (UTC)
User:Jeremy112233, is the ALT acceptable?Redtigerxyz Talk 17:40, 18 June 2014 (UTC)
The term "adept" is confusing in this sense. Something simpler like "rites, through which an individual can cause their target", in order for most readers to understand what you are trying to convey. Jeremy112233 (Lettuce-jibber-jabber?) 15:49, 20 June 2014 (UTC)
Thanks for the suggestion, User:Jeremy112233. ALT2 ... that Heramba (pictured) is associated with rites, through which an individual can cause their target to be killed?--Redtigerxyz Talk 16:47, 20 June 2014 (UTC)

Symbol confirmed.svg That fixed it, I think the article is good to go now. Jeremy112233 (Lettuce-jibber-jabber?) 16:54, 20 June 2014 (UTC)

Pulled ALT2 from prep. Wikipedia's MP can't be saying that certain rites actually kill people (unless they actually do, I suppose). Maybe something like

ALT3 ... that the rites of Heramba (pictured) purport to allow their adepts to inflict delusions, irresistible envy, enslavement, paralysis, or death?

-- but I'm not comfortable concocting a new hook on the fly. (I see adept was rejected earlier, but it's exactly the right word in this context. In any event the hook that was promoted certainly is inappropriate.) EEng (talk) 02:21, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

EEng, IMHO "purport" is editorizing. The reference uses the "can" tone. Also the rites of Heramba suggests "all" rites, also they are only connected to Heramba. There are six Tantric abhicara rituals, not solely associated with this deity; there are other deities. So I suggest "associate". Six rituals, each for a different purpose, one of them is murder. So I had "prescribe" in the original hook. These rituals are recommended as a recipe for murder; we do not comment if they work or not. I also agree that the simpler word "individual" is fit for DYK; but the article should have "adept", a term which confuse readers.
ALT4 ... that Heramba (pictured) is associated with rites, which are recommended so that an individual can cause their target to be killed?

EEng, I am sure you can suggest something better than ALT4. :) Redtigerxyz Talk 14:28, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

I'm not setting myself up as the person who can compose the best hook all the time. Though I'm happy to contribute what I can along those lines, I'm primarily interested in keeping bad hooks from reaching the main page. Purport is exactly the right word -- it allows description of a claim, with an implication of skepticism. If the source uses a can tone, then it's either a primary source which really believes the claim, and so probably isn't a source we should be using, or it's a secondary source which speaks from the point of view of the belief system it's describing, knowing that the reader will understand that it (the source) it doing that for descriptive convenience, and isn't attesting to the truth of the belief (and this latter, BTW, is the tone adopted in the article).

Not sure I understand the issue with the other deities and so on, but perhaps one of these satisfies that concern:

ALT5 ... that Heramba (pictured) is associated with rites by which, it is believed, one may inflict delusions, irresistible envy, enslavement, paralysis, or death?

ALT6 ... that Heramba (pictured) is associated with rites by which, their adepts believe, one can inflict delusions, irresistible envy, enslavement, paralysis, or death?

The bad stuff other than death I added because that's what the article says, but if for some reason you want to just leave it at death that's certainly fine with me. EEng (talk) 15:25, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
EEng, ALT5 is the most neutral, accurate and hooky IMO but possibly "on his victim" will make it clearer. ALT7 ... that Heramba (pictured) is associated with rites by which, it is believed, one may inflict delusions, irresistible envy, enslavement, paralysis, or death on his victim? --Redtigerxyz Talk 16:27, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

"one ... his" is a little unusual. How about

ALT8 ... that Heramba (pictured) is associated with rites by which, it is believed, one may inflict delusions, irresistible envy, enslavement, paralysis, or death on a victim? EEng (talk) 16:53, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

BTW "it is believed" can sometimes be problematic when it's a claim like "largest ice cream cone ever", but here it's clear it's something that's believed by... well, by whoever it is that believes it. EEng (talk) 16:53, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

Good with ALT8. Striking all other ALTs to avoid confusion. EEng, thanks for hook. Do we need the green tick again or we are good to go?Redtigerxyz Talk 04:43, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
It's always a good idea to have The Green One at bottom. Here... I'll have my slave do it...

Symbol confirmed.svg Ta DA! 05:24, 30 June 2014 (UTC)

ALT8 to prep2. Oh, wait... I'm changing "it is believed" to "some believe" -- I hope that's OK. EEng (talk) 13:37, 30 June 2014 (UTC)

  • Symbol possible vote.svg I have been uncomfortable with this hook and its several variations for some time. Last night I altered it to remove the "it is believed" phrase which I think had obvious problems, but I still felt uneasy. Today I went back the queue, saw this hook again, and decided it still had serious problems, which I attempted to rectify on the fly with the following:
  • (ALT9): ... that the deity Heramba, protector of the weak, is associated with rites for inflicting harm on one's enemies?
- Redtigerxyz quickly reverted back to the previous hook, so there was little choice but to pull the nomination back here for further discussion.
My concern with the original hook selected is that it may give a highly misleading and prejudicial impression to the reader. The reader is introduced to the topic with a reference to "rites [which] may inflict delusions, irresistible envy, enslavement, paralysis, or death on a victim". In the first paragraph in the article, he then reads that the associated deity "is popular in Nepal". Later, a section called "worship" reinforces the impression that Heramba is associated primarily with vengeance against one's enemies.
This bothers me a great deal because it inevitably leaves the impression that a large chunk of the Nepalese population spends its time muttering imprecations against their "enemies" in the temple. It also arguably presents Hinduism itself in a negative light. I would describe these as exceptional ideas requiring exceptional sources, but the article clearly doesn't contain them. What the sources do say is that Heramba is seen as a "protector of the weak" and I think it highly likely that this is the quality most appreciated by worshippers. We need to be very careful on Wikipedia not to inadvertently disparage or stereotype other peoples or their cultural practices. So I remain opposed to the original hook, and stand behind my proposed ALT. Gatoclass (talk) 05:34, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
I might add that I think the article could also use a tweak or two. Gatoclass (talk) 05:45, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
Oh, for Pete's sake! (Note: Not intended as blasphemy -- see Wikipedia:Administrators'_noticeboard/IncidentArchive844#Abuse_by_User:EEng) For that matter maybe we shouldn't imply that people in Nepal believe that the way to protect the weak is to inflict harm on people. By this reasoning we can't have a hook that says, "DYK, that the God of the Old Testement describes himself as 'a jealous God'" (after appropriate wrangling over whether the G is capitalized and whether himself should be himself/herself/itself, of course). We are entitled to rely that the reader's native shrewdness will allow him (or her) to understand that the hook highlights only a single aspect of a complex belief system -- we only get 200 characters, remember, so it's kind of a Holy Twitter.

As to what proportion of the population believes this or that, I tried to address that with ALT6 above, and note my comments here

I think there's a slight chance we'll get pushback for "it is believed" which is why I changed it [to "some believe"], but no big deal either way
Yes, once again my crystal ball proves prescient! (Note: Not intended as an admission that I practice conjuring, soothsaying, or other darks arts.) EEng (talk) 06:25, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
(edit conflict) User:Gatoclass, The new hook mixes two traditions: the heterodox Tantra and the orthodox Brahmanical Hinduism. "Protector of the weak" is from the the latter and inflict harm from the former. He is an important Tantric deity; besides his mainstream worship so I don't think it is UNDUE to focus on one of the facets of a complex deity. Also, how does Hinduism become negative if adherents pray for destruction of enemies? In many ancient cultures, warriors go to the gods for destruction of foes; Athens prays to Athena; Troy to Apollo; Buddhists approach Mahakala; Hindus pray to warrior/Tantric deities like Kali, Bhairava, Durga, Heramba. I also do not understand how "This form is particularly popular in Nepal" translates into "it inevitably leaves the impression that a large chunk of the Nepalese population spends its time muttering imprecations against their "enemies" in the temple." Anyways, I am adding a hook from the mainstream tradition:
ALT10 ... that the god Heramba (pictured), protector of the weak, is worshipped for the destruction of one's enemies and gaining fearlessness to face them?
--Redtigerxyz Talk 06:02, 1 July 2014 (UTC)

What improvements in the article are needed? Redtigerxyz Talk 06:04, 1 July 2014 (UTC)

The problem is that when you say something like Heramba "is worshipped for the destruction of one's enemies and gaining fearlessness to face them" you are implying that is all, or mainly what he is worshipped for, when we don't have sufficient evidence for that. When you suggest that an entire cultural group is regularly worshipping a deity "for the destruction of [their] enemies" that is clearly an inappropriate impression to leave, unless you have impeccable sources to demonstrate it. So I don't think this is an appropriate ALT either. Gatoclass (talk) 07:04, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
Well, what about ALT6 (or maybe ALT3, about which there was some concern I didn't grasp)? EEng (talk) 07:11, 1 July 2014 (UTC) P.S. Gatoclass, I do share your concern to some extent. If we offend the wrong people we may all find ourselves the victims of delusions, irresistible envy, enslavement, paralysis, or death -- and then who will watch over DYK? However, if we're lucky all we'll get is the delusions, which won't be a problem since many delusional people function quite well at DYK.
(edit conflict) Gatoclass, I still don't get what the problem is. The ref detailing the thirty-two forms of Ganesha clearly states that he is worshipped for this very purpose. Have added another ref on the deity Ganesha. What is offensive about the "destruction of foes"? Redtigerxyz Talk 07:29, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
Concurring with EEng, ALT6 seems to address your all concern, when we explicitly say adept. ALT6 ... that Heramba (pictured) is associated with rites by which, their adepts believe, one can inflict delusions, irresistible envy, enslavement, paralysis, or death?Redtigerxyz Talk 07:32, 1 July 2014 (UTC)

One thing that never ceases to amaze me at DYK is how passionately some reviewers will argue over every nuance of meaning regarding an utterly trivial matter, but when it comes to potential slurs upon an entire ethnic or religious group (unless of course it is one's own), suddenly any instance of sloppy or misleading wording is met with indifference. My own view is that such statements should be policed at least as rigorously as statements pertaining to BLPs if not more so. Your example above Eeng is not very good BTW, a closer one might be something like: "did you know the Christian God commanded that blasphemers be burned alive?". Technically that may be an accurate statement (Leviticus, IIRC) but I think you'll agree it completely misrepresents Christianity. Even so, it would not be so much of an issue on en.wiki where most users would recognize its inappropriateness, but what if a hook of that nature appeared on the wiki of another language whose users knew nothing of Christianity? That's the situation we are in here. Gatoclass (talk) 07:32, 1 July 2014 (UTC)

Gatoclass, you're underestimating our readers. Your logic implies a hook can't offer a glimpse of anything rated PG or higher unless "the whole story" can be comprehended within the 200-character straitjacket. The article should place this one aspect in a balanced context, and since almost no reader (except those already familiar with the subject) will have any idea what belief system is even being referred to, until he clicks through to the article, there's no damage done by the hook even under your worst-case scenario for our readers' capacity to misunderstand. EEng (talk) 17:42, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
Gatoclass, I can understand that Heramba's Tantric afflictions may be comfortable to all; but what is wrong with "destruction of foes" part, a very positive trait in Hinduism?--Redtigerxyz Talk 07:38, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
Because for all I know, it is similar to the Leviticus example I gave above. Do we know how common it is for worshippers of Heramba to supplicate for "destruction of foes"? Or do they just enter the temple on a day-to-day basis simply to worship their chosen deity like most other believers? Gatoclass (talk) 08:06, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
Gatoclass, Please do not compare Hinduism with Christianity or any other Abrahamic religion. They are poles apart. There are deities related to specific purposes in Hinduism. Heramba will be worshipped like any normal Hindu deity, on a day-to-day basis; but when a devotee wants the "destruction of foes"; the deity is specially specifically propitiated. Another example, Shashthi is the goddess of childbirth; she will be worshipped everyday; her temples would not be abandoned; but the specific purpose of her worship is to get children or for protection of the newborn. So when there is a need for children, she will be approached; not a Ganesha or Heramba.

ALT11 ... that the god Heramba (pictured), protector of the weak, is recommended to be worshipped for the destruction of one's enemies? Redtigerxyz Talk 09:49, 1 July 2014 (UTC)

No, that still lays undue emphasis on one aspect. And why this insistence on the "destruction of enemies" phrase anyway? What is wrong with the simple "harm" I proposed, which covers all bases not just "destruction"? Gatoclass (talk) 09:58, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
Gatoclass, let's go with ALT9 and end this. ALT9 "... that the deity Heramba (pictured), protector of the weak, is associated with rites for inflicting harm on one's enemies?" Redtigerxyz Talk 10:02, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
Much appreciated, Redtigerxyz :) I will re-promote shortly. Gatoclass (talk) 10:20, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
Actually, I might make a tweak or two to the article before re-promoting, but it will have to wait until tomorrow now as I am about to log off. Gatoclass (talk) 16:07, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
  • @Redtigerxyz: I've made some tweaks to the article. If you have no objections to them, this nom is ready for promotion. Gatoclass (talk) 12:31, 5 July 2014 (UTC)
Gatoclass, just removed self-confidence, as not in ref. Everything else is good. Thanks. --Redtigerxyz Talk 13:09, 5 July 2014 (UTC)
AUS DER TIEFEN RUFE ICH, HERR, ZU DIR! Not yelling, but God is far from DYK, as well all know. Deliver us from these depths, O Lord, by putting here a green tick for ALT9! But who, O Lord, who amongst Thy servants is worthy to place such a tick, since all have now had a hand in tweaking the article and/or the hooks? EEng (talk) 22:27, 5 July 2014 (UTC)
I can still verify the hook, utilizing one of my special administrators' abhichara. Just kidding. But actually, I can still verify the hook since my changes only amount to copyediting, which is allowed under the rules. However, I haven't done so yet since I want a little more time to think about this nom. Gatoclass (talk) 13:10, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
GC? EEng (talk) 02:23, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
GC? EEng (talk) 04:03, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
I haven't forgotten about this nom, just haven't found time to get back to it yet. I don't like the change Redtigerxyz made but haven't thought of an alternative wording yet. The problem with some of these noms of Red's is that they are based on very flimsy sourcing which doesn't necessarily present a full and balanced picture of the practices of worshippers and we need to be careful not to over emphasize fringe practices. I have actually been considering a trip into town to visit the city library which may have some more info, or perhaps my local university library, but I have a lot to do off-wiki right now so if I make the effort it probably won't be for some time yet. Gatoclass (talk) 04:14, 17 July 2014 (UTC)




Articles created/expanded on June 17[edit]

Hawksmoor (restaurant), Ginger Pig

The Hawksmoor full breakfast

  • Reviewed: Great British Meal
  • Comment: I started the Ginger Pig article to eliminate the red link but, as its name makes an interesting hook (longhorn pigs!?), it would be good to make this a double DYK. The picture is provisional - I need to look back through my own photos as I have eaten there myself.

Created by Andrew Davidson (talk), Nominated by Andrew Davidson (talk) at 18:31, 24 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol voting keep.svg Both articles are long enough and new enough. The hook is intriguing and has an inline citation to an offline source. Other references for Hawksmoor are mostly behind paywalls. The article Ginger Pig does not include the hook fact but I think that is not a DYK requirement. The image is appropriately licensed and I observed no policy issues. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:19, 2 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg Second QPQ needed as Andrew and Northamerica each has over five DYKs already. BobAmnertiopsisChatMe! 21:57, 2 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg I have just reviewed Frank Ringo and will do more to get that back on track. I have started adding more images to the Hawksmoor article and updated the one suggested for DYK use. Andrew (talk) 12:56, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Thank you, Andrew Davidson. Second QPQ done. It is not an initial full review, but nevertheless it contributes significantly to the nom process. Positive element of initial review by Cwmhiraeth still stands, and is taken on trust. I'll expand on policy issues in the hope of forestalling delays on this nom (this is a confirmation, not to question the review). Both articles are objective, neutral and fully referenced. At first sight the Hawksmoor article appears a little too positive, perhaps even verging on the promotional ("to offer high-quality, well-butchered beef" and "especially successful") but in context these are basic facts explaining initial purpose, and verbalising the very high profit made - and it is balanced by the negative criticism by Gill at the end. Spot checks for sources of copyvio and close paraphrasing found no matches. The hook checks out with offline citation #3 in the Hawksmoor article. Issue: The hook is not repeated in the Ginger Pig article, so we don't know which citation in Ginger Pig is supposed to support it. When the hook and its inline citation has been added to Ginger Pig, this nom should be OK. --Storye book (talk) 10:25, 10 July 2014 (UTC)



Ruth Budd, William Kuinka, Dirk Keetbaas

Created by Big iron (talk). Nominated by Skr15081997 (talk) at 15:55, 24 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg All articles new enough, long enough, well sourced. Hook is interesting, neutral, inline-cited, but at 208 characters excluding markup, needs to be trimmed. Rwxrwxrwx (talk) 09:28, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
Symbol confirmed.svg No copyvios found. Rwxrwxrwx (talk) 10:29, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg The hook fact needs to be cited in each article, per DYK rules. I added it to the Dirk Keetbaas article. Yoninah (talk) 23:55, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
  • @Skr15081997: I saw your reminder on my talk page. When I skimmed the Dirk Keetbaas article while checking for the hook cite, I noticed close paraphrasing, and was waiting to find time to check the text against the sources. I just did that, and fixed the close paraphrasing as well as mistakes in the text, and added some better refs than 1000 Questions About Canada. Please give me a little more time to check through the other two articles. By the way, the Symphony six article is totally unreferenced, and also a victim of close paraphrasing. Perhaps you want to fix that up in the meantime and make it a quintuple nom? Yoninah (talk) 11:47, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
The Symphony six article needs 9524 more characters to meet the 5x expansion criteria. I am accepting this as a challenge.--Skr15081997 (talk) 12:19, 15 July 2014 (UTC)



Pharnavaz I of Iberia

  • Comment: The editor who expanded this to GA is under a topic ban, and thus cannot claim credit for this article until after the ban is lifted.

Improved to Good Article status by Jaqeli (talk). Nominated by 3family6 (talk) at 23:58, 18 June 2014 (UTC).

  • The picture is quite possibly a copyvio. Note that on its source page the uploader claims authorship, which is very unlikely. Dahn (talk) 20:40, 20 June 2014 (UTC)
  • I see that they claim it is public domain, I don't see where they claim authorship. They do cite Pharnavaz as the author, which is incorrect. The date of authorship is claimed to be c. 1900, which if the author died around that time would mean that the pic is old enough. I'll see what I can dig up on the pic's origins.--¿3family6 contribs 02:59, 21 June 2014 (UTC)
The Commons details contain a link to a website, but I cannot tell where THAT website got the image from. I left a message on Jaqeli's talk page, but right now that editor is blocked - because of their work on this GA nom (yeah, it's complicated) - so they might not be able to reply until the block expires (which will be the end of this week).--¿3family6 contribs 15:30, 23 June 2014 (UTC)
User:Jaqeli says that the author is unknown, and they will try to investigate the age of the photo.--¿3family6 contribs 15:22, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg Picture has been nominated for deletion on Commons. This nomination will be in limbo until the Commons one has been closed; alternatively, the image can be removed from this nomination, which would allow it to be reviewed without waiting for the picture issue to be resolved. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:41, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I've removed the image and the reference to it in the hook.--¿3family6 contribs 05:06, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg Full review of the nomination needed. BlueMoonset (talk) 05:20, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg Yikes what a bunch of problems. OK, then, let's get the donkey work done, at least. New enough (GA 17 June, nom 19 June), and long enough. No QPQ necessary. The hook is sourced to offline citation #46, which I take AGF. The article text is objective, neutral, and fully referenced. The first paragraph in the Life section is awkwardly-worded; as if it were written by an editor whose first language was not English. However the meaning remains clear so I shall not count it as an issue. The two thumbnail images in the article are free. Spot checks revealed no sources of copyvio or close paraphrasing. Issues: (1) "Antiochus" is a disambig link. (2) The pdf file in the bibliography is a deadlink. (3) The large image in the article has an SD template and IMO the template is valid because the artistic style of the image belongs to the second half of the 20th century, therefore the image is too new and cannot be out of copyright - so it has no valid licence. We shall have to wait for the outcome of the SD template discussion before passing this nom (unless someone removes the image from the article). Summary: When issues 1 and 2 are resolved, and when we know the outcome of issue 3, then this nom should be OK. --Storye book (talk)
  • 1) The dab link in this case is valid. The article says "the generic name Antiochus" that the line of Selucid kings went by. So the name is not a specific person, but more a title. 2) The pdf is in a foreign language that I am not at all familiar with, so I can't find an alternative link. It is a scholarly article, so there are print or electronic forms of access, but they might require subscription. Suffice to say, the article is real, even though the link no longer works. 3) Like you said, let's wait and see.
Thank you Storye book for the review.--¿3family6 contribs 18:12, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Thank you for your explanation, 3family6. As I understand it, issues 1 and 2 are not a requirement for DYK, and we've covered it, which is enough for me. So all that remains, as you say, is to await the outcome of issue 3. --Storye book (talk) 08:56, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Storye book, the image was deleted. Are there any other outstanding issues?--¿3family6 contribs 23:40, 18 July 2014 (UTC)







Articles created/expanded on June 18[edit]

Allan Kournikova

  • ... that Anna Kournikova's brother, Allan, was featured in the 2013 documentary film The Short Game which showed him winning his second of three consecutive U.S. Kids Golf World Championships?

Created/expanded by TonyTheTiger (talk). Self nominated at 20:35, 22 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Not a full review, just noting that if The Short Game is supposed to be part of the nomination, then it's a bit – short. Schwede66 06:12, 23 June 2014 (UTC)
  • QPQs done (this QPQ is review of a multi-nom, so it qualifies). --Storye book (talk) 12:47, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Allan Kournikova is new enough (created 22 June, nom 22 June) and it's long enough. The article text is objective, neutral, and fully referenced. No problems with disambig links or with access to external links. Spot checks revealed no copyvio or close paraphrasing. --Storye book (talk) 12:47, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
  • The Short Game is new enough (created 18 June), and it's long enough. Text is objective (but see issue below) and is fully sourced. No problems with disambig links (manually checked). No problems with access to external links were found (spot checks done). Spot checks showed no copyvio or close paraphrasing. Issue: Re neutrality: Even though the subject is a US movie made primarily for a US audience, we still can't have US-centric language in a DYK nom, and "Americans and foreigners" is US-centric. Please change it to something like "children from America and other countries"?--Storye book (talk) 12:47, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Hook: In the Allan Kournikova article, the hook is written there, and the online citation #10 confirms that Allan is featured in the documentary movie, but it does not confirm that the movie shows him winning any championship. Similarly, in the Short Game article, online citation #4 confirms that he is in the movie, and mentions his "upcoming" golf tournament, but it doesn't say he defended it or won it.--Storye book (talk) 12:47, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Summary: Issues are (1) neutrality problem in The Short Game article, and (2) either a citation is needed in both articles for winning the championship mentioned in the hook, or another hook is needed. (3) Hook should be written out in full in both articles, with inline citations covering all of the hook (sorry, 2 and 3 overlap, my bad). When these issues are resolved, this nom should be OK. --Storye book (talk) 12:47, 13 July 2014 (UTC)




John V. Farwell & Co. & John V. Farwell

Gray dorcopsis

Created by Teemu08 (talk). Self nominated at 14:38, 19 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg QPQs done. --Storye book (talk) 09:25, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Re John V. Farwell. New enough (created 19 June, nom 19 June), and long enough. The article text is objective, neutral, and fully referenced, although almost all of it is sourced in one offline book. Because the sources are offline, no checks could be made for copyvio or close paraphrasing. No disambig links found in manual check.--Storye book (talk) 09:25, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Re John V. Farwell & Co.. New enough (created 18 June) and long enough. The article text is objectively written and neutral in style, and is fully referenced. No sources of copyvio or close paraphrasing found. No disambig links found.--Storye book (talk) 09:25, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Hook: The hook is sourced in the article John V. Farwell & Co. to offline citation #4. Hook image is free and appears in one of the articles. Issue: the hook needs to be repeated in full in the article John V. Farwell with an online citation.--Storye book (talk) 09:25, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Summary: When the hook has been repeated and sourced in the article John V. Farwell with its inline citation, this nom should be OK. --Storye book (talk) 09:25, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
  • @Storye book: Thank you for your review. I have improved the referencing and made a more explicit reference to Marshall Field's in the Farwell article. Teemu08 (talk) 17:30, 22 July 2014 (UTC)

No Mediocre

  • ... that "No Mediocre" is a "get-your-shit-together" type of record?
  • Comment: Not a self nomination.

Created by Ignorantart (talk), STATicVapor (talk). Nominated by Launchballer (talk) at 10:31, 19 June 2014 (UTC).

  • The hook is no good as that claim is made by the artist himself and what we actually have in the article is " It’s a get-your-sh—together-type of-record" (so the sh- bit could be shopping or shoes, both of which I find more uplifting than shit; T.I. probably just didn't want to mention shopping or shoes in front of the reporter which is why it is partially blanked) Belle (talk) 00:48, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
ALT1: ... that "No Mediocre" was intended as "something to uplift women"?--Launchballer 18:58, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg New enough (created 18 June, nom 19 June) and long enough. No need for QPQ. ALT1 checks out online with citation #6. I have struck the original hook in response to comment by Belle above. The article image is fair use with appropriate licence and rationale. I have reduced the image size as required by the licence terms. The article text is objective and neutral, and fully referenced. I understand that the paragraph beginning "On June 17, 2014" is referenced with citation #6 which is written at the end of the blockquote. No problems with disambig links or with access to external links. Citations 1-7 were checked for copyvio (see issue 2 below). Citations 8-23 were not checked. Issues: (1) References #1 and #10 in the Tracklisting section are sales pages. I do not object to this personally, as it is better to show people that they can buy the tracks cheaply, than to make the album sound interesting in the article then leave them possibly googling for free downloads. However, to prevent hassle and delay on this nom I suggest that you remove the citations. (2) Re possible sources of copyvio and close paraphrasing:

    recruited pharrell williams who was influential in his move to columbia to executive produce the lp (citation #4)

    as well and deep down his new record is about being your best self (citation #6)

    When issues 1 and 2 are resolved, this nom should be OK. --Storye book (talk) 14:47, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
I must be honest; I thought by 'issues 1 and 2' I thought you meant the two issues of copyvio. I'm not following what the problem is with the sales cites; they're primary sources which are fine for sourcing raw data.--Launchballer 23:52, 20 July 2014 (UTC)





Articles created/expanded on June 19[edit]

Sri Temasek

Sri Temasek

  • Reviewed: Not a self-nomination

Improved to Good Article status by Jacklee (talk), Hildanknight (talk). Nominated by Oceanh (talk) at 11:42, 20 June 2014 (UTC).

  • If the article is selected, please give credit to primary contributor Jacklee, as I only nominated the article and added two references. To be honest, I feel the hook is not interesting enough. --Hildanknight (talk) 15:32, 20 June 2014 (UTC)i
  • Added credit to the primary contributor. Although these contributions date from 2008, little extra was needed to bring the article to GA in 2014. Oceanh (talk) 17:37, 20 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg Struck original hook, deemed insufficiently interesting by person who took it to GA status. New ALT hook needed if this is to be fully reviewed. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:53, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
  • How about the fact that, although it is the official residence of the Prime Minister, none of the Prime Ministers have actually lived there? --Hildanknight (talk) 02:52, 8 July 2014 (UTC)

Thank you for the notification. Here is a suggestion for an alternative hook:

  • ALT1: ... that Sri Temasek (pictured) is designated as the official residence of the Prime Minister of Singapore, though none of the past or present holders of the post have lived there with their family?

Oceanh (talk) 02:59, 8 July 2014 (UTC)

To Hildanknight: Did not see your post before I saved my suggestion, which is essentially similar to your proposal — thank you, maybe your wording is better. Oceanh (talk) 03:18, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg Full review needed. In addition, here's Hildanknight's version of the hook written out as a proper ALT, for consideration by the reviewer:

EEng (talk) 02:51, 11 July 2014 (UTC)

  • Symbol question.svg New enough (GA 19 June, nom 20 June) and long enough. Hook image is free and appears in article; the other article image is free also. QPQ not required. Article text is objective, neutral, and fully referenced. No disambig links found. I have struck ALT1 in response to comment by its author and because ALT2 supersedes it. I have corrected the grammar of ALT2. The noun "none", meaning "not one", is singular therefore the verb must be "has", not "have", in Standard English. ALTs 2 and 3 are sourced in offline citation #7, accepted AGF. The accessible external links were checked for sources of possible copyvio and close paraphrasing, but none found. Issue: Citations #3, #9, #10, #11 and the first link in the External Links section are deadlinks. When the above deadlink issue has been resolved, this nom should be OK. --Storye book (talk) 09:42, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
Thank you for pointing at the deadlinks. These references seem to have been added (and accessed) in 2008, that is more than five years ago, and indicates the instability of weblinks in the long term. The Oxford Dictionary now seems to be a subscription service, and this (ref 3) should either be marked as such by someone who has subscription, or better be replaced by a book reference, which is more stable. (I have another dictionary with similar but still different description of the word cynosure; or I could probably find the book in a library at some occation). The dead external link can simply be removed. References 9, 10 and 11 are used to document facts in the article, and are therefore important. Maybe @Hildanknight, who brought the article to GA, can help (pinging in case you didn't already notice the discussion)? Oceanh (talk) 09:14, 18 July 2014 (UTC)




Articles created/expanded on June 20[edit]

Russell Wilson (mayor)

  • ... that after Russell Wilson suffered two strokes he was granted a leave of absence by Saskatoon's city council and thus became the shortest serving mayor in the city's history?

Created by Big iron (talk). Nominated by Skr15081997 (talk) at 12:11, 23 June 2014 (UTC).

  • I have no idea what a "heart stroke" is, and the article doesn't contain the string heart. EEng (talk) 02:13, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
  • I have removed the word heart from the hook.--Skr15081997 (talk) 03:40, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg Article is new enough, long enough, neutral, properly cited, and free of close paraphrasing, copyright violations, and plagiarism. Hook is short enough, interesting, and cited with an inline citation, and does not focus unduly on negative aspects of living people. --Hirolovesswords (talk) 02:56, 27 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg Pulled from prep owing to close paraphrasing. I've currently only checked the PD source, but owing to how prevalent the issue is I think pulling was necessary. Example: Article: ""died at home three weeks later on November 13 at the age of 72." source: "died in his home three weeks later, on Friday November 13, at the age of 72." — Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:28, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
This touches on another concern I've had for a while now, which is that there seems to be a misunderstanding among DYK regulars as to what constitutes a close paraphrasing problem. As Crisco mentions, the source is PD anyway, but even if not, this doesn't constitute close paraphrase -- this is a classic case of WP:LIMITED. EEng (talk) 14:29, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Sorry, nixed the first clause in that statement; the highlighted issue is from the second source (which I read while still writing that comment). There are several great cases for WP:LIMITED in the text "He married X", etc. This is not one of them, nor is the structure of the paragraph this clause is in (read the two sentence by sentence and you'll see what I mean). Reworking here is trivial, nothing near what WP:LIMITED refers to. For instance, "on November 13, three weeks after his stroke, Wilson died at his home. He was aged 72." — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:39, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
The example you gave originally is certainly allowable, but the paragraph as a whole, as you now point out, is flat-out not OK, especially in the copying of the peculiar phrase "acclaimed as mayor". EEng (talk) 15:06, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
EEng, I have removed the close paraphrasing present in the article. The PDF source provides us most of the info about him. Since this article is a biography you will obviously find almost the same chronological pattern.--Skr15081997 (talk) 10:09, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
EEng or Crisco 1492, can any one of you review the article now.Skr15081997 (talk) 09:43, 2 July 2014 (UTC)
  • @Crisco 1492: I have removed the close paraphrasing issues almost a week ago, please review the article again.--Skr15081997 (talk) 08:45, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Still looks a little close. The easiest way to deal with close paraphrasing of the structural variety is to find information from another source which expands on what your first source told you. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:48, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
  • ALT1 ... that a bank account belonging to former mayor of Saskatoon, Russell Wilson, was unclaimed since 1929?
  • I like the unclaimed money, though we don't know if it's still unclaimed:
ALT2 ... that a bank account belonging to former mayor of Saskatoon, Russell Wilson, went unclaimed for 77 years?

EEng (talk) 01:28, 20 July 2014 (UTC)

  • @EEng: your hook is better than mine. Can you review the article?--Skr15081997 (talk) 06:12, 20 July 2014 (UTC)



Teresa Magbanua

5x expanded by PaintedCarpet (talk). Self nominated at 00:00, 21 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg No problems with the length and sources. Article has been expanded 5x since creation. Both hooks are also sourced and in the maximum character length. It's GTG for me. -WayKurat (talk) 18:05, 22 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg Did you check for close paraphrasing? Yoninah (talk) 22:57, 22 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg Ok, after double checking the sources, some of them does not directly mention the cited sentence. Ex: "She would often ride on horseback from Sara back to her hometown of Pototan, a 30 kilometres (19 mi) distance over rugged terrain.". The attached source does not mention this. Also some of the external links are dead. If the sources are aligned, it's good to go. -WayKurat (talk) 02:37, 23 June 2014 (UTC)
  • I reworked the sentence you mentioned, since I might have inferred too much when writing the face out in my own words. It should better match the source now. I've also updated the links; the ones in there now should all work. PaintedCarpet (talk) 15:56, 23 June 2014 (UTC)
──────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────── Symbol confirmed.svg - Rechecked sources. Dead links already removed, it's aligned so far. Both hooks are supported by multiple sources. Good to go for me. -WayKurat (talk) 11:37, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
Symbol possible vote.svg I've returned this from prep. The hook appears to be unsourced and there is a clear WP:PARAPHRASE issue here. For example - Source: When the Revolution against the Spaniards broke out in Iloilo province in October 1898, Nay Isa lost no time, despite the protest of her husband, in presenting herself to Gen. Perfecto Poblador, her uncle, who had been designated as the commander of the Northern Zone. After the initial hesitation, General Poblador relented and Nay Isa was given command of a bolo battalion. Article: Eager to help (and against the wishes of her husband), Magbanua left Sara and presented herself to her uncle, Major General Perfecto Poblador, who was commander of the Northern Zone at the time. While initially hesitant, General Poblador eventually relented and gave Magbanua the command of a bolo battalion. Gatoclass (talk) 11:01, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
I've moved the source directly after the hook in the leas, so hopefully that's more clear. I also reworked several of the paragraphs to address paraphrasing concerns. PaintedCarpet (talk) 16:23, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
Symbol redirect vote 4.svg It may be better if another reviewer can check on this article after the revisions done last June 28 for at least a second opinion, as I have reviewed this DYK nomination three times. -WayKurat (talk) 13:47, 21 July 2014 (UTC)






Rock 'n' Roll Cities

Created by Beatleswhobeachboys (talk). Nominated by Wilhelmina Will (talk) at 02:00, 20 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg Article is sufficiently long, new, and the hook is appropriately referenced and interesting. Not a self-nom so no QPQ needed. Looks good to go. Teemu08 (talk) 15:18, 20 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg The article could use a copyedit to smooth out the grammar. Also, the reviewer should check for close paraphrasing. Yoninah (talk) 23:05, 22 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the prose tightening, @Wilhelmina Will:. I do not really see any issues with paraphrasing. I can see @Yoninah: is coming from with his comments, as that Rolling Stone snippet is fairly long. However, since there is a dearth of reviews for the song, I think that an extended quote is OK as it is properly attributed. A blockquote template might be more appropriate if this was a high-level review like FA or GA, but for a DYK I think that it is fine. Teemu08 (talk) 20:03, 16 July 2014 (UTC)


Cebrennus rechenbergi

Created by Sarefo (talk). Self nominated at 04:23, 20 June 2014 (UTC).

  • there's now also a picture in the article, but the original author has not sent the permission email to wikimedia yet. --Sarefo (talk) 01:50, 24 June 2014 (UTC)

Symbol possible vote.svg I'm concerned about the prose size. It appears to fall short of the eligibility requirement (1412/1500). I would hate to see this interesting DYK get rejected so please remedy the problem by briefly expanding it. I'm willing to keep this open if you can expand it shortly. Viriditas (talk) 04:58, 8 July 2014 (UTC)

I have expanded the article slightly and it is now 1609 B. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:57, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
Thank you. The current nom is somewhat repetitive, telling us that the Moroccan flic-flac spider uses a flic-flac motion. Since we already know it is a flic-flac spider, would it be helpful to describe it in a different way here? Although interesting, I see more appeal with the spider robot on Mars hook in the last paragraph, but that's just me. Viriditas (talk) 09:58, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
Waa, a flic-flacking spider, what can be more cool?! :) I'll marvel about the bot when it actually has some real uses, not just a bionics guy talking his toy up :) About the nom, how about "the Moroccan huntsman spider Cebrennus rechenbergi uses a flic-flac motion"? --Sarefo (talk) 07:58, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
Better. In the previous hook, you said it uses the motion to evade threats. In the article, you say it engages in "flic-flacking in order to minimize evade threats". That doesn't sound right. If I had to guess, I would say you were missing an "and", as in "flic-flacking in order to minimize and evade threats. The source cited doesn't help. Viriditas (talk) 10:15, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
Fixed. No idea how the "minimize" got in there. --Sarefo (talk) 00:10, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
Considering that we have so little content, the fact that the sentence "It is most closely related to the Tunisian Cebrennus villosus, which does not flic-flac" is unsourced presents a problem. Viriditas (talk) 10:44, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
sourced now. I think I just got bored putting the refs behind each sentence :) -Sarefo (talk) 07:58, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
That's definitely an improvement, thanks. After reviewing the nomination and making a few copyedits, I'm seeing the primary problem come into focus. The article relies on just two sources: a university press release and a science news website. I think the article really need to cite the main source Jäger 2014. If you don't have access to it, we can request it at WP:RX. I think in this particular instance, it would be very helpful. Viriditas (talk) 04:15, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
I've opened a request. Viriditas (talk) 10:38, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
Look, the spider flic-flacs. No idea how the paper will change the veracity of that. But if you find the time to improve the article, go ahead :) --Sarefo (talk) 15:10, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
Well, I'm not satisfied just yet. Let's repeat your current ALT below in case another reviewer wants to sign off on it. Viriditas (talk) 10:13, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
Viriditas, do what you think is best; but I don't remember having to jump through hoops of shifting goalposts the last times I wanted to share something awesome in the DYK section. I don't see the merit of going to the original literature for now, and I think it would be in everybody's interest if the discussion about the DYKability of the article would not take more time than actually creating the article. --Sarefo (talk) 13:46, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
Sorry, I didn't watchlist this page. I can't be the only reviewer around here. Viriditas (talk) 10:23, 17 July 2014 (UTC)

ALT1: ... that the Moroccan huntsman spider Cebrennus rechenbergi uses a flic-flac motion?

Looking again, I see paraphrasing issues. I've made the sources explicit. Viriditas (talk) 03:41, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
I've just added two new reliable sources into the article for expansion and verification.[4] Viriditas (talk) 04:41, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
And, I just fixed another error.[5] This article requires a thorough fact-checking, and is far from accurate. Viriditas (talk) 04:50, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
Correction: the article was correct but the NYT and UPI were mistaken. I have remedied the situation and I will now add an inline note explaining it. Viriditas (talk) 05:21, 18 July 2014 (UTC)

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  • Symbol delete vote.svgThe article is new enough, and now meets the prose length requirements. The article is sourced, though it should at some point be updated with the actual physical descriptions/ecology etc from the type description. Also there are still several sentences that have very similar/same wording as sources. If the wording were updated It would not be an issue. it looks like the original nominator has abandoned the nom?--Kevmin § 20:06, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
I was put off by the never-ending shifting goalposts proposed to what I think should be a sufficiently interesting article of sufficient quality. C'mon, it's a goddamn FLIC-FLACKING SPIDER!! :) Do what you will with it, I don't care anymore. I don't remember having it been like this with earlier nominations. --Sarefo (talk) 12:04, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
Sarefo, I understand your frustration. However, what appears to you as "moving the goalposts" is actually a process-driven, detail-oriented attempt to review your nomination. If reviewers find a problem and then you fix it, but then another problem is found, that is not "moving the goalposts", it is an attempt to fix issues with this nomination. We shouldn't pass a nomination simply because it has met one criteria when others are left unfulfilled, so I don't follow your reasoning here. FWIW, User:Phoebe said she would email me the research article so I could better review the actual source. We have had many problems with earlier nominations, so the criteria has tightened up a bit in practice. Of course, if a nomination is made that has little to no issues, it is easily passed. At this point, I'm not comfortable passing it until I've had a chance to look at the research article and most of the close paraphrasing is resolved. If Phoebe sends me the article, I'll be happy to take another look. Viriditas (talk) 02:47, 24 July 2014 (UTC)


Articles created/expanded on June 21[edit]

Thomas Shaughnessy, 1st Baron Shaughnessy

5x expanded by Orangemike (talk). Self nominated at 20:51, 21 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol possible vote.svg Failed on the first check. Expansion is only 4.8X (2,350B11,320B), not the minimum 5.
    Other than that, the article appears well-written and promising, but I didn't check any further. Maybe Orangemike would like to expand the article a little more? --BrownHairedGirl (talk) • (contribs) 22:21, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Alas, I feel that to do so would be to artificially pad it for the sake of getting a DYK placed. I decline to do that. --Orange Mike | Talk 00:21, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
  • On further consideration, I've added a bit here and there that I'd omitted before, drawing on the ODNB article mostly. Does it hit 5X?--Orange Mike | Talk 01:20, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
  • @Orangemike: Yes, it definitely exceeds 5X now. Good work.
    However, please note: WP:DYKAR#D2 "The article in general should use inline, cited sources. A rule of thumb is one inline citation per paragraph, excluding the intro, plot summaries, and paragraphs which summarize other cited content." This article has more than 10 uncited paras. --BrownHairedGirl (talk) • (contribs) 01:59, 1 July 2014 (UTC)

I'm astounded no purists have shown up to tsk-tsk about who'd being a contraction, but this is a good example of where it's A-OK to use one, IMO. EEng (talk) 21:52, 12 July 2014 (UTC)

  • Update review. Article is now 5 x expanded, as discussed and agreed above. The expansion began recently enough. No QPQ required for this nominator. Article images are free. The article text is objective and neutral. Issues: (1) 13 paragraphs contain no inline citations. (2) The original hook has 249 characters and ALT1 has 227, excluding the ellipsis, counted with this gadget. The minimum is 200. (3) Because the hook is not repeated in its entirety into the article with its necessary row of inline citations, and because there are so few cited sentences, let alone paragraphs, in the article, it is not easy for a reviewer to verify the hook, let alone a casual reader. I have been able to verify most of it in online citation #3, but have not yet found verification for alderman or for his father fleeing the Irish 1840s famine. (4) Citation #10 is too slow for the broadband in my village, therefore unavailable to me - could someone please kindly check that it is not a deadlink? (5) Re possible sources of copyvio and close paraphrasing, the following extracts are duplicated from the source:

    he was convinced that given the opportunity suppliers contractors carriers workers and anyone else would cheat the company constant vigilance was essential everything had to be done in accordance with the many rules and regulations he introduced he delighted in tracing even minor transgressions and then publicly humiliating the perpetrators usually in writing to ensure that the information became a part of the permanent record even the (citation #3 duplicate)

    most trusted contractors and senior officials were exposed to his wrath if in their efforts to get necessary work done on time they paid prices higher than was deemed appropriate or if they failed in any other way to follow his system (citation #3 duplicate)

    shaughnessy represented the cpr on the boards of major financial institutions with which it had extensive dealings including the bank of montreal the royal trust company the accident insurance company of north america and the guarantee company of north america he (citation #3 duplicate)

    on the milwaukee road van horne left the milwaukee road to become general manager of the (citation #3 duplicate, with close paraphrasing either side)

    there were rumours that he might be named governor general of the irish free state (citation #3 duplicate)

    expensive but vital line north of lake superior to the federal government which could (citation #3 duplicate with close paraphrasing either side)

    There is a load more of this from the same source; I am not going to bother to copy more of this out, or to check the other sources. --Storye book (talk) 09:29, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg Summary: This article has a major copyvio problem, and requires a complete re-write, in my opinion. So until or unless the copyvio can be removed and replaced, and the other 4 issues resolved, this is a no. --Storye book (talk) 09:29, 18 July 2014 (UTC)







Articles created/expanded on June 22[edit]

Steve Ormerod

  • ...that Steve Ormerod is chair of Europe's largest wildlife charity?
  • Reviewed: tbc

Created by Pigsonthewing (talk). Self nominated at 16:46, 23 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol possible vote.svg Article is new enough, but requires expansion as it is not long enough at 1423 characters. Two other problems: there are two citation needed tags that should be addressed, and the only time "largest wildlife charity" is mentioned is in the lead. Please do a QPQ as well. Taylor Trescott - my talk + my edits 01:22, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
    • @Taylor Trescott: I believe that the length is now adequate; the CNs are gone. It would seem superfluous to repeat the "largest charity" statement again in a short article. QPQ to follow shortly. Andy Mabbett (Pigsonthewing); Talk to Andy; Andy's edits 16:25, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
Sadly, the article needs a few extra characters (it is currently 1446 characters and needs to be 1500). Also, the DYK hook fact needs to be sourced in the article; even a source in the lead for "biggest wildlife fund" would be better than nothing. Taylor Trescott - my talk + my edits 16:27, 13 July 2014 (UTC)



Articles created/expanded on June 23[edit]

Make U Bounce

  • ... that the music video for "Make U Bounce" features a woman with massive hands causing carnage out of revenge?

Created by Launchballer (talk). Self nominated at 17:55, 23 June 2014 (UTC).

Done.--Launchballer 09:31, 8 July 2014 (UTC)

Let me suggest:

  • ALT1 ... that the music video for "Make U Bounce" features a woman in no mood for butt-nonsense wreaking revenge with her massive hands?

(butt-nonsense is in [6]. EEng (talk) 15:21, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

  • Symbol delete vote.svg The article is new enough and long enough. QPQ was done. Both hooks are short enough. While both hooks have in-line citations, neither citation is a reliable source. The article has a maintenance template on it questioning the article's verifiability. Chris Troutman (talk) 07:00, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
You may be right about source reliability. I was just looking to improve the hook wording. EEng (talk) 15:14, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
Earlier on I took out The Daily Star and Imvdb.com, but my computer stopped recognised the DNS lookup of this website before I could report it here. Any other unreliable sources?--Launchballer 16:25, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
Notabledance.com and Ministryofsound.com both look unreliable. At this point you have no reliable sources for your hooks even once you remove the maintenance template. The link for Daily Star goes to a disambiguation page so I'm not sure what it refers to, but I had assumed it was a newspaper. Chris Troutman (talk) 19:13, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
The Daily Star I have fixed the link to. Michig, in an exchange on his talk page, has advised me that it is acceptable as one reviewer's opinion; would Notabledance.com be the same? Notabledance.com has been removed.--Launchballer 19:51, 17 July 2014 (UTC)






Bahrain–United Kingdom relations

5x expanded by Mohamed CJ (talk). Self nominated at 11:16, 23 June 2014 (UTC).

  • The hook isn't supported by citations immediately after the claims in the article, and the article doesn't say that the British authorities "refused to declare it so", just that they did not publicly acknowledge its status as a protectorate (a situation that had not changed since the 1880s). Expansion fivefold is OK, age is OK, but I haven't checked the sources for plagiarism. Belle (talk) 23:57, 23 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Thanks for your review. As far as I can see, the hook is directly supported in the section "Bahrain Order in Council and WWI". I have now directly supported it in the previous section as well. As for "refused", I thought it was covered by the Foreign Office refusing to use "strict terms" to define the status of Bahrain. Anyway, I'll change it to "did not admit" (as one British Official once said [7]). How about ALT1 ... that although Bahrain had effectively been a British Protectorate between 1880 and 1913, British authorities did not publicly admit so back then? Mohamed CJ (talk) 10:34, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
  • The rule is that the hook "fact" is supported by an inline citation directly following it. For this hook you have to collate facts from different places in the article. I don't think the rule is one of the better DYK criteria but as it stands you'd be better off trying something else (it is hard to phrase this fact nicely anyway). What about:
  • ALT2: "... that, in 1861, Britain agreed to protect Bahrain as long as its ruler did not in engage in the "prosecution of war, piracy and slavery at sea"? "
  • (you'd need to move one of the citations to the end of that sentence in the article to comply with the rule). Belle (talk) 11:51, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
  • I have no problem with the hook. Citation moved accordingly. Mohamed CJ (talk) 17:29, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg Full review needed now that hook is set. (Note: changed second of two ALT1s to ALT2 for clarity.) BlueMoonset (talk) 00:18, 12 July 2014 (UTC)


General Military Academy

Coat of Arms of the Academy

Created by Aldendor (talk). Self nominated at 01:24, 23 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Welcome to DYK. I hope you enjoy your time here and nominate more articles in the future.
  • Review: Article long enough, new enough and neutral. QPQ is not required as this is the first nomination. AGF on offline/foreign sources. Image appears to be free. Inline citations are generally used, but the last paragraph needs one. There are some lines which could use a reference as well.
  • First hook is short and directly sourced. The second hook is short and more interesting IMO, but the whole paragraph is lacking a source to support.
  • Symbol question.svg In short, the article needs more references and the second hook needs a direct reference. Mohamed CJ (talk) 11:03, 23 June 2014 (UTC)
  • I've already referenced several claims in the article through the official website. Direct references for the hook can be found here ([8][9]) and have been added. Most of the information was taken from the official website of the Academy.--Aldendor (talk) 13:45, 23 June 2014 (UTC)
  • The referencing has been improved and the second hook is now directly sourced (I verified it via Google translator). However, since my first review, the article had been tagged with orphan and outdated tags (orange). I've removed the orphan tag as the article had been linked since then, but I'm not sure about the outdated tag. I'm reluctant to give a pass until that is resolved. Mohamed CJ (talk) 15:08, 23 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg I think the point behind the outdated tag is that the article does not tell anything about the current state of the academy, and it needs to. The most recent event mentioned by date is the 1942 reestablishment, though clearly King Felipe VI was a student well after that date. This comes under WP:DYKSG#D7: Articles that fail to deal adequately with the topic are also likely to be rejected. Ignoring the present academy means that it's missing a critical set of information. Aldendor, we need to know whether you plan to bring the article up to date. Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 00:27, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol delete vote.svg There has been no action on the issues, and the nominator has not edited on Wikipedia since the day this was nominated. Under the circumstances, it seems highly unlikely that the problems will be addressed, so this nomination is being marked for closure as unsuccessful. BlueMoonset (talk) 20:23, 21 July 2014 (UTC)


Blagoje Jovovic

Created by Aleksa Lukic (talk). Self nominated at 01:53, 24 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Over two times the minimum character limit, created today and is neutral. I couldn’t find any word for word copying. However, the last few sentences of the article was uncited and the actual facts that the hook is based upon need to be internally cited (just citing the end of the paragraph won’t work). The hook is under 200 characters and is interesting. The image is licensed under acceptable licenses for being used on DYK. Just clear up the citation issues and this DYK hook will be good to go. Spirit of Eagle (talk) 02:58, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
Yes check.svg Done Did you have this in mind? Alex discussion 03:41, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
Symbol question.svg Ok, everything looks good to go. Per the below, I've removed my check. Spirit of Eagle (talk) 04:12, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
Symbol question.svg Hold on. The paragraph on the assassination in the article does not make a lot of sense in English (it needs a copy-edit at the very least) and seems to be a direct translation (not paraphrased) from the source cited. The source appears to be a Serbian tabloid news site, so I don't know whether this would normally be classified as a reliable source. Regardless of that, I noticed that the image was taken from the same news site and then a given a CC licence by the nominator which doesn't seem right, especially as the news site credits the image to Wikipedia in the first place. As the news site had presumably taken the image from some other language's wikipedia, I had a look at the most obvious candidates and found that the image and text for the news site's article came from the Serbian Wikipedia article. This is almost circular referencing. The original referencing for the Serbian article came from a web article that is now a dead link, but according to (the admittedly not very reliable) Google Translate was called "The truth about the assassination of a war criminal Ante Pavelic" and was hosted on the web site of the "Serbian National Defence Council of America"; neither the article nor the web site have particularly neutral sounding titles and I doubt we can think of them as reliable sources. Belle (talk) 14:00, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
Bellemora I'm not sure what paragraph in particular you're referring to. If you had the book quote in mind, it had to be translated directly, because it's a quotation from the book. I used Telegraf.rs as a source, but if you pay more attention, you could see that my assertions are supported by other reliable sources as well (in the 'References' section). As for the picture, I've probably overlooked that (that website's licensing confused me), so I will change the licensing and the picture can be removed. Moreover, I couldn't find the quotation saying "The truth about the assassination of a war criminal Ante Pavelic", so could you please provide a link? And if you get into account all the atrocities and things a sane mind couldn't even imagine that Ante Pavelic is responsible of, you wouldn't care much of "neutral sounding". Alex discussion 17:46, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
I'm talking about the whole section on the assassination which (although translated) seems to be nearly identically phrased and structured across this article, the Telegraf article and the Serbian Wikipedia article (the Serbian WP article omits the book extract though). I think that if you have other more reliable sources then you should to use them to support the claims in the article rather than use the Telegraf which has obviously cribbed from the Serbian WP article. "The truth about the assassination of a war criminal Ante Pavelic" was the Google Translate rendering of "Истина о атентату на ратног злочинца Анту Павелића" found as the cited source in [10]. As for neutrality, it is one of the DYK criteria. Belle (talk) 00:50, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
Wow, I am kind of embarrassed right now for missing all of this. I only read English, and I kind of just assumed that the provided news source was a reputable news source and not a copy of another Wikipedia. Regardless, I found a source that might come in handy: [11]. Spirit of Eagle (talk) 02:15, 25 June 2014 (UTC)

──────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────── I've removed the picture and improved the referencing a little bit. Is it OK now? Alex discussion 10:18, 25 June 2014 (UTC)

The text is still identical to the Telegraf article, and the new source you added seems to be another version of Tihomir Tiho Burzanovic account which is already in the pdf (3rd ref) Belle (talk) 14:05, 26 June 2014 (UTC)
Bellemora I've improved the referencing as you noted. The author on the Serbian Wikipedia has originally created that content and he used that book as a source. Is it acceptable now? Alex discussion 11:37, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
I haven't forgotten this, it is just that checking Serbian sources takes a while. Belle (talk) 01:04, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
Also, an attribution tag of some sort is needed to indicate that this translates heavily from the Serbian Wikipedia (this is a requirement of all articles that translate heavily from another language Wikipedia so the attribution section of the Creative Commons license is met). I'll try to find the tag myself and get it posted in talk. Also, I'll defer to Belle for final approval since she seems competent at working with foreign language sources. Spirit of Eagle (talk) 03:24, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
I need to point out also that I HAVEN'T TRANSLATED the content, but I have REPHRASED it and then that rephrased content I've translated into English. Alex discussion 15:31, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
The source which is used in the citations for the paragraph preceding the excerpt does not appear to include many of the details "He then staggered, bent and he was begging for mercy" for example.
I'm not sure what you mean about having rephrased and then translated something. Compare:

"On Wednesday, 10th April at 9 am, in the evening, after leaving the omnibus Pavelic is suspected in his first companion and turned in the direction of Blagoje and fired several shots. Jovovich ran for Pavelic and fired five bullets in his direction. Two bullets struck Pavelic, who stumbled, but bent began to cries of pain and begs for mercy." - Serbian WP

"On Wednesday, April 10 at 9 am in the evening, after leaving the omnibus Pavelic is suspected in his first companion and turned in the direction of Blagoje fired several shots. Jovovich ran for Pavelic and fired five bullets in his direction. Two bullets struck Pavelic, who stumbled, but bent began to cries of pain and begs for mercy." - Telegraf

"On April 10 at 9 o’clock PM Pavelic, after he doubted his first companion, he turned back and fired several shots towards Jovovic. Jovovic then started running after Pavelic and in his direction he fired five shots, out of which two hit him. He then staggered, bent and he was begging for mercy" - this article

This part of the article at least is almost identical to the Telegraf and Serbian WP article in its structure, phrasing and inclusion of details that I can't see in the source. There are also significant gaps or errors in the article; for example, it implies that the assassination attempt took place in Italy when it was in Argentina. This needs more work, bringing in line with the sources and a preferably a copy edit from another bilingual editor ("after he doubted his first companion" for instance is hard to understand and it is unclear whether the "PM" in "9 o’clock PM Pavelic" means "9pm" or "Prime Minister Pavelic"). Belle (talk) 16:26, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
All right. Thanks. I've corrected issues as you noted. If you could please note more of them, it would be appreciated. Have you checked the section about beginning for mercy in the book. I will look it up soon. But if it's falsification, you can remove it. I'm not sure if there's a copy in English, but if you think so, don't hesitate to remove it. Alex discussion 18:06, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
I'm really not the best person to ask (I speak a lot of languages but Serbo-Croat isn't one of them, and Google Translate can give an idea at best). At this stage you really need a completely bilingual copyeditor or somebody with Serbian as a strong second language. Your correction for "after he doubted his first companion" for example is not a lot clearer and I can't see exactly what is meant from the source. Did Pavelic recognize Jovovic's companion? In the source it appears that Pavelic separated from a companion (bodyguard?) he was walking with, but, as I say, the translation is not good. Belle (talk) 09:52, 2 July 2014 (UTC)


Articles created/expanded on June 24[edit]

Radius clause

Created by ViperSnake151 (talk). Self nominated at 02:53, 25 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg New (24th), long enough, neutral, no copyvio found via spot check, QPQ done (though it could use some attention because the nom is still going). Hook doesn't have an immediate ref in article (see 3b). There's also a fair amount of close paraphrasing[12] (instances that aren't the obvious phrases) so those sentences should be completely recast. Please ping me if I don't respond. czar  14:16, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
Symbol possible vote.svg No response—pinging nom @ViperSnake151 czar  16:11, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
How is that close paraphrasing? Those are common pairings of words used in the context of this article, and in most of those cases, they are in completely different sentences. ViperSnake151  Talk  16:35, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
You're right. It's possible that I confused this with another DYK nom (since I did say there was no copyvio). The 3b issue still stands, though czar  16:45, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
Uhh, no. The Lollapalooza one is cited, what's the problem? ViperSnake151  Talk  16:58, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
3b says that hook facts need immediate citations in the article, so following "Lollapalooza festival's use of radius clauses" and "prior to and/or after the performance". czar  17:06, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
It was already cited afterward, what's the problem? ViperSnake151  Talk  22:26, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
What? 3b is very clear and you've been through DYK's rigmarole before, so if you want me to pass the nom, you add the citations. Not difficult. You changed one instance but are missing the other (mentioned above). czar  05:27, 22 July 2014 (UTC)

Vigils for Peace

Vigil for Peace gathering in Hamburg on June 23, 2014

Created by Tfine80 (talk). Self nominated at 02:41, 25 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol possible vote.svg There's a number of unsourced statements in this article. Gatoclass (talk) 13:44, 26 June 2014 (UTC)



The Night We Called It a Day

Created by 3family6 (talk). Self nominated at 02:28, 25 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg The article was created today so it is new enough. The hook fact is sourced to reference number one which states it was a product of one week's recording. There is enough information and looking good. This is good to go.Rain the 1 22:57, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg Did you check the sources for close paraphrasing? Yoninah (talk) 01:01, 26 June 2014 (UTC)
  • As this review isn't technically complete, I'm proposing an ALT, which shouldn't take more than a few seconds to evaluate.--¿3family6 contribs 14:57, 26 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg Need a review of the new ALT, plus a check for neutrality and close paraphrasing. BlueMoonset (talk) 00:51, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg This article is new enough and long enough. The ALT1 hook is more interesting and the fact is cited inline. I have struck the original hook, QPQ has been done and I detected no close paraphrasing. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 17:35, 23 July 2014 (UTC)





Trijata

  • ... that the demoness Trijata is regarded the ideal of a true friend?
  • Reviewed: Li Shaohong
  • Comment: 5x began on 21 June and ended today

5x expanded by Redtigerxyz (talk). Self nominated at 09:20, 24 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg The article is recently expanded, well written, within policy, and though I could not very close paraphrasing, I'll AGF on that. Same for the source of the quote (the quote itself does indeed verify the hook). However: I see an issue with this file -- I am confident that the content creator reused in good faith, but I am not sure that it should have been uploaded on commons. Like many other such files from the subcontinent, it has a very questionable "not in copyright" tag. It claims to reproduce a print by Anant Shivaji Desai (when in fact it looks like a very modern kitschy design, perhaps 1950s), it claims two sources of provenance (e-bay [!] and columbia.edu -- the latter with a misleading link that redirects to this beautiful piece). I think it should be removed from commons altogether, and I frankly recommend a big purge of all such uploads. This problem should not affect the rest of the article, which is manifestly within policy, but I feel it falls within the "no copyright violations" requirement. Dahn (talk) 13:59, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
Images of Desai are all pre-1945, thus being PD-India. This was established in multiple DRs at Commons. So the image you point out is good to stay here and there. But if you still doubt it, feel free to use File:Folio from a Ramayana manuscript, text in Devanagari.jpg or File:Sita accepting a jewel from Hanumana sent by Rama, 1800s.jpg and pass the nomination as you say it shouldn't affect the article. §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {T/C} 11:21, 20 July 2014 (UTC)

Articles created/expanded on June 25[edit]

Hope in Front of Me

Created by HotHat (talk). Nominated by 3family6 (talk) at 19:05, 28 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg Article new enough, long enough and tone is OK. I have searched for differing reviews given the high praise, but appears to be the case that the album was well received by the target audience and not covered in depth elsewhere, so OK to pass on neutrality. The hook has some issues as the article (and its sources) indicate that there are country elements in the album, meaning this hook is a little inexact. @3family6: can you try for an alternative hook? SFB 22:01, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I've revised the hook to be more nuanced. There are two versions I've listed above.--¿3family6 contribs 23:18, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg Approve for ALT1 – I think the second draws more attention to the journalist than is warranted (changing the focus from the album to a comment about the album). SFB 10:07, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg The article doesn't say anything about being a former American Idol contestant. Yoninah (talk) 22:17, 21 July 2014 (UTC)

Forever After

  • Comment: I know that hooks are required to have a citation immediately afterward in the article. However, this hook is unusual in that it is merely pointing out an interesting song given in the track listing, and typically track listings do not need to cite a source because they are assumed verifiable by the album itself.

Created by HotHat (talk). Nominated by 3family6 (talk) at 18:28, 28 June 2014 (UTC).

  • I sourced it by AllMusic and Jesus Freak Hideout, so it is sourced now for the track name.HotHat (talk) 05:58, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg This article is new enough and long enough. The strangely-named song title is one of the tracks which are cited to online reviews. Not a self-nomination so no need for a QPQ review. I did not detect any close paraphrasing or other policy issues. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 17:49, 23 July 2014 (UTC)


Devasena

Kartikeya with Devasena and Valli

  • ... that Devasena (pictured with her husband) represents Heaven, her co-wife Valli denotes the earth?

Created by Redtigerxyz (talk). Self nominated at 17:55, 26 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg new enough, long enough, qpq done, refs checked, hook checked. good 2 go.--BabbaQ (talk) 20:55, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg The first paragraph under "Legends and textual references" needs a cite, per DYK rules. Yoninah (talk) 22:19, 21 July 2014 (UTC)




John McClure (producer)

  • ...that record producer John McClure kept his Grammy Awards in a box in his barn?

Created by Pigsonthewing (talk). Self nominated at 19:33, 25 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg New enough. Long enough. NPOV. Using Dup detector, no copyvios or close paraphrasing found. Heavily reliant on just one source, but it is a NYT obituary, and there is nothing controversial and it is not a BLP. The hook is good, and it is cited. QPQ needed. I tried to fix the link to the second ref, by adding the "http://", and this link to "examiner.com", gives the message, "Your edit was not saved because it contains a new external link to a site registered on Wikipedia's blacklist." I'm not sure how best to deal with that, but it needs to be addressed. Edwardx (talk) 09:34, 26 June 2014 (UTC)
    • Thank you for the positive review, I've already asked that that URL be added to the "whitelist", and am waiting for an admin to act on that. Andy Mabbett (Pigsonthewing); Talk to Andy; Andy's edits 10:49, 26 June 2014 (UTC)
      • Symbol possible vote.svg As DYKcheck says this article has only 1110 prose characters, I'm at a loss as to why it is called "long enough" in the original review, as it is quite far from that. In addition, Examiner.com is not a reliable source, and is very unlikely to be removed from the blacklist, so if this is intended for DYK, Andy Mabbett, I recommend removing the citation from the article and finding alternate sourcing. Finally, a QPQ is still required for this article, and should be supplied in a timely manner. Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 14:12, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
        • I'm a bit shocked that I wrote that it was long enough, when it clearly is not. My sincere apologies for that schoolboy error. Edwardx (talk) 14:21, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
        • My character count came out higher, but I've added even more. I'm still awaiting a response at the whitelist page, and have posted a nudge there. Andy Mabbett (Pigsonthewing); Talk to Andy; Andy's edits 16:45, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Symbol possible vote.svg It's a no from me I'm afraid. Still under 1300 characters of prose, so not long enough, and padding "300" to "three hundred" is kind of gaming the system. QPQ still not done. In all honesty you are better off finding an alternative source than trying to get examiner.com off the blacklist - as WP:V states, "if the information in question is really worth reporting, someone else will probably have done so." However, the hook itself is cited to the New York Times, so that bit's okay. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 16:09, 17 July 2014 (UTC)

What tool are you using to count the characters? What parts of the page are you counting? Andy Mabbett (Pigsonthewing); Talk to Andy; Andy's edits 21:12, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
I use User:Dr pda/prosesize.js, which (AFAIK) is the recommended tool as specified in the DYK rules. I get : File size: 41 kB, Prose size (including all HTML code): 3571 B, References (including all HTML code): 512 B, Wiki text: 4342 B, Prose size (text only): 1291 B (216 words) "readable prose size", References (text only): 24 B. "Readable prose size" is the figure used for DYK. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 21:20, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
I added some more material from the NYT article and rendered the awards list into a narrative format, which is preferred anyway. Javascript says it's a 2328 now. Andy: hope I wasn't too WP:BOLD to do all that. Montanabw(talk) 21:49, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
I see the advice has been to avoid examiner.com and an alternative source was supplied. I have used this in the article, so the questionable source is no longer referenced. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 09:42, 18 July 2014 (UTC)

Symbol redirect vote 4.svg As I have actively worked on this article, a re-review is required. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 09:42, 18 July 2014 (UTC)

Symbol question.svg Almost ready to go (length check and sourcing were the only things outstanding, both of which were fixed, but I checked everything else too just because I'm dedicated/have nothing better to do). Still waiting on the QPQ review (don't think we've forgotten about it just because there's been a lot of chat, we have spies everywhere. Everywhere. They are probably watching you even now. Stop doing that, you'll go blind) Belle (talk) 11:30, 23 July 2014 (UTC)

A quick spin through the contribs of pigsonthewing (talk · contribs) suggests a QPQ has actually been done, in which case this should be all good to go. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)



Articles created/expanded on June 26[edit]

List of fictional characters on stamps of the United States

Created by Slambo (talk). Self nominated at 17:12, 30 June 2014 (UTC).

  • I will select and QPQ review another article later tonight. Slambo (Speak) 17:15, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
  • I don't doubt the factual accuracy of the statement but you don't go to any of the stamps, as far as I can see, if you click on the links; either the main link or the subsidiary links. In its current form this hook is a little disappointing. Could it be narrowed to point directly to a relevant stamp? Philafrenzy (talk) 17:38, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
    • It would be cool to link to articles about the stamps, but they haven't been written yet with the exception of the Celebrate the Century series (in which the Barbie stamp was issued on the pane for the 1960s). For the article, I followed the example of the list for real people on stamps, where each entry links to articles about the subjects themselves. Slambo (Speak) 22:03, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
  • I understand but for me it falls a little flat. I think people will expect to see Barbie or Harry Potter on a stamp when they click, in fact those articles are light on images, probably because everything is still in copyright. It could be narrowed so that the subsidiary links go to images of similar characters on out of copyright stamps if any, it wouldn't be Harry Potter obviously. In the US that's everything up to the end of 1977. There may not be any of course. The main link also has very few images. Philafrenzy (talk) 22:14, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
    • I tried to find as many images that we have available so far to illustrate the list, but only found those that are there now. Looking through my own collection, I don't see too many possibilities for additional scans from pre-1978 stamps. Most of the fictional characters that have appeared on US stamps have been on issues after 1990. The hook could be amended to mention the headless horseman and others from earlier, but I thought the subjects I noted in the first hook would be more interesting to non-philatlists. Slambo (Speak) 22:28, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
I don't want to be a downer on it. I will leave it to others to give their views. Philafrenzy (talk) 22:32, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
Thank you for your input. I added an alt hook that points to articles showing stamp images that are in the public domain. Slambo (Speak) 23:00, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
Good work. That's much stronger in my view. Personally, I would go through the pre 1978 U.S. stamps and see if there are any subjects without an illustration in the article and if so put the stamps in the article right at the top. Philafrenzy (talk) 23:16, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
Of course, they have to be fictional characters so I guess you are a bit restricted. The rock isn't? Philafrenzy (talk) 23:17, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
The rock formation is known by a specific name and had a fictional persona created about him. Slambo (Speak) 23:24, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
OK, you could change the hook to read "the Old Man of the Mountains"? Also change the scan in the article. Philafrenzy (talk) 23:28, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg Full review still needed, including thoughts about the hooks. Suggesting ALT2 as a variant on ALT1 per Philafrenzy's request:





Zaccheus Mason

Created by PapaJeckloy (talk). Self nominated at 22:02, 26 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg long enough, new enough, sources checks out, qpq done, hook checks out. Good 2 go.--BabbaQ (talk) 13:46, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
Symbol possible vote.svg I have returned this one from prep as there are instances of WP:PARAPHRASE, especially from reference 4. Gatoclass (talk) 15:07, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg I have removed the quotations and rephrased some sentences, and i added more text there, there are no paraphrase instances now, i also added more references, It's now good to go. -PAPAJECKLOY (hearthrob! kiss me! <3) (talk) 15:32, 18 July 2014 (UTC).





Articles created/expanded on June 27[edit]

Korean drama

  • ... that Korean drama production companies spend roughly 55-65% of their whole budget on recruiting top stars for a series?
  • ALT1:... that the filming schedule of a Korean drama is so tight actors often have to sleep in awkward places and positions on set, for which the industry has its own invented expression: "side-sleeping"?
  • ALT2:... that an overwhelming majority of scriptwriters of Korean drama are women, while there are only a handful of female directors?
  • Comment: Although not in 7 days, I needed more time, since the article was really in a very bad condition; but it was completely rewritten (see its old state), re-referenced and re-structured to solve the issues with the article.

5x expanded by Teemeah (talk). Self nominated at 13:06, 16 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol possible vote.svg Although a lot of effort has gone into completely rewriting this article I fear it does not meet the DYK criteria as the article was 20 kB before the expansion and is only 24 kB now. The only likely way for it to qualify for DYK will be if it is promoted to become a GA, then it will qualify by right. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:25, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
Cwmhiraeth, It was completely rewritten from zero. Please compare the text to its previous state. This was not an expansion but a rewrite of an extremely poor quality article. It couldn't be made much longer even if you tried. This is an FA in huwiki. I feel that following rules by the letter is discriminating in a lot of cases. Or the community needs to expand the rules to include these cases, as well. This article is as new and as interesting as any other on this page, and all this is going to be decided by mere quantitative numbers only? What if I blanked the whole page and started anew? Teemeah 편지 (letter) 22:13, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
Even if the state of the article on July 4th, when you had removed a large quantity of text, was taken as a start point, the article still does not nearly reach a fivefold expansion. If you feel aggrieved, you can open a discussion on the DYK talk page. I may sympathise with your point of view, but I am only applying the DYK rules. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:23, 21 July 2014 (UTC)

Bear's grease

Atkinsons Bears Grease

  • ... that bear's grease was a popular treatment for hair loss, because of a mistaken belief that as bears are very hairy, their fat could help humans?

Created by Edwardx (talk), Victuallers (talk), Philafrenzy (talk). Nominated by Edwardx (talk) at 22:56, 4 July 2014 (UTC).

Symbol question.svg The article is interesting and promising but the hook needs more work as we're within the scope of WP:MEDRS. The word "mistaken" in the original hook seems to overstate what's said in the supporting source. The source explains why people believed in this treatment but doesn't actually say that they were wrong. I suppose the truth of the matter is that we really don't know for sure because proper clinical trials have not been done. The ALT1 hook seems to err in the other direction and might naively be read as meaning that this is an effective treatment.

To find the middle ground, we might just trim the original hook. Here's some examples:

Another way to go is to focus on the picture, which we're not currently using.

This leaves the reader wondering why there would be a popular brand of bear's grease and they may click through to find out what people used it for.

Andrew (talk) 08:03, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I recommend that we conduct a full clinical trial on the matter before proceeding. I would also like to know whether eating more fish makes you a better swimmer and if carrots help you see in the dark. Or, we could go with ALT5 "... that bear's grease was once thought to be an effective treatment for hair loss?" Philafrenzy (talk) 11:22, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Personally I agree with the logic of ALT4 EEng (talk) 01:38, 20 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Thanks Andrew. Increasingly, I favour short and snappy hooks. All of your three ALTs are an improvement on my original thought. I would be happy with any of them, and ALT4 may indeed be the most straightforward. The very idea of bear's grease is intriguing and needs little elaboration to create a good hook. Edwardx (talk) 10:32, 20 July 2014 (UTC)
The intrigue of ALT4. EEng (talk) 12:44, 20 July 2014 (UTC) I seem to have said this already.
There's no citation for ALT4 and it differs from what the article states anyway (ALT parade meet my rain) Belle (talk) 22:53, 20 July 2014 (UTC)
Oh, go put bear grease on your cat. Or whatever. Andrew, can you fix the article to accommodate this hook? EEng (talk) 00:44, 21 July 2014 (UTC)

Symbol question.svg Long enough, new enough, no copyvio or plagiarism, neutral. QPQ done. The line on the Native American use is too close to the source. I have a few problems with this article though: it sets out a topic ("Bear's Grease", a baldness treatment) and then largely focuses on another (the uses of bear grease in general); many of the claims aren't referenced (although references for some of the claims can be found in the sources for the Atkinsons article, many are unsupported); there is some blurring of the source statements (for example "In the British market, the grease from Russian bears was the most highly prized" "In the British market" isn't what the source says); there is an uncited explanation of the Cruikshank cartoon (if it doesn't need citing perhaps it doesn't need explaining); the section on use by the Native Americans is so reduced from the source as to be almost useless. (Apart from that and the uncited hook, everything is fine!) Belle (talk) 10:15, 21 July 2014 (UTC)

Another great example of why?, oh why?? do we insist in nominating within 7 days??? Edwx, Vict, Phila, can you go off at your leisure and do what needs to be done, then get back to us when the article's ready? EEng (talk) 18:07, 21 July 2014 (UTC)





Woodworth Personal Data Sheet

Created by Antrocent (talk). Self nominated at 09:33, 29 June 2014 (UTC).

  • The apparent cite for the hook -- the Kaplan source -- doesn't say WPDS was the first personality test, rather the first "structured" personality test. I don't know what that means, but it's not what the hook says. Also, searching Kaplan for the word commission doesn't find anything about Woodworth being commissioned by the US Army. (I can believe it, but we need something actually saying so.) EEng (talk) 11:37, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
I have added a new citation identifying the Woodworth as the "earliest personality instrument". I have modified the hook and replaced "commissioned" with "developed" which is supported by the Kaplan source. Antrocent (♫♬) 12:04, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
Also, perhaps an ALT HOOK giving its purpose may be more interesting:
Antrocent (♫♬) 12:07, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
Great! And I like ALT2 -- I think people think PTSD is some phony modern thing, and good to show it goes way back (even to the Civil War, actually, just under other names). EEng (talk) 12:16, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg Full review needed for article and ALT hooks. BlueMoonset (talk) 18:42, 8 July 2014 (UTC)




Nossa Senhora da Graça incident

Created by Underbar dk (talk). Nominated by Kolbasz (talk) at 15:41, 27 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg Review underway. --BrownHairedGirl (talk) • (contribs) 15:53, 27 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg I have reviewed the article, and sadly I am leaning towards rejection.
First, the good points. The article is newly-created. It was developed as a userspace draft, and then copy-pasted today to article space. I would have preferred that the article had been moved rather than pasted, and suggest a history merge, but the article clearly fits the DYK criteria of recent arrival in mainspace.
At 22 kB (3847 words) of "readable prose size", it far exceeds the 1500 characters minimum size for DYK.
The article is well-written, in engaging prose, and tells a compelling narrative of a critical historical incident. AFAICS, it appears to be neutral, and it is thoroughly referenced. There are a few points where I have added {{fact}} tags, but these are minor issues which I do not see as an impediment to DYK.
Most of the images appear to be free, but there are unresolved licensing issues with File:Tokugawa_Ieyasu.jpg. Before a DYK could proceed, the image should ether be removed or have its licensing status resolved.
As a historical event, there are no BLP issues.
The hook fact is interesting and correctly formatted, and I AGF that the off-line source has been used accurately.
However, that brings me to the big problem. The article is based on only 3 sources, each of which is a book written by C. R. Boxer. The article is therefore based wholly on the work of one writer.
That raises a number of problems, including a risk of copyright violation or close paraphrasing, and failure to include different perspectives on events. I have not encountered anything like this before, so I am unsure what the consensus is on the acceptability of using a single source like this. My own initial view is that it is inappropriate, and that the article should be restored to userspace for a complete rewrite, but I would prefer wider input. So I have listed the page at Wikipedia:Copyright problems/2014 June 27.
I am sure that the huge effort put into creating this article was done in good faith, but this use of sources does need further evaluation. Pinging both the creator Underbar dk and the nominator Kolbasz. --BrownHairedGirl (talk) • (contribs) 17:19, 27 June 2014 (UTC)
I can see rejecting it due to potential bias from the sources having a single author, but to go from "sources having the same author" to copyright violation feels like quite a leap of logic. Kolbasz (talk) 23:27, 27 June 2014 (UTC)
I am also confounded by the sudden accusations (based on nothing but wanton speculation, no less), which does not seem AGF at all. I also do not appreciate my work being replaced by a copyright violation notice with, again, nothing more than impulse. I ask that the copyright violation be removed until someone has concrete evidence that the article was plagiarized, which I assure you is not. Getting to the crux of the "issue", Boxer is the only authority that I know of to have dealt with this incident in any significant detail. All the general references I've seen cite his works when they mention this incident, for example in China and Maritime Europe, 1500-1800 by John E. Wills Jr. _dk (talk) 00:33, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
@Underbar dk: Oh dear. Please can you step back, and AGF, and accept my assurances above that I raised these concerns reluctantly and for the reasons stated above?
As I made very clear both here and at DYK, I did not speculate. I noted that the article contains "a risk of copyright violation or close paraphrasing".
Nor are my objections based on "impulse". They are based on a genuine concern that basing such a detailed article so closely on the work of one author carries a great risk of copyvio, even if only by close paraphrasing.
I am aware that you put a huge amount of work into elegantly writing the article, but it remains a problem that it is all drawn from 3 published works of the same author. Whether that is best labelled as a copyvio or not is debatable, but I believe that there is a serious problem in basing such a lengthy article solely on the work of one author whose work is still in copyright. --BrownHairedGirl (talk) • (contribs) 01:33, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
In the interest of centralizing discussion, I'll copy my exasperated reply from WP:CP to here, and add some more. "If you are not even sure that citing the same author should be labelled as a copyvio, perhaps it would be best if you have sorted out the interpretation of the rules on the Village Pump or elsewhere before you blank someone's work with a copyvio notice that you're not even sure if it's proper? Last I know, summarizing an author's work is not plagiarism if it's in my own words." In fact, WP:Close paraphrasing says "Editors should generally summarize source material in their own words, adding inline citations as required by the sourcing policy", which is exactly what I did. _dk (talk) 01:44, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
I have started a thread on the village pump on your suggestion. [13] _dk (talk) 02:56, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
As noted at the village pump, I didn't actually want to blank the article, but that's what the template does.
There is no deadline. If the consensus is that this use of sources is appropriate, then the article can be easily unblanked. In the meantime, nothing has been deleted; it is just on hold pending clarification. --BrownHairedGirl (talk) • (contribs) 03:28, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
There are serious breaches of accepted Wikipedia protocol that you need to address, specifically that if you are not sure, then you shouldn't be blanking people's articles "reluctantly", understanding that is what the template does. This is biting behaviour, and I'm not even a newbie. _dk (talk) 03:43, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
_dk, I have tried very hard to be understanding of the disappointment you must be feeling at criticism of an article which you have written so carefully and so well, and I have at all stages assumed good faith.
However, I am starting to feel that this dialogue is becoming a little one-sided, because I see from you no reciprocal respect for my good faith concern that this is an inappropriate way to use sources. When you start citing WP:BITE even tho you acknowledge that you are not a newbie, I feel less inclined to be gentle in reply.
Look, this isn't complicated. I have questions about sourcing which raise important issues of editorial policy. As you can see, I proactively set out to find venues to get quick answers, and I hope that these questions they can be resolved quickly. In the meantime please try to focus on the substance of those questions rather than making wikilawyering attempts to find some flaw in my efforts to get wider input into assessing them. --BrownHairedGirl (talk) • (contribs) 04:04, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
I'm sorry if I come across as rude or snide, but I'm sure you can understand my frustration at my hard work being blanked for reasons that I struggle to wrap my head around. Thankfully I am not the only one to feel this way, and I am glad to see the matter resolved to my satisfaction. My "wikilawyering", if you call it that, only seeks to get you (an admin, no less!) to follow the accepted practice on Wikipedia, which you continue to dismiss. You may be acting in good faith, and I can appreciate that, but you can hardly expect me not to sound accusatory after blanking my page. May we meet on better terms in our next encounter. Cheers. _dk (talk) 05:40, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
  • The issues have been addressed. _dk (talk) 09:44, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
    • Sorry _dk, but I am afraid that they have not been resolved to my satisfaction. The consensus at the village pump is that this use of sources is not of itself evidence of a copyvio, and I am happy to accept that consensus. That resolves one issue.
      However, it remains the case that the article relies entirely on a single source: the work the historian C. R. Boxer. It includes no other perspective on events. --BrownHairedGirl (talk) • (contribs) 14:51, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol delete vote.svg With regret, I am changing my tentative "no" to a firm no.
    The use of File:Tokugawa Ieyasu.jpg remains unresolved, but could be fixed either by sorting out the licensing or by removing the image from the article. That point is not a deal-breaker.
    However, the fundamental problem remains that this article is derived solely from the works of one historian. No other sources are cited.
    I am glad that the consensus at the Village Pump discussion (permalink) is that this does not raise copyright problems, but per my initial comments, copyright issues are not my only concern with single-sourcing. There remains the wider question of what I described in my initial review as failure to include different perspectives on events.
    This could be resolved by a rewrite which included other perspectives, but as it stands the article does not attempt to incorporate different perspectives, and as such should not appear on the front page. Feel free to seek a third opinion. --BrownHairedGirl (talk) • (contribs) 15:07, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
  • The article now uses File:Tokugawa Ieyasu2.JPG. Until or unless I or someone else finds another author who wrote about this incident (Japanese writers, maybe), I'm afraid that this is how things will stand. Thank you for your review in any case. Cheers. _dk (talk) 16:03, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
  • The article also covers a lot of the historical context. Surely other sources exist for that aspect of the topic? --BrownHairedGirl (talk) • (contribs) 17:08, 28 June 2014 (UTC)

──────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────── I'm astounded by the controversy here. This event is obscure enough that there may indeed be just few RS on it, possibly by just one author. If so, then there's nothing wrong with basing the article entirely on those sources, whose author (in his own article -- C. R. Boxer#Academic career) is described as producing a lifetime of work "highly original, pithy, and path-breaking ... 350 publications, all of the highest order of scholarship". Incredible crap is passed by DYK a dozen times a day, and somehow this article is a problem? EEng (talk) 11:17, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

Agreed. The worst sort of petty-minded bureaucratic nonsense I've seen in a while. Ericoides (talk) 06:17, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
You obviously don't spend much time at DYK. EEng (talk) 07:21, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
Shrewd rewording, very good. No, I can't say I find it as congenial as it used to be some years ago. Ericoides (talk) 13:51, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
[14] EEng (talk) 14:13, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
apparently, User:Heramba is currently the subject of an extensive SPI. Martinevans123 (talk) 14:28, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
How about you and I post a joke ANI report along those lines? "According to [1] this user admits to having at least 32 accounts blah blah presenting a number of different personalities blah blah. " I think that would be hysterical. To give equal opportunity to all the major religions, we'd be sure to include a "Trinity" of sockpuppets etc. EEng (talk) 15:35, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
Utter heresy, you malevolent booby! Can't you hear us all, chanting from the terraces, "There's only one Jimbo Wales." etc, etc. Martinevans123 (talk) 15:43, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
Is this DYK nomination or a WP:GA review? I can't comment on the status of the books written by C. R. Boxer with regard to this subject matter. But at first sight he would appear to be something of an expert in the field. I'm astounded. Martinevans123 (talk) 18:54, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
I should mention that I asked ME123 to comment, precisely because he and I have not always seen eye-to-eye on such matters. (In fact, we've sometimes fought tooth-and-nail -- even getting our noses out of joint! Sometimes when I tell him stuff it seems to just go in one ear and out the other. I'm speaking tongue-in-cheek, of course -- wouldn't want to shoot myself in the foot.) EEng (talk) 19:02, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
(...it was my foot actually, I've still got the bullet holes to prove it, thanks) Martinevans123 (talk) 19:10, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
Once again I've put my foot in my mouth. EEng (talk) 20:58, 29 June 2014 (UTC)



Articles created/expanded on June 28[edit]

CitizenShipper

Created by Frieda Beamy (talk). Self nominated at 17:55, 30 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg New enough. Long enough. QPQ done. Looking at the first source, Dup detector shows "people in need of shipping services with drivers haulers and transporters" in source and article. Checking two other main sources reveals no other significant close paraphrasing or copyvios. Well-cited. The hook is cited, but it would be better to have a link to the official DoT site as well as Escrow.com stating this to be the case. And I've reversed the order of the last two words in the hook - the trucks are empty, not the routes. I've also softened "connects" to "aims to connect", as I believe this is more accurate. I'm not keen on ALT1, as I imagine the plan is to make money, and carbon reductions are just a by-product. Bearing in mind that this article appears to be paid-for work (a fact that I feel should be more explicitly declared), this sort of greenwashing is not NPOV. Edwardx (talk) 09:44, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
    • Hook changes are fine. I rewrote the lead due to duping (there's always a fine line between avoiding duping and failing verification). I added a DOT source for the 29% sentence, although that might add "single-unit" as describing "truck" in either hook to be pedantic; the source uses 29% from 2007 and regards the number as still valid in Dec 2011. I don't intend to greenwash and so have looked for sentences to tone down as well, and I hope that answers any POV. Though the reviewer regarded it as ad-like during the rush to remove AFC backlog, that person reversed immediately upon a second glance through; I believe it properly reflects the sources.
    • As to paid-for work, this article was mostly done before the new terms of use, but I had already disclosed on my userpage, and later disclosed on article talk. To restate the disclosure more specifically, the person I work for is myself; then, I don't distinguish which article subjects are clients and which aren't because it's easier for others to just regard all article subjects as clients and affiliations and to judge the text as they wish. This seems to fit the new terms and what people have said about them; I want to keep within all the guidelines old and new. It does look like I've edited a lot of mainspace, because I edited drafts before they were promoted; but after promotion I only edit obvious balance items like fulfilling requests (such as right now). I have also linked each known article in the industry to the see alsos of the others, and am making improvements to the other articles as well to keep the whole topic area balanced. If there's anything else I need to answer I'll be happy to. Frieda Beamy (talk) 20:27, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
    • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg Frieda Beamy (talk) 02:38, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
Plus it is now at AfD: Wikipedia:Articles for deletion/CitizenShipper Edwardx (talk) 17:30, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
It was I who nominated it for afd as hopelessly promotional. I notice that the very hook is promotional. That someone claims to have a plan to reduce .... is not encyclopedic. Should he succeed in doing so, that would be a suitable hook DGG ( talk ) 17:41, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
Symbol question.svg That's understandable; I have proposed in AFD that the topic be moved to Find sources: "Richard Obousy" – news · newspapers · books · scholar · JSTOR · free images and so I think it would be within DYK rules to wait some days on this move proposal and then see if ALT0 or a new hook would suffice. Frieda Beamy (talk) 15:21, 15 July 2014 (UTC)

Consensus for a shorter version appears to have been reached at AFD. Original hook ALT0 is still good. Instead of ALT1 we could say:

Symbol redirect vote 4.svg But if you wait a couple days I hope to have an even better hook. Frieda Beamy (talk) 23:12, 20 July 2014 (UTC)

  • Symbol possible vote.svg For DYK, while an article is at AfD, its nomination is put on hold. There shouldn't be any call for further review here until the AfD has been closed. Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 20:48, 21 July 2014 (UTC)





Articles created/expanded on June 29[edit]

Tall: The American Skyscraper and Louis Sullivan

Created by I am One of Many (talk). Self nominated at 06:28, 3 July 2014 (UTC).

Symbol possible vote.svg citation 8 has WP:PARAPHRASE, you can remove it for order to it to qualify -PAPAJECKLOY (hearthrob! kiss me! <3) (talk) 05:04, 19 July 2014 (UTC).
WP:Quotations are allowed in articles and one sentence is quoted from citation 8. The citation is now right after the quoted sentence, so all should be fine. I am One of Many (talk) 05:58, 19 July 2014 (UTC)

James McLemore, Alabama Baptist Association, Caesar Blackwell, Antioch Baptist Church (Montgomery, Alabama)

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Created by Drmies (talk). Self nominated at 04:52, 3 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg New enough at time of nomination, all except James McLemore long enough, all I don't see any mention of McLemore in citation #6, though the ABA is mentioned. No apparent paraphrasing policy issues, though I'm a bit concerned about the usage of FindAGrave.com and USGenWeb, among others. Hook is too long, QPQ pending. Cloudchased (talk) 18:20, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Thanks Cloudchased. The hook is under 200 characters once you remove the "other" three article names (DYK supplementary rules). All articles should now be of appropriate length. Obviously I still need to review four articles, and I'm keeping the blank image: I hope to take pictures of the Blackwell grave tomorrow.

    As for these sources, sure, FindAGrave and USGenWeb aren't the greatest of sources, but they're not the worst either. Besides, the information derived from them is not a BLP violation, nor is it necessary to establish notability or overwhelmingly important facts. But if you like, we can have others look at it (Casliber, do you have a moment?) or I can post at RSN. Thanks, Drmies (talk) 02:29, 10 July 2014 (UTC)

  • Yeah, this one I think we'd have trouble qualifying as a Reliable Source. Sorry. FindAGrave I think I can live with as it gets lot of official lists as well and has some vetting.... Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 15:50, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Removed. Drmies (talk) 00:10, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Hey; sorry, I won't be able to finish this review for the time being. Could someone else take a look, please? Cloudchased (talk) 01:09, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Drmies, I was about to call for a new reviewer, but a check of the hook found that it is indeed too long, with 225 characters even when excluding three of the four bold links (I count the longest of them and discard the rest, and spaces are always counted). Please propose a new hook, and I'll be happy to add the "review again" icon. Many thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 20:56, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Dear BlueMoonset, I tweaked (and un-struckthrough) the hook: should be short enough. I still need to do one review, and I have the images, but still need to add one to the article and to this nomination. Thanks, Drmies (talk) 22:29, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Great, thanks, Drmies. Revised hook is short enough (192 characters by my count). Will wait for the remaining (fourth) QPQ. BlueMoonset (talk) 00:47, 22 July 2014 (UTC)







Buffy hummingbird

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5x expanded by Polbot (talk), Spirit of Eagle (talk). Nominated by Spirit of Eagle (talk) at 00:14, 30 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg The article was just a few hundred characters and in the past few days has been expanded to about 2000. An academic source does confirm the hook. The citations are done correctly. The picture has already passed "featured picture" review, and seems in order. The hook is interesting, formatted correctly, and the right size. Blue Rasberry (talk) 14:16, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg Did you review the sources for close paraphrasing? Yoninah (talk) 02:07, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
No. Looking again at the content around the hook, the original source says, "Buffy Hummingbirds are often aggressive and defend flower patches where they feed on nectar from plants like Agave and Hibiscus. They also east the juice and flesh of Armatocereus cactus fruit and frequently hawk for insects. During courtship displays, males dive down from above, creating an arc and vocalizing. These birds are considered short-distance migrants." The article says, "The buffy hummingbird is an omnivore. It consumes the nectar of the Agave and Hibiscus. It also consumes cactus flesh from species such as the Armatocereus. The bird is known to aggressively defend the plants it consumes. In addition to plant life, the bird also perches and hunts for insects near the ground." The argument for close paraphrasing would be the order and presentation of information about the agave, hibiscus, and the armatocereus. Spirit of Eagle, it is my opinion that just this part is not close paraphrasing, but if in the whole of your article all of your content was as close as this then after following the order and word choice of the original content for long enough then it might be close paraphrasing. Can you say something about how closely you followed the original sources to help guide our comments about the extent to which this should be considered as close paraphrasing? Also, see Wikipedia:Close paraphrasing. Blue Rasberry (talk) 02:39, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
When I was expanding the article, I attempted to avoid close paraphrasing and copy vios in general. I reworded and restructured most of the article a few minutes ago, so hopefully this will correct any close paraphrasing that I let in the first time around. Spirit of Eagle (talk) 03:11, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
With your recent edits I think the concerns about close paraphrasing are resolved. Blue Rasberry (talk) 16:04, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg I think hook and article are somewhat inaccurate and I have tweaked the hook. This humming bird does not eat cacti in general but, according to the source, its primary diet is nectar and it also eats the juice and flesh of a particular species of cactus. And to say, as the article does, "The bird is known to hostilely defend the plants it consumes." makes it sound as if it eats the plants rather than sips the nectar. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 12:53, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
I tagged that statement about hostile defense as needing a citation. I found nothing about this in the sources used for the sentences before and after. Please provide clarification and a citation here. Blue Rasberry (talk) 16:08, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
I've fixed the point about violent defense of flowers. Source number 2, the cited source, does actually state this, but I had badly muddled the meaning when I was writing the Wikipedia article. Hopefully, this will clear everything up. As for the cactus point, I'm really not sure how it is inaccurate. The hummingbird does in fact eat cacti, even if its primary diet is nectar. (Also, can I please go with "cactuses" in the hook? Its a valid word according to Merriam-Webster [15], and I feel that it will attract more interest). Spirit of Eagle (talk) 23:44, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
I duplicated the citation after more sentences to make the source clearer. Thanks. Blue Rasberry (talk) 12:41, 2 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg The trouble with the article is that it is so factually inaccurate. For example, the lead states "... consumes cacti, flowers and insects" while the Handbook of the Birds of the World Alive states "Feeds on nectar of flowering Agave, Hibiscus, Lemairocereus, Melocactus and Opuntia". There are other inaccuracies. To use a hook that baldly states that the bird eats cactuses would be thoroughly misleading. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:12, 2 July 2014 (UTC)
How is this inaccurate? I've cited Neotropical Birds Online, a project of Cornell University, as the source and the claim that the bird eats cacti and insects is fully supported by the this source (which is of course cited in-line). This seems to be a rather reliable source, so I don't understand why the accuracy of it is under attack. Spirit of Eagle (talk) 11:40, 2 July 2014 (UTC)
I agree that the cited source seems like a reliable source and that the claim cited to it seems to match the intent of the original source. I see no problem. Both sources could be correct. Blue Rasberry (talk) 12:43, 2 July 2014 (UTC)
Also, the Lemairocereus, Melocactus and Opuntia are all cactuses. Spirit of Eagle (talk) 01:25, 3 July 2014 (UTC)

Alt1: that no one knows the total population of the buffy hummingbird (pictured)?

I've added a second source due to controversy over the cactus claim. This one is supported by the IUCN, so it should be reliable. I prefer the cactus hook, but I'll be happy to use this if it is more acceptable. Spirit of Eagle (talk) 11:55, 2 July 2014 (UTC)
I have edited the article to improve its accuracy and added some more information. I suggest
I like it. It feels a little sing-songy, which will no doubt increase clicks. For what its worth, this hook has my approval. Spirit of Eagle (talk) 12:16, 3 July 2014 (UTC)
Someone else will be needed to approve the hook. I managed to obtain more details of the bird's description which I have added. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:03, 3 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg Reviewer needed to check the new ALT2 hook and make any other checks needed. I struck the original hook, since ALT2 clarifies it. (Alt1 has not been reviewed, and explicitly needs to be if it is going to be used.) BlueMoonset (talk) 21:06, 21 July 2014 (UTC)







Articles created/expanded on June 30[edit]

Maitland Armstrong

Maitland Armstrong

Created by Philafrenzy (talk), Edwardx (talk). Nominated by Edwardx (talk) at 19:54, 7 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Alt1 ... that the grandfathers of Maitland Armstrong (pictured) and his wife both fought at the Battle of Yorktown, but on opposite sides? Philafrenzy (talk) 20:01, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
    His wife fought against his grandfathers? Go, girl! I think to make it clear you'd need to spell it out more.
Alt2 ... that the grandfather of Maitland Armstrong (pictured) and the grandfather of his wife fought on opposite sides at the Battle of Yorktown?
Alt3 ... that Maitland Armstrong's (pictured) grandfather fought against his wife's grandfather at the Battle of Yorktown?
Alt3 is only true in the general "sides" sense (not the hand-to-hand sense) and has the unfortunate possessive 's before (pictured) but I think if the picture was lost this would be the more hooky of the hooks. Belle (talk) 14:18, 8 July 2014 (UTC)

Alt4 ... that Maitland Armstrong (pictured) and his wife each had a grandfather who fought at Battle of Yorktown, though on opposite sides? EEng (talk) 23:06, 8 July 2014 (UTC)



Jacek i Agatka

  • ... that the Polish children's television series Jacek i Agatka is the namesake of many kindergartens in Poland?
  • Comment: The hook's fact can be found in some news articles, websites, and books, including the adjacent three inline citations of this fact in the article.

Created by TheGGoose (talk). Self nominated at 16:48, 3 July 2014 (UTC).

  • @TheGGoose: May be it is my English, the kindergartens are namesakes of the show, not vice versa. The hook must make it clear that the kindergartens were named after the show, and not the show was named because there were numerous kindergartens with this name. Staszek Lem (talk) 02:07, 4 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Either I misused the word "namesake," or there is another problem. British English defines "namesake" as other objects/people/places with the same name, no matter who obtains it first. In my native American English, "namesake" refers to the original name bearer. Maybe the hook has to be revised for all varieties of English? TheGGoose (talk) 03:00, 4 July 2014 (UTC)
    Well, I consulted dictionary.com before jumping in with my English. It seems it does not cover your American English. Neither wiktionary. Yes, "person with the same name as another" is the second meaning listed, but in our case it is important who named why. Staszek Lem (talk) 23:22, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
  • ALT1: ... that many kindergartens in Poland were named after the children's television series Jacek i Agatka? TheGGoose (talk) 04:48, 4 July 2014 (UTC)
    Yes, much clearer for all varieties of both language and speakers. Staszek Lem (talk) 23:22, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I notice a lack of a message for the criteria check in this DYK nomination. Would someone like to assess the criteria on this nomination? TheGGoose (talk) 15:01, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg This article is new enough and long enough. The ALT1 hook fact is referenced to a reliable site (thanks Google Translate), I see no policy issues and I think a QPQ review is not needed in this instance. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 08:35, 24 July 2014 (UTC)

Park an der Ilm

Shakespeare monument in the Park an der Ilm

Created by Gerda Arendt (talk). Self nominated at 12:48, 3 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol voting keep.svg Newly expanded, well-cited, no copyvio. Hook is cited & interesting. AGF German-language sources. --Jakob (talk) 22:32, 3 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Hello! I think the proper wording should be "monument to Shakespeare". Also, I think the hook would be even more intriguing if the phrase "an English garden in Weimar along the Ilm" were deleted altogether. This is the kind of explanation that readers should feel compelled to find out about when clicking. The Park an der Ilm will sound far less mysterious if we are immediately told what it is! So how about this ALT:
Special salutations to thoughtful and friendly Gerda! Cheers, Madalibi (talk) 00:03, 4 July 2014 (UTC)
The ALT is fine with me, and the other most welcome on the background of my alleged long history (or allegedly long history?) as an infobox warrior --Gerda Arendt (talk) 07:16, 4 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg I have pulled this from prep as I think the hook statement is dubious. "Firsts" of this type are always dubious unless very well sourced and the sourcing for this statement isn't strong - also, there's at least one Shakespeare monument known to have been established in Europe prior to the one mentioned above, per this source. Gatoclass (talk) 04:14, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
Thanks for checking. How about three "poets":
ALT2: ... that the Park an der Ilm, landscaped partly by Goethe, contains a monument to Shakespeare (pictured) by Lessing? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 07:36, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
I find it hard to imagine Goethe engaging in landscape gardening, and I'm having trouble verifying it in the supplied (German) source. Any chance you could give me an exact quote from source? Gatoclass (talk) 09:16, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
I used that word because it hits at "English landscaped garden", but there are probably others for the fact that he influenced the development. The German Wikipedia has "Errichtung im 18. Jahrhundert unter Beteiligung von Johann Wolfgang von Goethe", this source says "Goethe's extensive landscaped park". No more time now, sorry, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 10:50, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
I added more sources for Goethe as the designer, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 23:47, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg Reviewer needed for ALT2 hook now that further sources have been added, to be sure that they and the article fully support the hook. BlueMoonset (talk) 21:12, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg ALT2 supported by citation, other DYK criteria met. Image appropriately licensed, no close paraphrasing etc. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:35, 24 July 2014 (UTC)




Preparation (principle)

Created by Doug Coldwell (talk). Self nominated at 11:38, 2 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg There is a merge discussion underway regarding the article, the discussion taking place at Talk:Planning#Proposed_merge_of_preparation. I get the impression that this "preparation" article was thrown together from odd bits and pieces, a WP:Synthesis of sources, and does not merit its own topic. The merge question should be answered before this article is taken to DYK. If no merge is performed, the SYNTH problem will need to be sorted, most likely through AFD. Binksternet (talk) 16:04, 2 July 2014 (UTC)





Articles created/expanded on July 1[edit]

Stratum (album)

Vocalist Sven-Erik Lind, 2008, dressed in 20th-century military regalia

  • ... that the music on Stratum by Drottnar (vocalist pictured) was described as "weird"?

Created by 3family6 (talk). Self nominated at 18:19, 2 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Comment: The review to which this is sourced is in German, but I'm assuming that it is safe to put a translated word in quotes.


Mukhalinga

Four-faced mukhalinga

  • ... that the four-faced linga (pictured) may be called a "linga with five faces"?

Created by Redtigerxyz (talk). Self nominated at 16:55, 2 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg This article is new enough and long enough. The hook fact is cited and the image is suitably licensed. I detected no policy issues. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:42, 20 July 2014 (UTC)





Steven the Sword Fighter

Improved to Good Article status by 23W (talk). Self nominated at 10:17, 1 July 2014 (UTC).


Articles created/expanded on July 2[edit]

Fabien Cousteau, Mission 31, Troy (submarine), Shark: Mind of a Demon

Cousteau in 2010
  • Reviewed: Homage to Cézanne
  • Comment: Three more QPQs to be done shortly. Fabien Cousteau is probably heading to GA after a little more work, so any comments for improvement are welcome. Let me know if picture will be used and I'll make a tighter crop (head only).

5x expanded by ThaddeusB (talk). Self nominated at 16:57, 8 July 2014 (UTC).

Let me suggest turning it around and trimming, for more impact IMHO:

EEng (talk) 19:25, 12 July 2014 (UTC)

ALT1 wording is better, thanks. --ThaddeusB (talk) 18:12, 17 July 2014 (UTC)


Joe Quest

  • ... that multiple variations exist as to the basis upon which Joe Quest coined the sporting term "Charley horse"?

5x expanded by Cbl62 (talk). Self nominated at 21:39, 6 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Word origin yarns are notoriously unreliable. That Quest in fact originated the term, and how, needs a reliable modern source (and I mean realiable), or the hook has to make it very clear that these are old stories, unverified. Article needs to reflect this as well. EEng (talk) 22:54, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
I thought that the existence of "multiple variations", as noted in the hook, sufficiently denoted the lack of precision in the phrase's origin, but I have added the word "reportedly" to the hook as well. There are six reliable sources in the article crediting Quest with originating the term as a sporting injury. The most recent of these is a 2011 book that includes three pages devoted to the etymology of the phrase. Cbl62 (talk) 23:19, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
  • ALT1 ... that multiple variations exist as to the basis upon which Joe Quest reportedly coined the sporting term "Charley horse"?
  • What Dickson (2011) makes abundantly clear is that the various stories involving quest are just a few of many competing theories, and that nobody knows. Try
  • ALT2 ... that stories involving Joe Quest are among the many theories about the unknown origin of the sporting term Charley horse?
EEng (talk) 05:11, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
The alt 1 hook above is perfectly acceptable. Indeed, that is the language I proposed in modifying the original hook. EEng then reverted my modification of the hook and added it as alt 1. That works fine. Alt 2 is unnecessarily watered down. In fact, one of the more recent reviews (source 14) notes that the origin stories unrelated to Quest "can be discounted because the term was in use before the protagonist came to be." One such version attributed the phrase to Charlie Esper, a pitcher who reportedly walked "like a lame horse." However, Esper did not begin playing until 1890, by which time the phrase had already been well established in common usage. Alt 1 sufficiently addresses the lack of absolute certainty. Cbl62 (talk) 06:29, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
I "reverted [your] modification [to the original hook] and added it here as ALT1" because, yes, after discussion of the hook was underway you modified it in place, making the discussion up to that point incomprehensible.

IMO ALT1 is not so fine. Aside from the hopeless awkwardness of "multiple variations exist as to the basis upon which Joe Quest reportedly coined", reportedly is appropriate only for notions that are unconfirmed without being seriously contradicted; here it's apparent that there're a lot of amusing theories in competition, and the Quest ones are just a subset of those, even if the strongest subset. EEng (talk) 19:18, 12 July 2014 (UTC)

I disagree. As noted above, the non-Quest variations have been discredited because they arose long after the fact. And, in any event, the proposed hook does not assert as a factual certainty that Quest coined the phrase, simply that he is reported to have done so, which is 100% factual and accurate. I do believe that my alt 1 hook is entirely appropriate and that you are being a tad ridiculous on this one. We've expressed our views. How about letting someone else give it a look? Cbl62 (talk) 20:36, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
That most or all other explanations are clearly wrong doesn't make any of the Quest ones right. The two article sources with a claim to authoritativeness, [16] and [17] are clear that the Quest story is just a story, though one frequently repeated e.g. "Whether this story is true or not is uncertain". Again, reportedly should not be used where serious doubt exists. And yes, naturally it will be useful to hear what others think. EEng (talk) 21:08, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
The second source you cite is the one that discounts the credibility of the non-Quest origins. And, of course, there are multiple reliable sources crediting Quest with originating the term, including The Bill James Historical Baseball Abstract here (probably the single most authoritative work on baseball history), The Sporting Life here (one of the two most authoritative sources on 19th century baseball), the Boston Globe quoted here, and the Los Angeles Herald here. Cbl62 (talk) 21:44, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
Further, your assertion that the word "reportedly" means that something is substantially free from doubt is simply contrary to the established meaning of that word, as evinced in common dictionary definitions. See: here ("according to a report" or "supposedly"), here ("according to report or rumor") and here ("according to rumour or report"). Cbl62 (talk) 21:53, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
No, I didn't say reportedly means something is substantially free from doubt; I said it "should not be used where serious doubt exists", and I'll clarify here that I probably should have said it "should not be used without further qualification where serious doubt exists. That's my objection to ALT1 -- it makes it sound like there's a "report" which is perhaps unconfirmed, but which (the reader will mistakenly infer from the omission of anything to the contrary) is without serious contradiction. EEng (talk) 22:27, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
The hook doesn't make it "sound like" there's a report. There are "reports", many of them, and from reliable sources. That is what the word "reportedly" means in the English language. Further, the article details the other accounts. Accordingly, neither the hook nor the article is false, inaccurate, or misleading in the least. I appreciate your desire to keep DYK accurate, but you're quite off base on this one. Cbl62 (talk) 00:05, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
You keep mischaracterizing what I say by quoting selectively. I didn't say the hook makes it "sound like there's a report" -- period -- but that it "makes it sound like there's a report which is without serious contradiction". It's not a question of being false, rather of being misleading. It's OK for a hook to be coyly ambiguous, but not misleading, which is out of bounds. I won't be responding further until others comment. EEng (talk) 00:17, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
The alt 1 hook is not even "coyly ambiguous," and certainly not "misleading" or "out of bounds." It is 100% accurate, but I, too, will not respond until others have had a chance to comment. Cbl62 (talk) 00:27, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Symbol redirect vote 4.svg Full review needed. Cbl62 (talk) 20:39, 12 July 2014 (UTC)

Vladimir Gaćinović

Created by Antidiskriminator (talk). Self nominated at 15:44, 6 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol possible vote.svg The article is barely long enough (counting the references). But it is appallingly written. Take for instance: "Since 1905 there were two secret student's societies in Mostar high school. One of them was "Matica", led by Dimitrije Mitrinović.[2] When he was seventeen year old he was a member of literature society "Matica" and published an interesting essay about Petar Kočić.[3]" The grammar is atrocious, the POV wording ("interesting") needs attribution or changing to something not POV. Same for: "In period between Autumn of 1910 and Summer of 1912 Gaćinović was a student of Vienna University.[7]" Or: "Gaćinović published condemnation of lack of idealism among younger generations who had studied at foreign universities and brought to their homes opportunism, petty individualism and conformity as main aim of their lives.[8]".
    In fact, the same goes for the hook: "that Vladimir Gaćinović was the real ideologue of the revolutionary movement Young Bosnia and tyrannicide as method of its political struggle?" -- what does that even mean? A verb is missing (which one?), or else the word "tyrannicide" is used without regard to its grammatical function.
    The whole article needs a rewrite, frankly, before it can be assessed for other DYK criteria. Dahn (talk) 21:13, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
Thanks Dahn for interesting review. I will try to resolve the issues you pointed to. Regarding the length, the article has 1,963 characters (not counting the references), which is much more than 1,500.--Antidiskriminator (talk) 21:19, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
Indeed, I apologize for that: I keep thinking that the limit is at 2,000 characters. Dahn (talk) 21:41, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
No problem. Actually, most of the articles I nominate for DYK have much more than 2,000 characters, but in case of this article it is hard to further develop it in neutral way, taking in consideration complexity of this person and events. All the best.--Antidiskriminator (talk) 22:00, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
Symbol question.svg Okay, the issues with the article itself were fixed (I want to congratulate the team of editors who took part in this effort), there remains the issue of the hook. I get now what it is trying to say, so I want to suggest:
Note, however, that other hooks variants may be more catchy. If I may propose:
Dahn (talk) 12:41, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
Thank you for suggesting alternative hooks. The point is that The hook fact must be cited in the article with an inline citation to a reliable source, ... The hook fact must have an inline citation right after it,.... Therefore I still think that the original hook is better. If it is not clear enough, it may be corrected. All the best.--Antidiskriminator (talk) 13:03, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
I don't understand your objection. All of the alt hooks I proposed are cited with a reliable source and an inline citation. What's more, ALT 1 is largely a grammatical rephrasing of your original hook. Anyway, let others decide. Dahn (talk) 13:32, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg Reviewer needed to check the various hooks, and say which ones are interesting, neutral, in the article, and sourced per DYK requirements. BlueMoonset (talk) 21:21, 21 July 2014 (UTC)




Shrenik Kasturbhai Lalbhai

Created by Nizil Shah (talk). Self nominated at 18:16, 2 July 2014 (UTC).

  • The article is new and long enough.
  • QPQ done.
  • The article needs copyediting for grammar.
  • No plagiarism found.
  • Article has at least one inline citation per para.
  • Both the hooks check out with The Hindu source. I have not checked for other issues. After you have copyedited the article please ping me so that I can continue the review. I have checked only the 1st ref till now.--Skr15081997 (talk) 14:44, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svgCopy-editing for grammar is required.--Skr15081997 (talk) 12:07, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
Thank you for your review, Skr15081997. I am copyediting myself and requested other editor for help. I will ping you when its done. Regards -Nizil (talk) 20:49, 22 July 2014 (UTC)



Articles created/expanded on July 3[edit]

The Dreft Star Playhouse

  • Comment: Producers of The Dreft Star Playhouse sought to elevate the quality of daytime radio by adapting romantic movies to 15-minute-segment serials, competing with existing soap operas and other formats. One old-time radio source called the genre "prestige drama."

Created by Teblick (talk). Self nominated at 20:52, 4 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg New (3rd), just long enough, neutral, can't check for copyvio due to offline sources, no QPQ necessary, though you'll need one next time. Now, a few things: (1) Rare? How is this sourced? Comes off as non-neutral. Also, many of the quotes can be paraphrased into new words, and one sentence with a quote doesn't have a direct citation. (Also it says very little about the actual work of the group—what kinds of radio programs and popular in what ways? Please ping me if I don't respond. czar  05:49, 10 July 2014 (UTC)

I must apologize for my shortcomings as cited in the paragraph above. I find myself still learning about Wikipedia with each article that I write. I will try to respond to your comments below:

  • "Rare" is my own evaluation. I have been unable to find mention of any other daytime program like The Dreft Star Playhouse, but I also have not been able to find a source that specifically called it rare or unique (which actually seems to me to be the case). How does one prove a negative -- that nothing like it was produced in the history of broadcast radio? If I can't mention that the program was rare -- if not unique -- then that eliminates the hook, so the nomination can be withdrawn from consideration for DYK. I will accept that fact.
  • Regarding the quotations, here are my thoughts: 1) "Prestige drama" is a term that I had not encountered before doing research for this article. I think it has a significance that I cannot match in my own words. 2) I considered rewording "attempted to accomplish in a five-times-a-week soap-opera format what Lux Radio Theatre had done in the nighttime format," but I couldn't come up with wording as effective as the source's without plagiarizing. 3) The same reason as in 2) applied to Dunning's quotation. 4) How could I effectively convey the meaning of "ran two months in daily quarter-hour doses" without verging on plagiarism? I couldn't think of a way. 5) The expression "an ambitious undertaking" is Dunning's opinion. I I couldn't state that on my own. 6) I could have paraphrased the reference to salaries in "up to $3,000 per week for 'name' talent," but I feel that the "name" part of the quote adds impact. Again, that is Dunning's opinion, which I couldn't state on my own.
  • You cited "one sentence with a quote doesn't have a direct citation." Were you referring to the first sentence under "Productions and players"? The reference at the end of the last bulleted item was meant to encompass all of the text in the section. If I need a separate citation for the first sentence, I will be glad to add one. With some of my earlier articles, I was chastised for repeating citations unnecessarily, so I have since tried to streamline them. I can easily put another Dunning citation at the end of that sentence, however.
  • You wrote, "it says very little about the actual work of the group—what kinds of radio programs..." My first paragraph says, "The Dreft Star Playhouse was a daytime radio program in the United States, presenting adaptations of romantic movies in serial form." How much more specific should I be about the kinds of programs?
  • You also asked, "...popular in what ways?" After reading the article again, I can't see that I used the word popular or implied that the program was popular. Perhaps I am misunderstanding your question.Eddie Blick (talk) 22:14, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
Your response is longer than the article! If no source says that it's rare, it would be OR to come to that conclusion ourselves. It's not to prove a negative—if some reliable source about radio history makes the claim that it's rare, then we can cite it. If not, we don't mention it. You can replace the hook with something else, though. The quote paraphrasing was just a suggestion—no obligation to a DYK review. Every time someone is directly quoted (with quotation marks), there needs to be a ref immediately following that sentence, even if it repeats the ref at the end of the ¶ (see WP:MINREF). I was curious about what kinds of romantic movies (again, no DYK obligation to address). czar  04:15, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
  • To avoid any slipups I'm striking the original hook right now because there's no way "rare" can fly without a source. EEng (talk) 03:01, 20 July 2014 (UTC)



Articles created/expanded on July 4[edit]

Art Whitney

5x expanded by Cbl62 (talk). Self nominated at 21:55, 8 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol voting keep.svg This five-fold expansion is new enough and long enough. The hook facts are cited and accepted in good faith because I am unfamiliar with the game of baseball and do not understand the statistics page to which the citation refers. Either hook could be used. No policy issues found. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 12:46, 20 July 2014 (UTC)




Nila (Ramayana)

Nila, Balinese painting

  • ... that Nila (pictured), leader of the monkey army, is said to have urinated on the heads of the demon Ravana and disturbed his sacrifice?


Created by Redtigerxyz (talk). Self nominated at 15:11, 6 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg New, long enough, cited and no close paraphrase issues. Hook verified online in Google books.(though I corrected the page number) QPQ done. Image is in public domain.-Nizil (talk) 17:09, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
Suggestion:As many people would not be familiar with Nila and Ravana. I suggest alternative hook which may describe them better. -Nizil (talk) 17:09, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
ALT: ... that, as described in Krittivasi Ramayan, the monkey warrior Nila (pictured), urinated on the demon king Ravana and disturbed his yajna ritual?







Hurricane Arthur

Created by TheAustinMan (talk). Nominated by 12george1 (talk) at 18:19, 4 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Sorry, but the hook makes no sense. What can that possibly mean? Are there times a hurricane can strike outside of a calendar year -- some kind of extracalary days or something? EEng (talk) 04:26, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
  • It means that the hurricane struck NC earlier in the year than any other known storm. Agree that the hook needs to be reworked, but I'm not sure how to do it; everybody seems to have their own opinion of how this exact type of thing should be presented. – Juliancolton | Talk 02:57, 10 July 2014 (UTC)

──────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────── I think I figured it out. Are you saying

It's subtle, but believe it or not "the calendar year" is way different from a calendar year. I know it seems backwards but the is right for what you mean. Also, we don't normally explain that a US state is a US state. EEng (talk) 03:19, 10 July 2014 (UTC)

Hey, I know you left this comment like a week ago, but yes, the alt hook proposed means the same thing.--12george1 (talk) 02:22, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
Honestly the original hook is unintelligible to me. If you're happy with ALT1 let's use that. EEng (talk) 01:51, 20 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg Full review needed. Note that I have added "other" to ALT1, since there's an inherent contradiction without it, and struck the original hook per EEng's objections. BlueMoonset (talk) 02:23, 22 July 2014 (UTC)


Articles created/expanded on July 5[edit]

David Litvinoff

  • ... that David Litvinoff was "dialogue coach and technical adviser" on the 1970 film Performance, introducing cast and crew to London's underworld?
  • ALT1:... that David Litvinoff is claimed to be the subject of Lucian Freud's painting Man in a Headscarf, originally The Procurer because of his alleged work?
  • ALT2:... that David Litvinoff was "the most brilliant nutter anyone had ever met"?
  • ALT3:... that it is claimed that David Litvinoff killed himself probably just before he would have been murdered?
  • Reviewed: Eddi McKee

Created by Edwardx (talk), Philafrenzy (talk). Nominated by Edwardx (talk) at 15:21, 12 July 2014 (UTC).

Dr. Who! (Tujamo and Plastik Funk song)

5x expanded by Launchballer (talk). Self nominated at 00:29, 10 July 2014 (UTC).

Comment: Are the bands new articles? If not, they should not be bold. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 09:33, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
They're both expanded 5x.--Launchballer 23:33, 20 July 2014 (UTC)
Got it, triple nom. Please get rid of the stub classifications ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 07:05, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
Make that quadruple. On my other computer I had a half-finished draft of Mankind (band) who I mention before it ran out of charge and the charger on it broke. Once the charger for it is fixed I will be adding that to the nom!--Launchballer 19:30, 21 July 2014 (UTC)


Ned Hanlon (baseball)

Tomlinson Studio photo of Ned Hanlon Tomlinson, 1887

  • ... that "Foxy Ned" Hanlon (pictured) has been called "The Father of Modern Baseball" for inventing and perfecting the "inside baseball" strategy, including the "Baltimore chop"?

5x expanded by Cbl62 (talk). Self nominated at 19:34, 11 July 2014 (UTC).

  • ALT1 to keep the hook simple and snappy, and to avoid using too many quotes: ... that "Foxy Ned" Hanlon (pictured) has been called "The Father of Modern Baseball"? 97198 (talk) 09:21, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
  • ALT2 ... that "Foxy Ned" Hanlon (pictured), called "The Father of Modern Baseball", invented the "Baltimore chop"? Cbl62 (talk) 01:49, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg This is a five-fold expansion of an already sizeable article. It is new enough and long enough. Going for ALT2 which is supported by inline citations. The image is in the public domain and I detected no copyright violations or other policy issues. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:19, 23 July 2014 (UTC)


Lena Nyadbi

Lena Nyadbi standing in front of her most notable work, "Dayiwul Lirlmim". (Paris, June 2013)

Created by Bilby (talk), 124.178.150.205 (talk). Nominated by Josve05a (talk) at 12:32, 9 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol possible vote.svg At 417 B, this article is currently much too short for DYK where the requirement is for a length of at least 1500 B. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:29, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
    @Cwmhiraeth: I have reverted to the former version of the article and I take responsibility for everything per WP:BANREVERT. (tJosve05a (c) 17:35, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
We've been discussing this on Wikipeda talk:DYK in regard to accepting DYKs predominately written by banned users. Again, this is an article by the banned editor Russavia. While we don't have a consensus one way or the other so far - we may end up needing an RfC - this process of highlighting the work of banned users on the front page isn't something we should be encouraging. - Bilby (talk) 17:51, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
I have been following the discussion that User:Bilby talks about. I think he should step back from the issue. Completely. Bilby appears to have created this article by following User:Russavia's edits on Commons. It would appear Bilby has done so to prevent the very appearance at DYK this article is now up for. This is not healthy behavior for an editor to be engaging in. It is also not healthy, nor good for the encyclopedia, for Bilby to revert an excellent article simply because the person is banned. Worse still, Bilby used his admin tools to protect the article. I can't fathom why Bilby would basically destroy content like he has. Regardless, User:Josve05a has confirmed, by way of reverting, that the content is good. I have looked at the article. It is well written, is properly sourced, is on a subject that suffers from bias on Wikipedia, etc, etc. It is a good article and would make for an interesting front page appearance. DYK is not for recognising editors, but their content. I would be happy to see this at DYK; it is everything that is wanted for the DYK section. 80.232.249.244 (talk) 18:42, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
Random outside IP address? I'll AGF and assume so. However, most of the above is incorrect. The article is not protected, I didn't expect to see this at DYK and wasn't trying to prevent that outcome, and Russavia is community banned, in which case the community has stated, in the strongest possible way it can, that Russavia's edits are no longer welcome on this project.
That said, the issue is simply that we shouldn't be highlighting the work of socks of banned editors through DYK. It is not in DYK's interests, nor in Wikipedia's. But I'll leave it to the DYK community to decide, while we try to work out what the community consensus will be moving forward. - Bilby (talk) 21:37, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
@Bilby: You can assume good faith, but I shall not. Due to reasonable suspicion, I can say that I believe that that IP was used by Russavia despite his ban from Wikipedia, but that shall not (and has not) anything to do with this DYK, and until a consensus has been made on the talk page (which I don't see happen anytime in the near future) that shouldn't have any inpact on this DYK. Happy editing! (tJosve05a (c) 22:27, 11 July 2014 (UTC)


A Voice in the Dark (comic)

  • ... that disabled artist Larime Taylor draws the comic book series A Voice in the Dark using only his mouth and a Wacom Cintiq tablet while his legally blind wife colors the cover art?
  • ALT1: ... that disabled artist Larime Taylor draws the comic book series A Voice in the Dark using only his mouth and a Wacom Cintiq tablet?
  • Comment: I've made two versions of the nomination and included the image for the volume cover. I'm good with either hook and I'm OK if it's listed without the image, but I think that using the image would be more effective, given that the artist draws it with his mouth.

Created by Tokyogirl79 (talk). Self nominated at 10:36, 5 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Note: non-free image removed. It won't be allowed on the main page and it's probably not even supposed to be displayed on this page. Sorry! (Also, bolded hook article.) BobAmnertiopsisChatMe! 17:49, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Comment - I don't see that his wife is blind in the source. Pencil between teeth confirmed. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:40, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg This article is new enough and long enough. The ALT1 hook is sourced to a pictorial record but it is confirmed by #5 so I have added the extra citation to the relevant sentence in the article. As Crisco says, no mention of the wife being blind in the source. I don't think Tokyogirl79 needs to do a QPQ review, not being a DYK regular. No policy issues detected. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:44, 23 July 2014 (UTC)


Parental Advisory

Improved to Good Article status by WikiRedactor (talk). Nominated by Matty.007 (talk) at 12:17, 7 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol possible vote.svg Article received good article status on July 5 and is long enough, well-cited with in-line citations. Hook is interesting enough and short enough. Unfortunately, the article doesn't contain the hook fact. Indeed, the article seems to suggest that the tag was created in 1990, not 1985. The article states: "In 1990, a black-and-white warning label reading "Parental Advisory: Explicit Lyrics" was introduced as a standard for affected records ..." Cbl62 (talk) 17:44, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Sorry. my mistake. Alt 1: that the Parental Advisory tag was first used online in 2011, over 20 years since it began being used? Thanks, Matty.007 17:53, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
Symbol confirmed.svg The alt 1 hook works. Cbl62 (talk) 23:01, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg This was promoted with the original hook, despite the issues raised, and the ALT1 hook is not supported by the Guardian source given, which is talking about the BPI (British system, not the American one which created the labels), and says that "parental warning logos are set to be introduced", but not when; furthermore, BPI was updating its warning scheme at the time. The article doesn't comment on whether any US sites might have previously introduced the online use of the logos, and does say that iTunes has a warning system in place on its content, but doesn't say when it was implemented nor whether it uses "Parental Advisory" in any form. This is going to need a new hook. BlueMoonset (talk) 03:19, 10 July 2014 (UTC)
    • My apologies. Alt 2: that the Parental Advisory tag was introduced in 1985? This is accurate as far as I can tell, and is backed up at the end of the explanation. Thanks, and sorry for the trouble, Matty.007 16:07, 10 July 2014 (UTC)


Yasser Salihee

Soldiers peer into the car of Yasser Salihee, journalist and doctor, after his death in Baghdad in 2006.

  • ... that Iraqi journalist and doctor Yasser Salihee (pictured), killed during the Iraq War, sometimes interrupted his reporting to treat wounded civilians in Baghdad?
  • ALT1:… that journalist and doctor Yasser Salihee used some of his patients in Baghdad as sources for his news articles?
  • ALT2:… that journalist and doctor Yasser Salihee (pictured) sometimes interrupted his reporting to treat wounded civilians in Baghdad?

Created by Darouet (talk). Self nominated at 23:11, 5 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg This article is new enough and long enough. ALT1 is appropriately cited and I have struck the other two hooks (the article does not refer specifically to wounded civilians). I do not think the image should be used - it does not show Yasser Salihee, but instead shows the car in which he was travelling when he was shot. I think this is Darouet's fourth DYK so no QPQ review is needed. No policy violations found. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:58, 23 July 2014 (UTC)



Articles created/expanded on July 6[edit]

House of Kamehameha

King Kamehameha III at the age of eighteen

5x expanded by Mark Miller (talk). Self nominated at 06:21, 16 July 2014 (UTC).


CheapyD

Mainspaced by Czar (talk). Self nominated at 13:23, 13 July 2014 (UTC).

Saints Row: The Third downloadable content, Enter the Dominatrix

Mainspaced by Czar (talk). Self nominated at 13:22, 13 July 2014 (UTC).

Development of Deus Ex

Warren Spector at GDC 2010

Mainspaced by Czar (talk). Self nominated at 13:22, 13 July 2014 (UTC).

Development of Fez

Development team of Fez at 2012 GDC IGF

Mainspaced by Czar (talk). Self nominated at 13:22, 13 July 2014 (UTC).


Adam Saltsman

Headshot of Adam Saltsman

Mainspaced by Czar (talk). Self nominated at 13:22, 13 July 2014 (UTC).

Asher Vollmer, Puzzlejuice

Screenshot of Puzzlejuice

Mainspaced by Czar (talk). Self nominated at 13:22, 13 July 2014 (UTC).


Mikengreg, Solipskier, Gasketball

Mainspaced by Czar (talk). Self nominated at 13:22, 13 July 2014 (UTC).

EarthBound, fandom, fan translation, Marcus Lindblom

Mother series cosplayers at 2010 Anime Expo

Mainspaced/GA by Czar (talk). Self nominated at 13:22, 13 July 2014 (UTC).


Jeff Dexter

  • ... that Jeff Dexter was banned from London's Lyceum for his obscene dancing of the newly-arrived Twist, then hired by them two weeks later as a dancer?
  • Reviewed: Korean melon
  • Comment: Hook tweaking and ALTs welcome

Created by Edwardx (talk), Philafrenzy (talk). Nominated by Edwardx (talk) at 23:42, 12 July 2014 (UTC).

I think we need quotes on "obscene":

  • ALT1 ... that London's Lyceum banned Jeff Dexter for his "obscene" dancing of the newly-arrived Twist, then hired him as a dancer two weeks later?

EEng (talk) 03:45, 14 July 2014 (UTC)

  • ALT1 flows better, so I'm striking my original hook. Edwardx (talk) 08:25, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I don't think "obscene" needs quotes but I edited to attribute the remark directly to Dexter as his opinion. Philafrenzy (talk) 09:29, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
Well, it wasn't his opinion, rather his statement of the opinion of Lyceum mgmt. I don't think (correct me if I'm wrong) he says "my dancing was obscene" and while there's a lot of allowance to be made for shifting standards and so on, I don't think we want to be stating, as flat fact, that this LP (that's Living Person, not Long Playing record) did something obscene in his youth, nor that WP subscribes to particular standards of what is or was obscene which allows it to label things, in a factual way, as obscene. It's not a big deal, but do you see my point? EEng (talk) 21:06, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
Perhaps I wasn't clear. I changed it to "According to Dexter, the management thought the dance obscene." to make clear that it was his opinion that they thought it obscene. Philafrenzy (talk) 21:33, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
Oh, I was only talking about the hook. EEng (talk) 22:37, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
  • How about:
  • ALT2 "... that London's Lyceum banned Jeff Dexter for what they thought was his "obscene" dancing of the newly-arrived Twist, then hired him as a dancer two weeks later?"
I understand your concerns but I don't think there is any realistic chance of him being offended, not given that he was the source of the description in the first place. Philafrenzy (talk) 22:52, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
I think we're in violent agreement. The quotes in ALT1 telegraph that "obscene" was the Lyceum's opinion, so the additional verbiage of ALT2 isn't needed. But I leave it to you to decide. EEng (talk) 01:05, 15 July 2014 (UTC)

Mihai Ralea

Ralea at his desk, circa 1960

Created by Dahn (talk). Self nominated at 19:01, 11 July 2014 (UTC).


No. 2 Elementary Flying Training School RAAF

Created by Ian Rose (talk). Self nominated at 13:24, 10 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg New enough. Long enough. QPQ done. NPOV. Well-cited, including the good hook. The hook is cited by a primary source, but there is no reason to believe it is not reliable. Spot checks reveal no close paraphrasing or copyvios. Edwardx (talk) 10:49, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
  • With the most profound apologies if this turns out to be a false alarm, I've pulled this from prep because it sets my Spidey Sense tingling, in that I'm skeptical that the source describes hot water and telephones as "basic amenities" at a 1940 flying school in Queensland (or wherever it was -- that article's very confusing what with No. 3 being disbanded in Victoria to form No. 2 after No. 1 1/2 was added to No. 1/2 in New South Wales...). I'd like to hear a quote from the secondary source. EEng (talk) 01:25, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Since the source (actual images of "Operations Record Book" pages) is available online, EEng, it's easy enough to check that among the items listed in the "Main deficiencies at 31/1/40:" section are "No kitchen, hot water services, street lighting." and "No telephone system." I'll leave it to you to unwind the pull. (If it's the word "amenities" that you're objecting to, it's an easy change to something like "items".) BlueMoonset (talk) 01:49, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
Before I pulled I tried to find the source online -- can you provide a link? And yes, I said straight out that it's the phrase basic amenities I find problematic, because I was pretty sure that at World War II Australian training camps hot water and telephones were "basic amenities" about as much as complementary turndown service and chocolates on the pillows. And no, I won't unwind the pull, because this kind of nonsense SYNTH is the bread and butter of what's wrong with DYK; the nom and reviewer should come up with a new hook that's actually supported by the source and is more interesting than that army trainees somewhere were brutalized with cold showers. EEng (talk) 06:03, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
It isn't rocket science: FN7 in Notes, which supports the hook phrase (the article uses "basic infrastructure including hot water, a kitchen, and a telephone system"), is to "Royal Australian Air Force (1939–45), p. 134". The "Works consulted" section just below it, which includes said "Royal Australian Air Force (1939–45)", has a link with the "Unit History Sheets: Nos. 1–7 Elementary Flying Training Schools". I clicked on it, and found myself on page 1 of 853. Entering 134 in the page number field takes you to the image of a log book page which has what I quoted above and more besides. While "amenities" may not have been a good choice in the hook wording, the essence is accurate: the camp had what was, by the military's own reckoning, a number of deficiencies including the lack of hot water, kitchen, and phones. Since I said I had found the source and confirmed the information, pulling the hook again—especially without the word "amenities" that you objected to and with the edit summary you used—is disappointing but not surprising, nor is the sudden introduction of the additional justification that the hook is insufficiently interesting to you. BlueMoonset (talk) 06:28, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
Sorry, somehow I got on the Stephens source by mistake. The word basic is completely unjustified. Just because the log noted telephones aren't present doesn't mean they were considered "basic". This material's appearance in the article might be OK given the way it's used there, but as used in the hook it's classic OR and SYNTH that completely misleads the reader. As for "uninteresting", the original hook at least appeared to say that this one facility was different in a special way -- no hot water etc. -- but since it turns out this might, for all we know, have been common, we're left with the mere statement that Camp Godforesaken had cold showers -- and that IS uninteresting. EEng (talk) 06:46, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
EEng, I think you're making a mountain out of molehill. If you don't like "basic amenities" then take it out and say "lacked hot water, a kitchen, and a telephone system" -- I really don't give a damn, but let's not have wild accusations of OR and "misleading the reader". Having taken well around 75 articles on Australian military subjects through DYK and the majority of those all the way to FA, I've seen a great many unit histories as well as other sources, and found nothing to suggest that cold water, no cooking facilities and no phones were par for the course at a training school. If they were, I'm quite sure the unit history wouldn't have highlighted them. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 07:42, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
"I've seen a great many unit histories as well as other sources, and found nothing to suggest ... I'm quite sure ..." -- I'm going to give you the complement of assuming that, on reconsideration, you'll see that this statement is of exactly the kind against which OR was meant to guard. The reviewer's comment "The hook is cited by a primary source, but there is no reason to believe it is not reliable" shows a complete misunderstanding of OR and PRIMARY -- the question isn't whether they're reliable, but rather whether we can know how to interpret them properly. In this case, for example, the hook jumps to the conclusion that because no-hot-water etc. is mentioned, it must have been an unusual condition.

As for wanting me to fix the hook, when I've done that nominators have been upset that they didn't like the revised hook. It's no big deal. Just come up with a new hook supported by secondary sources see below, with no OR, and everything'll be fine. EEng (talk) 07:54, 12 July 2014 (UTC)

EEng, if you are now the sole arbiter of what passes muster at DYK then I suppose I'm wasting my time, but if that's not the case, I'll see what consensus throws up. I think most people of normal intelligence would consider these items pretty basic but by all means let's not make assumptions. The hook as it stands states the facts very simply and unless someone wants to suggest a better one I'll stick with it. When you've written as many of these training school articles as I have you get a bit bored quoting statistics on the number of graduates or how many accidents they had. The reason I chose this little nugget is precisely because it's unusual among the training schools I've researched. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 08:23, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
ALT1 * ... that in its first months of operation during World War II, No. 2 Elementary Flying Training School RAAF lacked hot water, a kitchen, and a telephone system?

──────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────── For crying out loud, don't change the hook in place, because that makes nonsense of the discussion so far. I've added your new hook above as ALT1.

One of the things that always amazes me is the amount of effort put into a problematic hook when better hooks are available. How about

ALT2 that in the months after it opened, trainees at [school] made do without beds, desks, hot water, blackboards, typewriters, flags, maps, charts, or "clothing other than stockings"?

EEng (talk) 08:40, 12 July 2014 (UTC)

EEng is not sole arbiter of what passes muster at DYK, and hooks do not have to be supported by secondary sources.

  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg New reviewer required for ALT1 hook. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:38, 12 July 2014 (UTC)

HEye is not sole arbiter of what hooks are still under discussion. (I've removed his stikeout of ALT2.) I should have said supported by secondary sources as necessary, sorry. But the fact remains that ALT0 was way out of bounds. EEng (talk) 10:52, 12 July 2014 (UTC)

Reinstated the strikeout of ALT2. Forgot to say that it cannot be used because it isn't mentioned in the article. Face-smile.svg Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:24, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
Re-removing strikeout of ALT2. Forgot to say that it can be used if someone wants to add the material to the article. Face-smile.svg EEng (talk) 11:32, 12 July 2014 (UTC)




@BrownHairedGirl: Thanks again. I'm OK changing the date to 1936. I've added the schools he graduated from and I've expanded the first paragraph to give a more detailed summary of his positions and accomplishments. GabrielF (talk) 22:29, 13 July 2014 (UTC)


RY Sagittarii

  • ... that the star RY Sagittarii is periodically dimmed by clouds of carbon dust, most likely ejected from the star itself?

5x expanded by Casliber (talk). Self nominated at 14:50, 6 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol possible vote.svg I'm having trouble verifying some of these astronomical object nominations. Where is the ref which confirms that RY Sagittarii is an R Coronae Borealis type star? That should be cited at the top of the article behind the statement. Gatoclass (talk) 06:06, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Added now - SIMBAD mentions it. also footnotes 4 and 7. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 20:44, 9 July 2014 (UTC)


1930 Atlantic hurricane season

  • ... that during the 1930 Atlantic hurricane season, only one tropical cyclone made landfall, but it resulted in an death toll estimated to be between 2,000 and 8,000?

Improved to Good Article status by 12george1 (talk). Nominated by Oceanh (talk) at 09:28, 6 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg Promoted to Good Article status on July 6. Article is neutrally written, long enough and uses extensive in-line citations. A QPQ is not required as this is not a self-nomination. Spot-checking doesn't turn up instances of unduly close paraphrasing, copyright violation or plagiarism. Both of the proposed hooks are short enough, interesting and verified with reliable sources, principally the NOAA site. I have taken the liberty of changing "an death toll" to "a death toll" in the alt 1 hook. Cbl62 (talk) 22:39, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg I've returned this from prep as I can't verify that this was the only hurricane of the year to make landfall, that statement is sourced to a raw database file which I have no idea how to interpret. Gatoclass (talk) 08:33, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg That's fine Gatoclass. We are only interested in the first and third columns of that file. The first column has either the date in YYYYMMDD format or the hurricane number, and the third column has an L if the coordinates of that line means it made landfall. If you scroll through the file to the entries starting 1930 you will see that there is only one L in the third column for that year's data under the tracking data for the second hurricane. (Now I am expert in HURDAT data and baseball statistics. Next KUNG-FU!) Belle (talk) 09:15, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
At the very least, a note should be added to the article to that effect, because readers will have no more clue to interpreting the data there than I do. Gatoclass (talk) 09:37, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
Paging 12george1. Please come to the white phone in reception where you a have a call about interpreting HURDAT2 data. I've add an external link to the pdf explaining the tracking data format, but maybe you want to move it somewhere that is better connected to the data file. (I still haven't got to grips with citation formats, maybe I should do that rather than pushing hands. Be water, my friend) Belle (talk) 09:54, 11 July 2014 (UTC)



Articles created/expanded on July 7[edit]

Camino al Amor

5x expanded by Cambalachero (talk). Self nominated at 02:22, 12 July 2014 (UTC).



Chlemoutsi

Chlemoutsi keep

  • ... that the Chlemoutsi castle (pictured) from the early 1220s is perhaps the finest fortification of the early period of Frankish rule in Greece preserved in the country today?

Improved to Good Article status by Cplakidas (talk). Nominated by Oceanh (talk) at 00:05, 9 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol voting keep.svg Passed GA within timescale. AGF offline ref for hooks (and for online foreign-language ref for ALT2 below). Picture properly licensed but not very clear - I would recommend changing it, especially since decent alternatives are available on Commons, e.g. File:Chlemoutsi2.JPG. Spot-checked some of the French source, and no copyvio concerns. A very nice article. Simon Burchell (talk) 21:57, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • ALT2:... that the Chlemoutsi castle (pictured) has been described as "one of the most important and best-preserved castles in Greece"?
  • Agreed regarding the picture, unless the nominator has something else in mind. Constantine 07:22, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Thank you for the review, and for suggestions about the picture. I have changed to a different picture. Your suggested picture would be even better (for DYK), but is currently not used in the article. Oceanh (talk) 10:41, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I've added the relevant picture, and given Oceanh's comment I took the liberty of chaning it in the hook as well. Thanks to both of you. Constantine 10:53, 16 July 2014 (UTC)



Raphinae

Dodo

  • ... that the Raphinae, a clade of flightless birds (dodo pictured), became extinct through hunting by humans and predation by introduced non-native mammals?
  • Reviewed: Not a self-nomination

Improved to Good Article status by Reid,iain james (talk). Nominated by Oceanh (talk) at 23:23, 7 July 2014 (UTC).

  • I suggest "ALT1: ...that a clade of flightless birds called Raphinae (dodo pictured), became extinct as a consequence of overhunting by humans and introduction of non-native predators?". IJReid (talk) 00:56, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Thank you for providing the ALT1 hook, which I think is better than mine. I strike out the original hook, supporting ALT1 instead. Oceanh (talk) 01:19, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg It is completely inappropriate for you to be reviewing your own article, IJReid, and even more to be approving it. Please don't ever add a tick to your own article again. (Supplying alternate hooks is fine.) New, independent reviewer needed to give this nomination a full review. BlueMoonset (talk) 19:54, 8 July 2014 (UTC)


Museum de Fundatie

The blute-fin mill (1886) by Vincent van Gogh

Created by Editør (talk). Self nominated at 20:21, 7 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Technical requirements: At about 1800 words it is long enough, started and nominated on 7 July, so certainly new enough; Editør does not show up in the QPQ list, so no quid pro quo reviewing requirement... The article is written neutrally. The hook is formally not fully cited, as the article refers only to the French article (Le Blute-Fin Mill), as do the other sources I could find... The article furthermore does not explicitly mention that it was the Van Gogh museum doing the authentication, so it will need an additional source after hook saying just that. Further more, there are several paintings called "Le Blute-Fin mill", so maybe "the 1886 Van Gogh painting" should become "a 1886 Van Gogh painting". Finally, the hook can be shortened by removing "in Zwolle", as otherwise there is a bit too much of tangentially related info in...
  • Regarding the article, there are some smaller uncited details. "Fundatie" is not a very usual Dutch word (fundering is), and is normally not translated in English-language sources, so I suggest to leave it out. The date of establishment is cited to a consulting agency's website (here), although its author seems to have some standing. The addresses cited in the infobox seem not necessary, as we are not a guidebook...
  • Images are ok (added an extra tag for [File:Isaac Israels - Woman before Sunflowers by van Gogh, 1917.JPG this one].
  • If the issues are solved, it looks good to go! L.tak (talk) 20:03, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
    The article does mention that is was the Van Gogh Museum who authenticated the painting ("In 2010, the Van Gogh painting The blute-fin mill (1886) was authenticated by the Van Gogh Museum."), but I've added second source for the hook in case it was unclear.
    The word Fundatie comes from the name Hannema–de Stuers Fundatie, which is translated on the museum website as Hannema–de Stuers Foundation [18] (see last sentence), so it is simply a translation of the name.
    Regarding your phrasing suggestions, I'm not sure if they really improve the hook, but will not object to them. – Editør (talk) 09:32, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Ah, that makes sense (Fundatie/Foundation); so that's ok.. I did not find the complete citation regarding the Van Gogh Museum authentication in the CBS article used for the citation, but with the NRC hook that point indeed is solved... L.tak (talk) 09:51, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
    Have all issues been dealt with or addressed to your satisfaction? – Editør (talk) 13:26, 19 July 2014 (UTC)



Cudgel War

  • ... that the Cudgel War was the largest peasant rebellion ever to occur in Finland?
  • ALT1: ... that cudgels were the main weapon of the peasants fighting in the Cudgel War?

5x expanded by Catlemur (talk). Self nominated at 19:50, 7 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol possible vote.svg Some of the sources are in Finnish. I looked at the main English language source and found there were large scale copy and paste copyright violations. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 08:10, 21 July 2014 (UTC)


Mya (program)

  • ... that Mya choked up halfway through a service for president Bill Clinton?

Created by Freikorp (talk). Self nominated at 13:32, 7 July 2014 (UTC).

  • "Service" makes no sense here -- I thought it must mean a religious service. From the article, the right word is demonstration (or we could say demo to be hip):
ALT1... that Mya choked up halfway through a demo for president Bill Clinton?
EEng (talk) 05:19, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
Demonstration is a more accurate word for sure, I was hoping to use the word service (noun - synonyms include 'performance of one's duties' [19], which I think can technically work here) for its innuendo effect, but happy with your ALT1. Thanks for your comments. Freikorp (talk) 05:56, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
Too good to pass up
EEng (talk) 02:57, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
Is this "Carry On DYK?" Yak-yak-yak. Ooooh Maaatron. Belle (talk) 00:32, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Symbol voting keep.svg New enough, long enough, neutral enough, no close paraphrasing or copyvio in the sources I could check so I'm assuming the others will be OK too. ALT1 is fine (although "chok[ed] up halfway" is quoted in the article it would look a bit odd here). ALT2 is too much (won't SOMEBODY think of the children?!!?) Belle (talk) 00:32, 13 July 2014 (UTC) P.S. I forgot to say that the article finishes abruptly with no explanation as to why it was cancelled or whether it actually was (not a DYK matter but it leaves the reader unsatisfied) Belle (talk) 01:09, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

From your tone it sounds like you believe there to be some inadvertent sexual meaning which makes the hook inappropriate for children. If so, can you please explain? I can be rather dense in such matters so please be as explicit as possible. Link to appropriate images if necessary. EEng (talk) 00:46, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
I would explain but it is time for tiffin. Belle (talk) 01:09, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
Don't choke on the cucumber... sandwiches. EEng (talk) 01:11, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for your review and copyedit Belle. As per the articles talk page, I am aware of the articles shortfall in not having any information on the programs cancellation. Unfortunately I just can't find any information on the cancellation; it seems to have just quietly disappeared after so much effort and advertising. I feel unsatisfied not knowing exactly what happened as well. EEng, now that the original hook has been approved, do you think we should change ALT1 from 'choked up halfway through a demo' to 'malfunctioned during a demonstration', that way we would have one innuendo hook and one hook that focuses on being as clear as possible. As per Belle's comments, ALT1 does look a bit odd as it currently stands. I loved your ALT2 btw, I literally laughed for a good couple minutes. I hope the admins choose to use that one anyway =D. Freikorp (talk) 01:49, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

I do try to spread joy and laughter wherever I go. EEng (talk) 02:16, 13 July 2014 (UTC)


Neptunium

Improved to Good Article status by Double sharp (talk). Nominated by Oceanh (talk) at 09:12, 7 July 2014 (UTC).

  • I've lowercased neptunium and introduced the list of allotropes with a dash. Also adding ALT2A.
ALT2A:... that neptunium is found in at least three allotropes—​one orthorhombic, one tetragonal, and one body-centered cubic?

EEng (talk) 19:36, 7 July 2014 (UTC)

  • Thank you for improving the orthography, and for supplying an ALT2A hook which reads better than mine. Oceanh (talk) 20:12, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
You'll get my bill. EEng (talk) 21:08, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
Looking at this again I think ALT1 is more clickworthy. ALT2/2A sound like a math lecture. EEng (talk) 21:57, 8 July 2014 (UTC)

Articles created/expanded on July 8[edit]

Juan Puig

Created by ComputerJA (talk). Self nominated at 18:02, 11 July 2014 (UTC).




Articles created/expanded on July 9[edit]

Tranquility Bass

Created by Jinkinson (talk). Self nominated at 15:15, 18 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg The article is new enough and long enough and in general meets the DYK criteria, however "Lopez Island" is not mentioned by name in the citation (#4) for the rest of the hook, so either the hook needs revision or another reference needs to be included in the article. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:30, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
I have invoked another reference (#6) next to the sentence in question; this source explicitly says the album was recorded on Lopez Island. Jinkinson talk to me 09:20, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg That's fine. This article meets DYK criteria, the hook facts are cited, QPQ has been done and I detected no policy issues. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:35, 21 July 2014 (UTC)



Korean melon

Created by LittleT889 (talk). Self nominated at 13:48, 10 July 2014 (UTC).

"researched" sounds a bit off in this use.

  • ALT1... that the seeds of the Korean melon have been investigated for use in controlling diabetes?

EEng (talk) 03:06, 11 July 2014 (UTC)

  • Symbol question.svg New enough. Long enough. NPOV. Looks well-cited, but few of the refs are available online, apart from short abstracts, including the two in support of the hook, although some of the journal ones may be forthcoming. The original hook seems to overstate things and EEng's ALT1 appears more appropriate. However, the article states that it is the hexane in the seeds that may be useful for controlling diabetes, and hexane (per our WP article) seems to be widely and cheaply available from other sources. I'm no chemist, but this claim for the melon seeds doesn't seem to stack up.
Spot checking for close paraphrasing throws up some issues. Looking at source 6, the odd phrases "hen meat" and "wind dampness" are copied, so I'm sceptical about close paraphrasing elsewhere. Looking at source 1, the abstract has "Molecular polymorphism studies suggested that Cucumis melo vars. makuwa and conomon are derived from small seed type melon in east India" The article uses "It has been suggested based on molecular polymorphism studies that the Korean melon originated from a small seed type melon in East India." This is too close. Edwardx (talk) 23:27, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
Made a few changes. Hexane extract means hexane was used to extract fat-soluble substances from the seeds (ex. linoleic acid). LittleT889 (talk) 03:31, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
Symbol question.svg The specific paraphrasing examples noted have been addressed. The article sentence, "Research suggests that the hexane extract of the seeds could be used as a way to control type 2 diabetes." remains unchanged. You will need to expand the article to include the explanation you set out above. Edwardx (talk) 12:22, 21 July 2014 (UTC)



Articles created/expanded on July 10[edit]

Emily Ratajkowski

  • Reviewed:
  • Comment: Technically, Emily Ratajkowski has only been expanded from 3216 to 10291 which is only a 3.2 x expansion. However, I have dug up lots of non-prose content that really augments the readers understanding. I have seen lots of talk page discussions about changing the expansion requirements. Is it possible to accept this based on over 6.7KB of new content plus non-prose improvements? If not can someone review this at GA where it is a current nominee.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:51, 15 July 2014 (UTC)

Created by TonyTheTiger (talk). Self nominated at 22:51, 15 July 2014 (UTC).

  • I am just curious what the sentiment is regarding this candidate given all the discussion about changing the criteria.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 19:56, 20 July 2014 (UTC)


  • Symbol delete vote.svg I think this has to be a no; as you say, it is not even close to the required 5x expansion. There is also repetition throughout which when removed will reduce the size further. You can bring it back if it gets GA. Belle (talk) 00:40, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
  • At least her time spent in Ireland as a child, signing up to Ford, and the controversy around the video. There's also what I would consider tangential material as, for example, in the details of Blurred Lines charting performance. Belle (talk) 07:55, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I have fixed the stated redundancies. It remains at 10362 characters of readable prose up from 3216 (3.222x).--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 14:37, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
  • How is the charting performance tangential? You can say she was in a controversial song or the most popular song in the world, which was also controversial. These are two different things.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 14:10, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
  • You can simply say she was in the video for the most popular song in the world ("number 1 song of the year in 2013 music charts in many countries"); no need to dedicate a paragraph to that song's charting performance including the dates during which it was number one and which song it displaced and that song's charting performance; that information is not pertinent to her article. Belle (talk) 14:57, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I have shortened the charting detail from 543 characters to 431 characters. I don't think I can retain the encyclopedic content with further reductions, but will consider your feedback.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:25, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I don't think you'd lose much by replacing the Black Eyed Peas bit with "since 2009", but I'd have the article reduced to half the size if you let me at it with scissors. Anyway, I feel like I've fallen for the long con here and am slowly being reeled into a GA review (which I'm really not qualified for, having barely enough of an attention span to get me through DYK). Let's close this down and have another go when it's passed GA. Belle (talk) 16:49, 22 July 2014 (UTC)




Grizzled tree-kangaroo

Grizzled tree-kangaroo

5x expanded by Cwmhiraeth (talk). Self nominated at 06:21, 11 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg Expansion OK, time limit for expansion OK, neutral enough, no plagiarism or copyvio. It's a pity that all the information available on its history in captivity has not been included but that is not a DYK matter. This would be good to go, but I'm going to suggest an ALT which I think is slightly hookier, so somebody else will have to give it the green tick (I've tried waving my arms, shouting and flashing a bit of leg at other nominations with no success in attracting a green ticker, so this time I'm going to throw wads of money in the air. Look, 100-dollar bills!).
  • ALT1 ... that although the grizzled tree-kangaroo (pictured) feeds mainly on leaves and figs in the wild, in captivity it has been fed boiled eggs, biscuits and sardines? Belle (talk) 11:43, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
I'm happy with ALT1 (which I have tweaked a bit). Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:03, 11 July 2014 (UTC)
The reference about feeding an animal that in the wild lived in leaves and trees such things as sardines and boiled eggs in the zoo is very strange. From the context it seems that this was done in the 19th century, the source (a random webs.com site with no author or affiliation, are these things suddenly considered reliable?) is very confusing. I suspect nowadays no one would do such a thing, it sounds like a recipe for gastric upset and worse to feed a herbivore a protein-rich diet. Can't you all do better? You guys really need to exercise editorial judgement. 50.201.246.221 (talk) 00:12, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
Thanks for dipping your beak in, honey. Despite undermining your credibility a bit with that, I'm sure you have a point. Not about the feeding (as while the strange captive diet is almost certainly historical the hook doesn't make any claim that it is current practice; "it has been" not "it is"), but about the suitability of the website as a source. It seems rather detailed for it to be a hoax, but that doesn't mean it is reliable under Wikipedia's rules. Cwmhiraeth, can you say why it should be considered a suitable source? Belle (talk) 01:23, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
The proposed hook fact was a bit trivial and I have removed the bit about zoos from the article. Nevertheless, the information in the Papuan Mammals source is well referenced and should be acceptable on the matter of diet in the wild etc. Suggesting a different hook:
I prefer ALT2. Kangaroos in general can hop but most are not agile enough to climb trees let alone leap from one tree to another. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:48, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
Yes, but that's kind of what I had in mind in shortening the hook. I think readers will be startled enough by the image of a kangaroo jumping among trees that they'll want to click -- to my mind mentioning that they do so with agility almost waters it down. (Although, on the other hand, if an RS said "The creature's tree-to-tree hopping is, at best, very clumsy" then that should definitely be included -- the only thing more amusing than the image of a kangaroo jumping from tree to tree is that of a kangaroo jumping clumsily from tree to tree.) But I leave it to you. EEng (talk) 11:59, 17 July 2014 (UTC)




Articles created/expanded on July 11[edit]

Remedios Circle

Buildings around Remedios Circle

  • ... that Remedios Circle (pictured), now considered the center of Manila's nightlife, was originally a cemetery?
  • Reviewed: Doing...

Created by Sky Harbor (talk). Self nominated at 17:22, 16 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg Hook is fine, sourced, length is fine. The article is long enough and new enough. All that is needed is QPQ and it can go forward. Correct me if I've used the wrong symbol here. --Rsrikanth05 (talk) 20:02, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
  • This is the correct symbol while you're waiting for something. Yoninah (talk) 22:49, 21 July 2014 (UTC)



Ștefan Baciu

5x expanded by Dahn (talk). Self nominated at 15:57, 13 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Can you quote the text from the article re "too anticommunistic" (which I think should be anticommunist BTW). I can't find it. EEng (talk) 02:42, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
    • Heh. "Such ideas alarmed the CIA, since they risked alienating the anticommunist left. John Hunt and Keith Botsford repeatedly asked Baciu to focus on anti-Casto, rather than "right-wing", propaganda (Hunt referred to Baciu as "a right-wing democratic socialist", a Betancourt associate, and a "maniac")." And: "Allegedly, Baciu found himself threatened by the Cuban Intelligence Directorate. However, it was Baciu's extreme anticommunism that prompted Hunt to demand his resignation and appoint Vicente de Paulo Barretto as the new CCF General Secretary. Baciu later commented that the CCF had committed "suicide" by moderating its tone, noting that its "constructive dialogue with proven communists" was a moral victory for "Eurocommunism"." These quotes, you will note, have several citations right after the fact(s). On the "anti-communistic": since this is as an adjective, I thought it would make more sense to use the clearly adjectival form. I get 83 hits for "too anti-communistic". But yes, whatever works. Dahn (talk) 06:56, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
It's always best if the article text supporting the hook can be located via a search for at least one of the obvious keywords in the hook -- in this case either CIA or anti-communist. EEng (talk) 07:13, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
Maybe, but in this case it was utterly impractical, since the story is rather longish, contains several important facts, and intertwines with other significant events in Baciu's life. I don't feel that it can be argued here that the slightly different wording of my hook vis-a-vis what I put in the article adds subjectivity or unreliability, or even interpretation: the fact is that Baciu was fired because the CIA felt his anticommunism diminished the importance of the CCF, which was supposed to be inclusive of the anti-Stalinist left. (The hook should be interesting regardless of how we feel about the CIA. I personally commend it for initiatives such as the CCF, and I find that being paid by the CIA to express oneself freely was always a better choice than to have been paid by the KGB to spew out lies.)
In any case, I feel it's a technicality, and encourage reviewers not to expect the hook to parrot the text -- that would greatly reduce the fun of it, on both sides.
For the CIA quote: "The [Brazilian chapter of the CCF] was in part funded by the Central Intelligence Agency, through its Paris agent, John Hunt (with whom Baciu corresponded), and answered directly to the Spaniard Julián Gorkin." Though, frankly, it appears that Mr. Hunt was only ever culturally relevant as a CIA liaison -- that is the only thing history remembers him for. So it's not that big a secret in 2014. Dahn (talk) 07:33, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
OK, I didn't mean to put you to so much work. EEng (talk) 02:20, 17 July 2014 (UTC)

Kevin Cron

Created by Muboshgu (talk). Self nominated at 16:35, 12 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol possible vote.svg New enough, long enough, passed spot check for plagiarism. Just needs QPQ. Gatoclass (talk) 13:09, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
  • (edit conflict) Symbol question.svg New (11th), long enough, neutral, there are some instances of close paraphrasing that can be rephrased, QPQ not done. Hook has immediate ref and checks out. Some problems: (1) Does this person meet WP:NSPORT? It would seem to me that he doesn't meet the notability criteria as having not played in the major leagues. I know little about baseball so let me know if I'm missing something obvious. (2) The hook isn't very interesting. High school records are broken all the time. Is there anything else? Please ping me if I don't respond. czar  13:11, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
They don't look like instances of close paraphrasing to me, they are just hits on proper names and so on. Gatoclass (talk) 13:16, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
WP:NSPORT is an automatic qualifier for certain individuals for whom sources may not be immediately available. Cron passes WP:GNG for the depth and breadth of sources, whether or not he reaches MLB. As for the hook, it's not the most interesting to ever be posted, but I've seen (and written) duller. I'll provide QPQ today. – Muboshgu (talk) 14:17, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
@Muboshgu, checking in on that QPQ czar  16:15, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
Thanks for the reminder. I performed one and added it above. – Muboshgu (talk) 21:18, 21 July 2014 (UTC)

Končar-class missile boat

Improved to Good Article status by Saxum (talk). Nominated by Matty.007 (talk) at 11:07, 12 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol possible vote.svg Good article status bestowed on July 11, satisfying recency requirement. Article is long enough and uses in-line citations. No QPQ needed since this is not a self-nomination. The hook is short enough, modestly interesting (subjectively). spot checking doesn't reveal any plagiarism/copyright issues. The problem I have is in verifying the hook fact, which is not stated in the article. Also, the bits about the Montenegren navy seem to be in the future tense, referring to plans. There doesn't appear to be anything in the article saying that any of the boats are presently in use by Montenegren forces. Cbl62 (talk) 02:55, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
  • The table states "In service with the Montenegrin Navy[11]". Thanks, Matty.007 09:54, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
The table says that, but the body of the article says that the ships "are planned to be modified as patrol boats for service with the Montenegrin Navy." The ships can't be both "in service" and "planned to be modified" (forward-looking phrasing) to be in service. So, there appears to be an internal contradiction between the table and text. This should be cleared up. Cbl62 (talk) 01:56, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
They are serving with the Montenegrins whilst being incapicitated during modification. They aren't non-Montenegrin ships because work is being done on them. I could change serve to operate though if it is preferable. Thanks, Matty.007 11:08, 16 July 2014 (UTC)



Childcare infection

  • ... that infection in childcare is a risk when groups of children meet for school or daycare, but hygiene reduces its prevalence?

Created by Bluerasberry (talk). Self nominated at 16:56, 11 July 2014 (UTC).

  • From a brief look at the article I worry that the term childcare infection is a neologism -- it doesn't occur in the title of any of the cited sources. If I'm wrong the nominator will easily be able to shore that up in the article text and sourcing. EEng (talk) 16:14, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
EEng I changed the name to "Infection in childcare" per WP:NEOLOGISM. Because there is no term for this, many phrases are used, and I listed them at Talk:Infection_in_childcare. "Infection in childcare" appears more than "childcare infection", so that must be a better name. I am not sure of the best name but I tried to choose something appropriate. Blue Rasberry (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
I'd like other editors to look at Talk:Infection in childcare and opine. EEng (talk) 17:59, 12 July 2014 (UTC)



Articles created/expanded on July 12[edit]

Wilhelm Münter Rolfsen

Created by Oceanh (talk), Geschichte (talk). Nominated by Oceanh (talk) at 19:07, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

Sinaloan mastiff bat

  • ... that the males and females of Sinaloan mastiff bat can't be differentiated on the basis of the breadth of their braincases?

5x expanded by Anaxial (talk). Nominated by Skr15081997 (talk) at 13:22, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

Edward Joshua Cooper

  • ... that Irish politician Edward Joshua Cooper's private observatory in County Sligo made the first discovery of an asteroid from Ireland?
  • ALT1:... that in 1831 Irish politician Edward Joshua Cooper opposed parliamentary reform, claiming that it would cause "the total annihilation of Protestantism"?
  • ALT2:... that in 1831 Irish politician Edward Joshua Cooper's private astronomical observatory contained the largest lens ever made?
  • Reviewed: Armonía Somers

Created by BrownHairedGirl (talk). Self nominated at 17:27, 18 July 2014 (UTC).

Floortje Mackaij

Mackaij at the 2013 World Championships

Created by Sander.v.Ginkel (talk). Self nominated at 20:55, 15 July 2014 (UTC).

  • 1: Article created on nomination date, meets New criteria. About 2000 prose characters so long enough. Sourcing appears good for DYK, though recommend trying to get some more secondary sources for future article growth.
  • 2: Hook is short enough. Fact is citable to athlete's own webpage, but I can verify against other sources eg [20]. Hook content is interesting.
  • 3: Picture is free and from commons, and shows person directly. Nominator only has 2 DYK per QPQ tool, so no need for a review here.
  • Symbol confirmed.svg Appears ready to go --MASEM (t) 17:05, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I just checked several statements from the different sources (having to go through Google Translate) but even considering the langauage translation, nothing appears off (eg not close paraphrasing). The only problem with the source I linked is that it is not quite independent as it is the newsletter of the current cycling team that she is on. But given this is a personal fact that I've seen repeated in different phrasing from her personal bio page, the team's current info page, this newsletter, and few other places, as well as reading of other speed skaters using cycling for off-season training, I don't think there's a problem with the fact (it's something she can personally related); the sourcing concern is only with growing out the article as to not rest too much on her personal webpage for some details. --MASEM (t) 01:48, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I started searching for some more sources confirming that she started with speed skating. I think the best one is her profile on her team page wich is also in English. Besides of that I found some secondary sources about her speed skating performances, 2 examples (in Dutch): here and here Sander.v.Ginkel (talk) 07:21, 17 July 2014 (UTC)


Hardy Richardson and Jack Rowe

Tomlinson Studios Cabinet Photograph of Jack Rowe

  • ... that baseball players Hardy Richardson and Jack Rowe (pictured) were two of the "Big Four", a group "regarded for many years as the greatest quartette in the history of the national pastime"?

5x expanded by Cbl62 (talk). Self nominated at 01:37, 14 July 2014 (UTC).


Genes, Brain and Behavior

  • ... that the journal Genes, Brain, and Behavior works to raise standards for mouse mutant studies to reduce waste and ethical problems because of the unnecessary use of live animals for flawed studies?

Improved to Good Article status by Randykitty (talk). Self nominated at 20:01, 13 July 2014 (UTC).

  • "at the forefront" needs to be quoted for sure, and probably attributed in the hook somehow, if it's used at all. Article says nothing this strong. EEng (talk) 23:25, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
  • You're absolutely right, that's not in the sources, so I have edited the hook to take out the "forefront". It also makes it a bit shorter.
Unfortunately you lost me again with "...to reduce waste and yadda yadda [yawn]".
ALT1 ... that the journal Genes, Brain, and Behavior works to raise standards for mouse mutant studies?
If it could say "mutant mice" and drop the studies that would be the hookiest hook in my hooky hook book (Scientific accuracy? [blows raspberry]) Belle (talk) 15:39, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
Before we get to Belle's perverted fantasies, I still have a worry now that I've look at the sources. The hook seems to be based on the journal's own published standards. I wonder if we shouldn't have a secondary source on this. After all, if this is really a significant initiative some other journal will have done an editorial or something commenting on it. EEng (talk) 01:59, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Yes, there should be a secondary source for this, rather than us simply parroting their advertising line. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:16, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • There are two references (one an editorial in Nature Neuroscience) in the sentence following the hook in the article (last sentence of the "reception" section). So the hook is indeed based on an editorial in the journal itself, but its notability follows from that editorial (and from the European Journal of Neuroscience also following these guidelines). BTW, I think that ALT1 is indeed an improvement, the hook that I proposed was just too long and complicated. I think that "studies" needs to remain, however, because the guidelines don't intend to improve the animals, but the way in which they are being used. --Randykitty (talk) 11:13, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
Can you link to, or quote, what these two other journals say about GBB's initiative? EEng (talk) 12:43, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
Not sure what you mean here. If you are asking for the text of the Nature Neuroscience editorial, that is here. EJN simply included a reference to this guideline in their instructions for authors stating that authors should follow it. Let me know if I misunderstood and you'd like me to make changes to the article. --Randykitty (talk) 19:19, 15 July 2014 (UTC)


Robert Curl

Robert Curl in 2009

5x expanded by Antony-22 (talk). Self nominated at 03:34, 13 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg Sufficiently expanded and meets core policies. Spotchecks on the refs were mostly OK. Hook is cited and just inside the 200-character mark. --Jakob (talk) 17:55, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

I think as a child and some other bits can be omitted as things the reader will infer.

Further, I wonder if Buckminsterfullerene was omitted for length reasons -- it fits now and will attract interest, I think:

EEng (talk) 23:22, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

I prefer the original, as I think the progression from being a young chemistry klutz to winning the Nobel Prize is what gives the hook its punch. Antony–22 (talkcontribs) 03:16, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
It's entirely up to you, but let me say this. There's an incongruity (which is what we're after) whether you work from Nobel to klutz or klutz to Nobel. But a kid ruining his mom's stove is more unexpected than a Nobel prize winner (DYK being full of Nobel prize winners, war heroes, and so on) so the stove makes the better punchline. IMO of course.
The presence of the image makes this even more true, because the hook as you have it reads CHILD - GROWNUP (pictured) - MOM'S STOVE - NOBEL i.e. it jumps back and forth in time instead of working up to the punchline. See my point? EEng (talk) 06:01, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
The progression as I see it is that they see the picture of the old man first, the fact about ruining the stove creates tension, and then learning about the Nobel Prize resolves that tension. If they already know about the Nobel Prize, the ending about the chemistry set seems anticlimactic to me. As they say, De gustibus non est disputandum, so I'm happy to let the promoting admin decide. (Also, you're correct that buckminsterfullerene was shortened to make it fit... the discoverers definitely weren't thinking about DYK length limits when they decided on that name!) Antony–22 (talkcontribs) 23:03, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
Sorry, my Greek's not so good, but I get your point. Here's a version you might want to cannibalize to make further modifications, but it's up to you:
that a young Robert Curl ruined his mom's stove with nitric acid from his first chemistry set, then went on to win the Nobel Prize in Chemistry for the discovery of buckminsterfullerene?
EEng (talk) 01:20, 15 July 2014 (UTC)




Articles created/expanded on July 13[edit]

Edward Henry Cooper

  • ... that Irish landlord Edward Henry Cooper was the last of 6 members of his family to be a Member of Parliament for County Sligo?

Created by BrownHairedGirl (talk). Self nominated at 18:36, 16 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg Article is new enough, long enough, is written from a neutral point of view, and I didn't find any close paraphrasing from the public links. In general, the referencing is excellent, although there is one paragraph at the start of the "After Parliament" section with no reference given, and the claim that Sligo's MPs were generally drawn from the county's major landlords could also do with a reference.
Regarding the hooks, I like the original hook, but the article doesn't explicitly state that he was the last member of his family to represent County Sligo and needs to do so if that is to be used. I also have a slight concern about ALT1, as the document used as a reference states that the estate consisted of 30,000 acres when sold by Cooper's grandson, but doesn't specify that it was the same size as in Cooper's time. However, ALT2 is good (subscription-only reference accepted in good faith), and is a good, attention-grabbing hook.
With the minor attention to referencing, ALT2 will be good to go, and additional references could make the other hooks ready, too. Warofdreams talk 18:04, 22 July 2014 (UTC)



Brean Down

Brean Down

  • Reviewed: Not a self-nomination.

Improved to Good Article status by Rodw (talk). Nominated by Oceanh (talk) at 11:12, 15 July 2014 (UTC).


XHTM-TV

  • ... that XEQ-TV on Altzomoni was billed as the world's highest television station?
  • ALT1: ... that XHTM-TV has five relay transmitters in five states?
  • Reviewed: Englesea Brook Chapel and Museum
  • Comment: The difference in callsigns between the first hook and article name is because of a callsign and channel swap that occurred in 1985 (see article). This is why I specifically mention the mountain in that hook, so that readers don't think of the XEQ in Mexico City. 5 of 7 sources are in Spanish, all of them various Mexican government documents.

Created by Raymie (talk). Self nominated at 22:05, 14 July 2014 (UTC). ALT1 hook added 19:21, 17 July 2014 (UTC).


Olry Terquem

5x expanded by David Eppstein (talk). Self nominated at 07:18, 14 July 2014 (UTC).

  • I wonder if for-->of wouldn't be better? EEng (talk) 02:34, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Yes, I think you're correct. Changed. —David Eppstein (talk) 02:47, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
Always good running into you. Did you see Jean Berko Gleason? EEng (talk)
I did see that her DYK got through, yes. Congratulations; that seems to have taken quite a lot of effort. —David Eppstein (talk) 17:42, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
I more meant it makes a nice complement to our work last year on AMG. I only met her twice, briefly, but she seems like a very gracious lady and her research is fascinating -- the Wug Test brilliant in its simplicity. EEng (talk) 18:26, 15 July 2014 (UTC)


Isopoda

Armadillidium vulgare

  • ... that more than 10,000 species of isopod (sample pictured) have been described worldwide?
  • Reviewed: Not a self-nomination

Improved to Good Article status by Cwmhiraeth (talk), Esoxid (talk). Nominated by Oceanh (talk) at 20:01, 13 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Isn't it isopods, plural? EEng (talk) 02:30, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
As used in the proposed hook, it should be singular, as in "kinds of dog". Cwmhiraeth (talk) 04:52, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
I ... guess ... um ... I keep going back and forth. Three breeds of dog? Three breeds of dogs? It's late. My mind is clouded. Whatever you think is best. zzzzzzzz EEng (talk) 05:31, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
Singular, definitely. G S Palmer (talkcontribs) 19:48, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I wonder if you might seduce a few more readers to click through and learn something by saying that some of them use "semiflubbing locomotion" or some other thing from the article, rather than just a raw number -- one thing I think interests people (not sure if it's in the article) is the fact that new species are always being identified -- "10,000 species, over 200 in the last year alone" or whatever. I kind of liked the fact that "marine and freshwater isopods are entirely benthic" since I never heard that word and it sounds vaguely naughty. EEng (talk) 20:52, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
How about:
  • ALT1 ... that isopods (woodlouse pictured) brood their eggs in a brood chamber which is filled with water, even in land-living species? Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:07, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • ALT2 ... that even land-living species of isopod (woodlouse pictured) brood their eggs in a brood chamber filled with water? EEng (talk) 10:46, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
ALT2 is much better expressed than ALT1 and I have struck the original hook and ALT1. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:53, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
  • ALT2A ... that even land-living species of isopod (woodlouse pictured) deposit their eggs in a brood chamber filled with water? EEng (talk) 11:00, 15 July 2014 (UTC) (sorry)
I prefer ALT2, or what about:

Yes, 2B is best of all. EEng (talk) 12:31, 15 July 2014 (UTC)


Emmanuel Ifeajuna

Created by Sillyfolkboy (talk). Self nominated at 20:04, 13 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Re the hold date, I'm not sure it's tasteful to commemorate the start of this year's games by highlighting that an athlete in an earlier year organized a coup in which a dozen people were killed. Maybe the anniversary of the coup? EEng (talk) 23:30, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
    • I don't think it's distasteful at all. The hook certainly isn't celebrating the coup. Ifeajuna is a key part of Commonwealth Games history. I don't think his political activities should exclude his association with the event (a point actually mentioned by commentators in the article sourcing). We are not here to demonstrate that every key athlete of Commonwealth Games history is a paragon of virtue. SFB 20:29, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
Who said anything about paragons? When you juxtapose two facts you're inevitably making some kind of statement, because you picked those two things to say out of the many that you could picked to juxtapose, but didn't. When you further put that hook on the opening day of the games themselves, it does carry the feeling that you're saying something about the games. (Imagine if you were giving a speech at the opening ceremonies and said, "Friends, let us remember that one of our past athletes later organized a coup in which people were killed." I think there'd be a very awkward silence.)

Why not run it on the day of the coup? That changes the feeling from "Games athletes sometime go on to do nasty things" to "People who do nasty things sometimes have noble things in their past." See the difference? In keeping with that, I'd turn the hook around from "Athlete later organized coup" to "Organizer of coup had been an athlete" -- again, see the difference? I'm not saying this is a big deal. EEng (talk) 21:21, 14 July 2014 (UTC)

It would be wrong to neglect to mention the two main reasons for his notability. It's his profoundly unusual life which causes the juxtaposition, not me. I'm not entirely opposed to aligning it with the coup anniversary, but after many months waiting it will be far from new content and I think very few people will actually notice the date coincidence in comparison to the Commonwealth Games (which as it stands is hardly overloaded with related nominations). Nothing in the DYK rules excludes usage of such a hook. Certainly, The Observer does not think it in such bad taste to cover Ifeajuna in this way during their build up to the games. SFB 17:29, 15 July 2014 (UTC)
Huh? I never said to leave out either fact. I said two things: (a) that the opening of the Games is not an appropriate time to highlight what might be called treason by one of its past athletes; (b) that the order of presentation of the two facts matters. EEng (talk) 01:07, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
I'm not sure we want a entire (hyperbole, I've seen two articles thus far) "Did you know about the Commonwealth games" section on the main page, so it may be better to run this on a date with no particular relevance. Belle (talk) 09:47, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
Or, as I said, on the anniversary of the coup. EEng (talk) 01:07, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
  • @EEng, Belle: I've proposed an alt hook to get this in line with your thinking. I'm pretty sure that three DYKs on the Commonwealth Games over the course of the two weeks that the event is held will hardly be overkill for our readers (estimated 196 hooks due over that period).
ALT1 ... that Emmanuel Ifeajuna became the first black African gold medallist at the Commonwealth Games when he won the high jump in 1952?
SFB 22:07, 18 July 2014 (UTC)

Personally I prefer your ALT1. EEng (talk) 22:13, 18 July 2014 (UTC)


Middle Branch Chillisquaque Creek

Moved to mainspace by Jakec (talk). Self nominated at 18:08, 13 July 2014 (UTC).

Kase Run

The lower reaches of Kase Run

  • ... that there are 78 "disturbances" on Kase Run (pictured)?

Moved to mainspace by Jakec (talk). Self nominated at 17:27, 13 July 2014 (UTC).

Um... you won't mind my saying there isn't a lot of sex appeal in this article. Weren't there any massacres or steamboat disasters nearby? Anyway, how about

  • ALT1 ... that Kase Run has three pipes, two ripraps, a dam, and a ford?

Maybe that will sound mysterious somehow. EEng (talk) 00:28, 14 July 2014 (UTC)

  • Could work, but I think that 78 disturbances is more mysterious/strange. --Jakob (talk) 01:09, 14 July 2014 (UTC)

I leave it to you. I'd drop the quotes if I were you

  • ALT2... that there are 78 disturbances on Kase Run?

EEng (talk) 01:48, 14 July 2014 (UTC)

  • ALT2 is good. Seems better without the quotes. Thanks for the help. --Jakob (talk) 23:34, 14 July 2014 (UTC)


Articles created/expanded on July 14[edit]

Rheingauer Kantorei

Choir of the Marktkirche Wiesbaden

Created by Gerda Arendt (talk). Self nominated at 22:14, 20 July 2014 (UTC).





Articles created/expanded on July 15[edit]

Muriel Pemberton

  • ... that Muriel Pemberton "invented art-school training in fashion in Britain"?

Created by Edwardx (talk), Zigzig20s (talk). Nominated by Edwardx (talk) at 21:51, 22 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg The article meets the length and age requirements. No copyvio or close paraphrasing detected. I have marked the article as start class on its talk page. The article has at least one citation per para. Hook fact checks out with the 1st ref. @Edwardx: all we need is a QPQ.--Skr15081997 (talk) 12:35, 23 July 2014 (UTC)

James Wedge

  • ALT1:... that James Wedge changed career from fashion design and retail to photography, inspired by Terence Donovan driving a Rolls-Royce, with a model on his arm?
  • Reviewed: Alice Teodorescu
  • Comment: Other hooks and tweaks welcome.

Created by Edwardx (talk), Philafrenzy (talk). Nominated by Edwardx (talk) at 20:48, 22 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svgThe article meets the length and age requirements. Neutral in tone, this article uses at least one inline citation per para. I found no evidence of close paraphrasing or copyvio. The first hook checks out with the 4th ref and the second one with the Book source. QPQ done. Good to go with any of the two proposed hooks.--Skr15081997 (talk) 13:24, 23 July 2014 (UTC)

Sally Tuffin

  • ALT1:... that Sally Tuffin and Marion Foale started designing clothes after being given sewing machines by their parents for their 21st birthdays?
  • Reviewed: Family Building Society
  • Comment: More hooks and tweaks to existing ones are always most welcome!

Created by Edwardx (talk), Philafrenzy (talk). Nominated by Edwardx (talk) at 20:06, 22 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svgThe article fulfills the length and age requirements. Written in dispassionate tone, this article uses at least one inline citation per para. QPQ has been done and I found no plagiarism or close paraphrasing issues. Both the hooks check out with the Victoria & Albert museum source. Good to go with any of the two proposed hooks.--Skr15081997 (talk) 13:46, 23 July 2014 (UTC)

Gunung Ambang Nature Reserve, Golden-mantled racket-tail, Chestnut-backed bush warbler, Scaly-breasted kingfisher, Dark-eared myza, Matinan blue flycatcher, Cerulean cuckooshrike, Sulawesi masked owl

Golden-mantled racket-tail

Created/expanded by Cwmhiraeth (talk). Self nominated at 05:16, 21 July 2014 (UTC).


Naval Auxiliary Air Facility Nantucket

  • Reviewed: Deacon McGuire
  • Comment: I am slightly late on this due to user group meetings yesterday, so my apologies for doing this so late.

Created/expanded by Ktr101 (talk). Self nominated at 23:45, 20 July 2014 (UTC).


Family Building Society

Created by The Whispering Wind (talk). Self nominated at 23:18, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg New enough. Long enough. NPOV. No QPQ needed. Dup detector spot check shows up some copyvios, eg "specialise in products that allow family members to help each other" More rewriting is needed, or direct attribution in quotes. Hook is cited, but it opened on 14 July, presumably established earlier. So, I've added an ALT1. All paras cited. Edwardx (talk) 23:24, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Ah! Great point! Now fixed so the lead is now strictly in compliance with the source; I agree ALT1 is best. :-) The Whispering Wind (talk) 23:50, 22 July 2014 (UTC)

Fittja gård

Fittja gård

  • ... that ....during the reformation of Sweden, Fittja gård (pictured) was confiscated by farmers who used the lands until 1631?

Created by BabbaQ (talk). Self nominated at 20:59, 19 July 2014 (UTC).


Alice Teodorescu

  • ... that ....Alice Teodorescu "has made herself known as a provocative and fearless liberal debater"?

Created by BabbaQ (talk). Self nominated at 20:52, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg New enough. NOT long enough, DYK Check shows 1415 characters (230 words) "readable prose size". My Swedish is almost non-existent, but online translation does bring up "Alice Teodorescu has become known as a provocative and fearless liberal debater", so that seems to check out. I am prepared to assume WP:AGF for the rest. QPQ done. NPOV. Edwardx (talk) 00:50, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Expansion completed.--BabbaQ (talk) 19:57, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol voting keep.svg Long enough now. Hook checks out. All the sources are in Swedish, and as the hook source is fine, I will WP:AGF for the rest. Edwardx (talk) 23:30, 23 July 2014 (UTC)

Changyuraptor

Created by AshLin (talk), MWAK (talk), Abductive (talk). Nominated by AshLin (talk) at 17:51, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Comment: QPQ Pending
  • Symbol question.svgThe article is new enough and long enough, with use of the type description and several media references. I have reservations about the statement that Maniraptorinae as a group is called the "four winged dinosaurs" as the last sentence in the introduction seems to suggest. Also the bbc reference does not support the hook as stated here. it only states that Changyuraptor was the largest flight capable dinosaur with hind leg feathering.--Kevmin § 08:29, 21 July 2014 (UTC)

Ugly Heart

  • ... that the accompanying music video to "Ugly Heart" was seen by 2.5 million viewers in less than a week?
  • ALT1:... that Natasha Slayton from G.R.L. described the group's song "Ugly Heart" as "a Hawaiian hoedown"?
  • Reviewed: The Philaletheis Society
  • Comment: Please feel free to tweak the hook or suggest another.

Moved to mainspace by JuneGloom07 (talk), Raintheone (talk). Nominated by JuneGloom07 (talk) at 16:21, 17 July 2014 (UTC).


Odense

Odense - Sankt Knuds kirke 2005-07-16.jpeg
  • ... that the man generally considered to be the last Viking king was murdered in Odense (pictured)?

Improved to Good Article status by Dr. Blofeld (talk), Rosiestep (talk) and Ipigott (talk). Nominated by Matty.007 (talk) at 14:08, 17 July 2014 (UTC).

  • I'd prefer ALT2 and a photo of the Hans Christian Andersen house.♦ Dr. Blofeld 07:38, 19 July 2014 (UTC)


Hc-andersens-hus.jpg
Then I suggest:
  • Symbol confirmed.svg This article is a newly promoted GA, is long enough and has been nominated within the correct time frame. Going with ALT5 which has an inline citation and the second image, which has an appropriate license. Andersen was born in Odense but the house in the image is only assumed to be the correct location so I have changed the (pictured) to (presumed location pictured). I detected no policy violations. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:29, 23 July 2014 (UTC)


Word Crimes

  • Reviewed: Floortje Mackaij
  • Comment: Source (for the comparison) [21]. I will be handling the DYK but will be giving the article's key author credit

Created by Saginaw-hitchhiker (talk), Masem (talk). Nominated by Masem (talk) at 15:16, 16 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Provided an alt blurb to just "grammar"-based. --MASEM (t) 01:49, 17 July 2014 (UTC)


Edward Porter Alexander

Edward Porter Alexander black and white photograph

  • ... that artillery expert Edward Porter Alexander (pictured) went on to become a teacher of mathematics and a railway executive?

Improved to Good Article status by Wizardman (talk), Dank (talk). Nominated by Matty.007 (talk) at 12:47, 16 July 2014 (UTC).


Health issues in American football

Improved to Good Article status by Toa Nidhiki05 (talk) and ChrisPond (talk). Nominated by Matty.007 (talk) at 11:18, 16 July 2014 (UTC).

  • I'd like the hook (and maybe the article) to be more clear on two points: is this pro football, college, HS, weekend? And what counts as an "injury" to form the denominator? Beyond that... not that we're here to here to SOAPBOX, but I'd really like to see the hook focus on the emerging evidence about serious longterm brain injuries and demetia. Maybe someone can, er, take that ball and run with it. EEng (talk) 23:17, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I think the source tries to take them all into account, and given that its the US National Library of Medicine/National Institutes of Health, they should be fairly well placed to get stats for it. Alt 1: ... that it is estimated that 43,000 to 67,000 American football players suffer from concussion each season? Alt 2: ... that it was only acknowledged in 2009 that concussions suffered in American football can lead to long-term brain injuries? Is tha the sort of hook you were thinking? Dementia's a bit shaky here, a 2009 NFL report which even the "report's own researchers questioned the reliability of some of the data-gathering methods employed by the study". Thanks, Matty.007 09:32, 17 July 2014 (UTC)

I'd phrase it a bit differently.

I encourage random editors to help make sure the final hook is ironclad. Another angle would be the $765 settlement. EEng (talk) 19:58, 17 July 2014 (UTC)

  • Alt 4: ... that in August 2013, the National Football League pledged $765 million to medically examine former NFL players and for research and education purposes? Doesn't really work I don't think. Thanks, Matty.007 20:07, 17 July 2014 (UTC)



La fille aux cheveux de lin, Des pas sur la neige

Claude Debussy

  • Reviewed: Roll, Jordan, Roll; Baseball's Sad Lexicon
  • Comment: Please save for August 22, Debussy's birthday. I'm willing to change to another image of Debussy that is higher quality if necessary to make this the lead hook.

5x expanded by Bloom6132 (talk). Self nominated at 00:15, 15 July 2014 (UTC).


Articles created/expanded on July 16[edit]

Saugus Iron Works National Historic Site

  • ... that even though the Saugus Iron Works produced one ton of iron a day, it seldom operated at a profit?

5x expanded by Hirolovesswords (talk). Self nominated at 22:31, 20 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Partial review: I verified the 5x DYK expansion. (DYKcheck says it's insufficient, but it's comparing the current version to a version of the article that contained copyvio content that was later trimmed.) --Orlady (talk) 01:03, 21 July 2014 (UTC)


Things Which Have Never Yet Been Done

Improved to Good Article status by 97198 (talk). Self nominated at 07:37, 20 July 2014 (UTC).

Ponte Conde de Linhares

Ponte Conde de Linhares

  • ... that the Ponte Conde de Linhares (pictured) was said to be the world's longest bridge when completed in 1634?
  • ALT1:... that the Ponte Conde de Linhares (pictured) was built on alluvial soil using the trunk of a tree with laterite stone being used for the superstructure?
  • Reviewed: Remedios Circle
  • Comment: I am not sure if my usage of the article title is correct. Please let me know if incorrect.

5x expanded by Rsrikanth05 (talk). Self nominated at 20:07, 19 July 2014 (UTC).


Dylan Penn

Created by TonyTheTiger (talk). Self nominated at 04:52, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

Évariste Vital Luminais

Evariste-Vital Luminais

  • ... that 19th-century painter Évariste Vital Luminais was sometimes called "the painter of the Gauls" (example artwork pictured)?

5x expanded by Yngvadottir (talk). Nominated by Hafspajen (talk) at 11:03, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol delete vote.svg Article is expanded fivefold, and is long enough. No plagiarism detected in English language sources, and AGF for foreign language ones. Hook fact "17th-century painter" is not correct. Article states that the painter lived between 1821 and 1896. Moreover, the article states "sometimes called 'the painter of the Gauls'". The hook has to be corrected accordingly. Sources are cited inline, AGF for foreign language sources. Image is used in text and is ©-free. No QPQ was done. --CeeGee 10:25, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
OOops.Fix hook, "17th-century painter". Hafspajen (talk) 12:49, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
Gauls, ask Yngvadottir. Hafspajen (talk) 12:51, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
Well, I guess just correct hook as CeeGee asks. Hafspajen (talk) 15:04, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol voting keep.svg It's OK now. Good to go AGF. --CeeGee 16:31, 23 July 2014 (UTC)



Ganga Bruta

  • ... that Ganga Bruta was called "the worst film of all time"?
  • ALT1:... that Ganga Bruta was "Humberto Mauro's best film", but was called "the worst film of all time?

Improved to Good Article status by Gabriel Yuji (talk). Nominated by Matty.007 (talk) at 13:55, 17 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Mathematics note: David Eppstein, back me up on this. May we not conclude from the hook that Humberto Mauro made only one film? EEng (talk) 15:44, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
  • But he can't have made any other film, as follows. Let's call Ganga Bruto G, and let us assume there exists some film F, by Mauro but distinct from G. Now, we are told that G is the worst film of all time, so F > G. But we are also told that G was Mauro's best film, so G > F. Then F > G > F and by transitivity F > F i.e. F is worse than itself and also better than itself. Thus we have a contradiction (several, actually) and F does not exist. (If we allow ties for bestness and worstness then the proof can be modified to show that Mauro could have made other films, but they must all be equally good and equally bad.) EEng (talk) 16:58, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I'm not entirely sure if you're joking or not I'm afraid. Thanks, Matty.007 17:11, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
What makes you think I'm joking? [22] EEng (talk) 18:22, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
No, we can only conclude that if the two comments were made by the same person (film quality being subjective). Which the ALT1 hook doesn't say was the case. (Indeed, according to the article, it wasn't). Anaxial (talk) 21:15, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
Wet blanket. EEng (talk) 22:25, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
Somebody bring EEng new bedding, he's wet his blanket again. Belle (talk) 00:42, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
Dirty diaper. EEng (talk) 01:22, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
cleaner to aisle 3 please...... ALT2 ... that Ganga Bruta influenced the Cinema Novo movement 30 years after being called "the worst film of all time"? Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 09:15, 22 July 2014 (UTC)

Symbol voting keep.svg Recent GA so length and creation date are unimportant. No copyvio, plagiarism or close-paraphrasing in the references I could check; translations are far enough away from the originals too; AGF on the offline or unavailable sources. QPQ not necessary. Citations where you'd expect them; I don't know whether plot and cast need inline citations but that is easily remedied as both are in source 5, so I'm not going to push it back on that basis. Original hook and ALT1 both supported by citations. ALT2 is true but not directly supported so I'd probably not use that one (sorry, Ritchie333, you can't win them all). I prefer ALT1. (It's a pity we can't use the poster pic, because it has fighting robots and a man breaking a woman's back; presumably that's the murder scene) Belle (talk) 10:51, 22 July 2014 (UTC)

Closed subgroup theorem

  • Comment: Feel free to use another hook.

Created by YohanN7 (talk). Nominated by Josve05a (talk) at 21:30, 16 July 2014 (UTC).

For this hook we'll need a direct cite in the article supportin the "several known as" point. EEng (talk) 22:40, 16 July 2014 (UTC)

This version is going to be more confusing as a sound bite because there are two Cartan theorem articles, Cartan's theorem and Cartan's theorems A and B. --Mark viking (talk) 22:49, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
Confusion is a minor problem here compared to the desperate need to inject something interesting into a math hook (speaking as a degree-holder in applied math, before you say anything). EEng (talk) 23:21, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
Fair enough :) --Mark viking (talk) 00:02, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
Just in case there's some hidden romance to this theorem that can be injected, I'm paging DYK's designated math hookster David Eppstein. David, is there a love triangle we can work in here? EEng (talk) 01:32, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
Wow, this is way more technical than I usually consider appropriate for DYK in my own nominations. But anyway, how about
Obviously, to use it as a hook, we would need this to be in the article (and properly sourced) first. As a source, I suggest
David Eppstein (talk) 02:08, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
At least you've injected some inspiration. If the others want this hook, I'll augment the article per the source. EEng (talk) 02:29, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
Please augment the article anyhow. I don't know the historical order of events myself, but clearly, if von Neumann proved the theorem for closed matrix groups, it deserves to be in the article. The proof in the article is specialized to matrix groups, though the method generalizes to arbitrary groups. Come to think of it, I'm not sure Cartan proved the theorem in 1930. The cited publication is from 1930. YohanN7 (talk) 05:10, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
Happy to do it, but it might be tmw. EEng (talk) 12:08, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
I added it. —David Eppstein (talk) 18:04, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
Your alacrity is disgusting. I'll bet in school you cleaned the erasers. 19:39, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
Thank you David. But be aware of tmw. It might cause fatigue, and fatigue is not to be messed around with lightheartedlyFace-smile.svg I threw out an info-box and put a von Neumann picture in. YohanN7 (talk) 21:16, 17 July 2014 (UTC)

Basma

  • ... that according to local tradition, the shrine of Muawiya in the town of Basma is named after a soldier in Saladin's army who was slain near the town?

5x expanded by Huldra (talk). Nominated by Al Ameer son (talk) at 21:18, 16 July 2014 (UTC).

  • ALT1 ... that according to local tradition, the shrine of Muawiya in the town of Basma is named for a soldier in Saladin's army who fell in battle nearby? EEng (talk) 01:57, 17 July 2014 (UTC)


Norcliffe Chapel

Norcliffe Chapel

Created by Peter I. Vardy (talk). Self nominated at 14:10, 16 July 2014 (UTC).

  • ALT1 ... that Cheshire's Norcliffe Chapel (pictured) was founded by a Unitarian, but was a Baptist chapel for its first ten years?
    • Symbol confirmed.svg Article is new enough and long enough. It is written in a neutral tone with suitable citations. The image is appropriately licenced. QPQ done. The claim made in the hook and ALT 1 are supported by a suitable source. There isn't much between the two hooks but I would go with the original. (I have added a note on the talk page about "designation", but it wouldn't preclude running as DYK).— Rod talk 11:53, 18 July 2014 (UTC)



Current nominations[edit]

Articles created/expanded on July 17[edit]

Chandrakant Topiwala

Created by Nizil Shah (talk). Self nominated at 16:06, 18 July 2014 (UTC).

Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Nila (Ramayana)
  • Symbol question.svg New enough. Long enough. QPQ done. NPOV. All paragraphs cited. Hook fact needs a cite immediately afterwards. I've added an ALT1. Infobox has 1939, but article and Mohan Lal has 1936 as birth year. "dictionary of literary terms in Gujarati" is a copyvio of Mohan Lal. "Vishishta Sahitya Sangnya-Kosh" is not a dictionary. The English prose in this article could be clearer. Edwardx (talk) 14:31, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
Thanks for review, Edwardx. Hook cited. Birthday corrected. Vishwa Sahitya Sangnya-Kosh is also dictionary as per Gujarati Sahitya Parishad ref (in Gujarati) but for now it removed it so no issues. Regarding copyvio of using sentence 'dictionary of literary terms in Gujarati', i dont have better/alternative words to describe the same. If you can suggest, it is good. I copyedited prose but I may not be perfect as I am not native speaker. Feel free to point out. Thanks again. -Nizil (talk) 19:55, 23 July 2014 (UTC)


John Gregorson Campbell

Improved to Good Article status by Sagaciousphil (talk), Eric Corbett (talk), J Milburn (talk). Nominated by Matty.007 (talk) at 19:40, 17 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg No copyvio, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing detected. GAey enough and recently GAey enough. Neutral. No QPQ necessary. Citations as far as the eye can see. Hook is supported by the whole article rather than any citation in particular. Passing it but I'm going to suggest an ALT as obviously a folklorist with folkloric family legends has got to be hooky (prep-builder, you choose the hook, but choose wisely as you don't want to get on the wrong side of anybody here as we all have wicked tempers and know how to hold a grudge).
ALT ...that the family of church minister and folklorist John Gregorson Campbell was said to have been cursed by a Bean Shìth? Belle (talk) 00:20, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
Or alternatively don't pipe banshee, but I think the Alt hooks is better. Thanks, Matty.007 08:13, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
ALT 2 that church minister and a folklorist John Gregorson Campbell wrote the book Superstitions of the Highlands and Islands of Scotland 1900?

Hafspajen (talk) 20:25, 18 July 2014 (UTC)

Philcade Building

Philcade(Amoco North Building) in downtown Tulsa

Created by Bruin2 (talk). Self nominated at 15:46, 17 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Is it Philtower Building, or Buildings? The hooks conflict. EEng (talk) 07:09, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
It is Philtower Building. I revised the link in ALT2 to make this a little clearer, although the previous link would have taken you to the correct page via a redirect. Bruin2 (talk) 22:37, 20 July 2014 (UTC)



Rohan Chand

  • ... that child actor Rohan Chand was scouted at a baseball game when he was six years old?

5x expanded by 97198 (talk). Self nominated at 13:18, 17 July 2014 (UTC).

  • I question the concept of a 6-yo casting director. EEng (talk) 15:37, 17 July 2014 (UTC)
    • I doubt most people would read it that way, but copyedited. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:35, 22 July 2014 (UTC)

Justin Holland

Created by Jacqke (talk). Nominated by Jacqke (talk) at 09:19, 17 July 2014 (UTC).

  • I don't think we should be doing hooks about pedagogues. EEng (talk) 13:23, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg New (17th), long enough, 2nd DYK so no QPQ necessary. On copyvio, there are some significant signs of close paraphrasing that should be recast.[23] On neutrality, I think "He would work all his life, advancing the causes of his race." should be rephrased, though the rest is fine. One major problem: the second ref (Homestead.com) is an unreliable, user-created source. It needs to be removed and preferably replaced with a better alternative. Please ping me if I don't respond. czar  23:42, 20 July 2014 (UTC)
But do you think we should be doing hooks about pedagogues? EEng (talk) 00:45, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
I saw the innuendo, but as my field is alternative education, I was inclined to quip about how pedagogues actually are harmful to children (and that would surely take us even further off-topic...) czar  05:16, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
OK, let's have a cease-fire on this one. EEng (talk) 16:10, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
I found the source that the unreliable website used, an academic paper. I can cite that paper instead. And work on the rephrasing. So, was the comment about pedagogue real? Is the objection the sesquipedelian nature of the word, pedagogue, or an objection to a connotation for the word. I meant it simply as one who designs a course of education for others, and not necessarily children. The word implies strictness, but one could also say that some disciplines require high or strict standards (classical music and physics are two disciplines where pedagogy/a strict standard is still appropriate).Jacqke (talk) 15:51, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
It was a tongue-in-cheek joke (depending on your read). Anyway, don't mind that. An academic paper sounds good on the surface, but make sure you're citing from that paper and not hearsay from an unreliable site that claims to be from a paper (the quintessence of why we don't use unreliable sources). czar  16:25, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
Went through academic paper to make sure it covered all material in this article. I added and revised based on that source, using my own words (I think!) It would be nice to get to the original sources cited in that paper, but I won't be able to get at them any time soon. My biggest concern is the line referring to Frederick Douglass (I just removed it). The paper used his name along with Holland's as prominent black leaders. It does not say that they worked together directly, even though both were involved in the National Councils.Jacqke (talk) 17:55, 21 July 2014 (UTC)

Some background information in the hook will make the remarkable nature of these achievements more obvious:

It's a tight fit but I wanted to get in that he was black, and the century, and the "classical" because these together make it quite remarkable. So I had to drop some other points. I want to say that this is really the kind of DYK we should have more of -- things that are really interesting and enlightening, instead of just miscellaneous facts. EEng (talk) 21:29, 21 July 2014 (UTC)

That sounds good. Would we keep pedagogue in the article? I changed it to teacher in the introduction thinking out would be easier to understand, but that can be changed back.Jacqke (talk) 22:52, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
Belle, can you please explain? I have to go to dinner. EEng (talk) 02:48, 22 July 2014 (UTC)

Do I need. to do anything more for this article? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jacqke (talkcontribs)

Just wait for a reviewer to come along. EEng (talk) 04:11, 24 July 2014 (UTC)



Autumn Sandeen

Created by EvanRo (talk). Self nominated at 20:10, 17 July 2014 (UTC).

Note I changed marker to designation, as that certainly seems more natural offhand. (Marker sounds like something to do with DNA.) However, does marker have some special meaning I don't know? EEng (talk) 07:04, 19 July 2014 (UTC)

Your ALT1 hook looks great to me. Thanks for the help. --EvanRo (talk) 17:38, 23 July 2014 (UTC)

Secular Pro-Life

Created by Acather96 (talk). Self nominated at 20:25, 22 July 2014 (UTC).

Articles created/expanded on July 18[edit]

Bethlehem Hingham Shipyard

5x expanded by Ktr101 (talk). Self nominated at 04:15, 22 July 2014 (UTC).

P. T. Daly

Created/expanded by Warofdreams (talk). Self nominated at 01:34, 22 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Name, date, length, hook, and checks for close paraphrasing check out (mainly because there is no way to access the sources offline, so I will assume good faith on this). Good job! Kevin Rutherford (talk) 04:09, 22 July 2014 (UTC)

Walter W. Law

  • ... that Walter W. Law went from being a carpet salesman to shipping 8,000 roses daily, earning up to $100,000 annually?

Improved to Good Article status by (talk). Nominated by Matty.007 (talk) at 15:25, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

2000 CECAFA Cup

  • Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Information Technology Park, Nepal
  • Comment: This is going to take a bit of explaining. This was the version pre-expansion, 517 characters. However, taking away 14 for including the reference (503), and then taking away the copyvio (all from here, the second lead sentence and all but the first sentence of paragraph two) takes the count down to only 205 characters. A 5* expansion of that is ~1000 characters, smaller than DYK guidelines allow anyway. The article is currently at 3005 characters, but taking away the part of 'History' which I copied over it is 2495 characters. That is all.

5x expanded by Matty.007 (talk). Self-nominated at 14:33, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg New enough, long enough. Hook fact is very good and reference checks out. Hook is grammatical. Article is too. No close paraphrasing found. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:03, 23 July 2014 (UTC)

Willem Witteveen

Willem Witteveen on 21 January 2014

Created by BabbaQ (talk), Editør (talk). Nominated by Editør (talk) at 11:46, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg New (18th), long enough, neutral, no copyvio found via spot check, 4th DYK so no QPQ necessary. Hook doesn't have an immediate ref in article (see 3b). Please ping me if I don't respond. czar  00:21, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
    All elements of the hook are referenced on various places in the body of the article, but they are also all mentioned in this source, which is used in the article. Here is an alternative source in English. – Editør (talk) 02:19, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
I didn't say the article was unreferenced. You'll see what I mean at 3b (linked above), you'll see what I mean. That they were passengers on Flight 17 should have a citation immediately following that sentence, etc. czar  02:44, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
In the section 'Death' are four references (ref 5/3/9/10) for that he was on this flight. In the section 'Career' is mentioned that he did a PhD and subsequently became a law professor (ref 1), he was a senator during two periods (ref 1), and an author (ref 7/8). All these facts are supported by inline citations directly after them. In the section 'Bibliography', six books are mentioned, which are also references for that he was an author. The lead is a summary of the article body with only duplicate information (per WP:MOSINTRO), so there is no need to include redundant references in the lead (per WP:CITELEAD). Are there any other concerns? – Editør (talk) 09:13, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
Yes, the same concern, repeated once again: 3b of the DYK eligibility criteria. The hook mentions that he was on MA flight 17, so the part of the article that sources this fact needs an immediate citation (e.g., right after "contested eastern Donetsk region.") czar  15:06, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
Alright, I've rewritten the section 'Death' and repositioned the references. As you can see, nothing substantially changed, but each individual sentence is now directly followed by inline citations. – Editør (talk) 19:01, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
@Czar: ping as requested. – Editør (talk) 12:29, 23 July 2014 (UTC)

Symbol confirmed.svg gtg, image okay (Just needed the one citation, not to be rewritten, but okay as is.) Please add a citation for the bibliography when you have a chance. czar  12:39, 23 July 2014 (UTC)

Thanks. I've added inline citations for the books in the bibliography. – Editør (talk) 14:05, 23 July 2014 (UTC)


The Beatles (album)

  • ... that the session for The Beatles led to their disbandment?
  • ALT1:... that a lack of drugs assisted the writing of The Beatles?

Improved to Good Article status by Ritchie333 (talk), Dan56, SNUGGUMS, CuriousEric, JG66. Nominated by Matty.007 (talk) at 10:19, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Comment – I would like to propose an alternative for the first hook. – Editør (talk) 12:07, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
  • ALT2: ... that the recording sessions for The Beatles (1968), also known as the White Album, contributed to the disbandment of The Beatles two years later?
  • Both hooks proposed so far ALTs 0 and 2 are something like "X caused World War II" -- we should make such a statement only if there's settled scholarly consensus on the point. Because ("unfortunately") it's a very complete article with a lot of material, I can't really find where in there such a consensus is presented. Clearly these recording sessions were troubled but that's different from saying they helped cause the breakup. Can someone find what I'm looking for? EEng (talk) 13:33, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
    • They are both in the article: alt 1: "the lack of external influences and drugs sparked the band's creativity". Original: "The sessions for the album lasted until October, and ultimately led to their disbandment". Thanks, Matty.007 13:38, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
Sorry, I meant "ALTs 0 and 2" (not ALT1) -- now corrected above. Yes, I see the article text you quote, but I don't see the sources. My concern is exacerbated by a review of Break-up_of_the_Beatles -- again, I see statements like "There was tension during recording of the White Album" but not that this caused the breakup. I'm not trying to be difficult but, really, statements like X caused Y in historical or cultural events are very tricky and need rock-solid sourcing. Luckily there's plenty of material for other hooks e.g. Beatles lyrics are full of fascinating hidden references. Can't we use one of those instead? EEng (talk) 14:07, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
The lead says "The sessions for the album lasted until October, and ultimately led to their disbandment.", which is even stronger than ALT2. But if there is no proper source for it in the article, it shouldn't be in the hook, and it shouldn't even be in a good article in the first place. – Editør (talk) 20:18, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
Ritchie333, can you fix this? EEng (talk) 20:42, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
Does the section 'Personnel issues' show the friction? Thanks, Matty.007 07:57, 20 July 2014 (UTC)
  • As Bob the Builder once put it, yes I can. The lead as I wrote it just says the album session contributed to the break-up, and I have added another quotation from John Lennon who (according to the source) pretty much stated that verbatim. However, it did not cause the break-up. I agree with EEng though that the hooks are in the vein of "did you know that Fred Phelps has never been seen taking a walk up Canal Street, Manchester". Let me suggest:
ALT3 ... that The Beatles, also known as the White Album, was the first by the group not to be issued in mono in the US?
ALT4 ... that an early pressing of The Beatles with serial number 0000005 sold for over £19,000 on eBay?
ALT5 ... that in 2013, Rutherford Chang created an art exhibition of a record store where the only album for sale was The Beatles? Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 11:19, 20 July 2014 (UTC)
Inspired by Ritchie: Alt6: ... that The Beatles sold for over £19,000? Thanks, Matty.007 11:59, 20 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I like ALT6 12:43, 20 July 2014 (UTC)

Anna Kravtchenko

  • ALT1:... that pianist Anna Kravtchenko from Ukraine, winner of the Busoni competition, played Chopin "in a way that thoroughly warmed the heart and thrilled the senses"?
  • Reviewed: Common (film)
  • Comment: Good news from Ukraine, - I normally don't care about Nationality. Needless to say, I prefer the heart-warming ALT1.

5x expanded by Nikkimaria (talk), Gerda Arendt (talk). Nominated by Gerda Arendt (talk) at 10:05, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg Length is good, expansion is recent, and both hooks are suitable and cited. AGF on foreign-language sources. QPQ done. (Disclosure: I made some small tweaks to the article yesterday, but nothing substantive which would disqualify this review.) Andy Mabbett (Pigsonthewing); Talk to Andy; Andy's edits 10:53, 19 July 2014 (UTC)

FF Aquilae

5x expanded by Casliber (talk). Self nominated at 07:09, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol voting keep.svg Expanded enough and recently enough; neutral; cited in all the right places to make a reader feel special; plagiarism, copyvio, and close-paraphrasing taken on good faith (that there isn't any, obviously) QPQ done in a brisk friendly hip fashion. The hook...increasing by 0.072 (No! say it isn't so!) ± (plus OR minus?!?! Never!!!) 0.011 seconds [GASP!]. If the wikicup gives points for boring hooks, you've just won it. It is cited and accurate but, since I think that is more likely to lull readers into unconsciousness than hook them, I'll suggest an ALT that seems to be supported (though you will probably tell me it is not strictly accurate and we'll be stuck with the snoozifying hook):
ALT1 ...that FF Aquilae is a binary system containing three stars? Belle (talk) 10:58, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
ye-eah....maybe ALT2 ...that the main star of FF Aquilae is a pulsating supergiant 39 times the diameter of the Sun? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:18, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
Symbol voting keep.svg That's better. Go for ALT2! Belle (talk) 11:35, 23 July 2014 (UTC)

Meadowlark (train)

The Meadowlark after it began using a Budd Rail Diesel Car

Created by Mackensen (talk). Self nominated at 22:33, 18 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg Article is new enough, long enough, neutral, and cites sources with inline citations. Close paraphrasing, copyright violations and plagiarism are not apparent in regards to online sources. Hook fact is accurate and cited with an inline citation in the article. --Hirolovesswords (talk) 01:16, 21 July 2014 (UTC)


Heather Turland

Created by Sillyfolkboy (talk). Self nominated at 21:24, 18 July 2014 (UTC).

... as long as she didn't organize a coup anywhere. EEng (talk) 06:57, 19 July 2014 (UTC)

George A. Dickel

George A. Dickel

Created by Bms4880 (talk). Nominated by Orlady (talk) at 18:18, 18 July 2014 (UTC).



Shopping for Fangs

5x expanded by SL93 (talk). Self nominated at 04:58, 18 July 2014 (UTC).

  • 21 days is a fairly standard filming period for independent and small-scale films, so not a great hook fact IMO. How about this alt...
  • That works. SL93 (talk) 09:05, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
  • ALT2: ... that of Shopping for Fangs (filmed for less than US$10,000) a reviewer wrote that the actors managed to do rather nicely, "under the circumstances"? EEng (talk) 02:55, 21 July 2014 (UTC)


Information Technology Park, Nepal

Created by Ascii002 (talk). Self nominated at 02:03, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol delete vote.svg Hi Ascii002, thanks for nominating this for DYK. However, we have several rules regarding articles nominated, one of which (#2) states Articles must have a minimum of 1,500 characters of prose (ignoring infoboxes, categories, references, lists, and tables etc). Therefore, the fact that the article only has 432 characters at the minute is a problem. If however, you can get the article to 1500 characters or greater in the next week I will continue with the review. Thanks, Matty.007 14:49, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
Ok. I will be working on it and will surely complete it within 2 days. — Ascii002 Let's talk! Contribs 15:00, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
Looks like a good start. Just leave a message on my talk page when you're ready for me to take another look. Thanks, Matty.007 16:37, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
Symbol question.svg Long enough, new enough, well referenced, not a stub, hook supported with refs 1 and 2 (1 didn't work, but definitely in 2). Not a requirement, but please can you source the sentence "It has been said to be providing employment opportunities to about 15000 technicians after the full range of operations of the IT Park. It has aimed to provide government services by maximizing the use of Information and technology."? No QPQ needed as (as far as I can tell), first nom, neutral. Will check for copyvio soon. Apart from that sentence, I would just like to give it a quick copyedit and check for any copyvios before it's all good. Thanks, Matty.007 12:12, 20 July 2014 (UTC)
Just a bit of clarification, no copyvios found on spotchecks. How much did it cost, there are three different amounts stated in the article? Thanks, Matty.007 13:13, 20 July 2014 (UTC)
Initially when it was started (2003), 270 million was invested. By 2007, total amount reached 290 million and reached 500 million by 2013. — Ascii002 Let's talk! Contribs 13:32, 20 July 2014 (UTC)
Symbol confirmed.svg It's not perfect by any means, but I can't seen an issue in the rules that could hold it up. Thanks, Matty.007 06:46, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Hi! Sorry to spoil the mood. But the current hook has repetitive wording and isn't disambiguating properly. Hence proposing ALT now. §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {T/C} 04:48, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
ALT1 ... that the Information Technology Park of Kavre is the only IT park in Nepal?
Not sure what you mean by not disambiguating properly, all the links appear fine. Thanks, Matty.007 07:58, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
Yeah... there is no problem with the links. I meant that "... that the IT park is the only IT park in Nepal" is odd wording where by adding "of Panauti", the subject IT park is disambiguated. §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {T/C} 08:30, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
Symbol confirmed.svg Alt 1 good to do, just added 'the' at the start. Thanks, Matty.007 09:24, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
Thanks for Alt 1 but rather than using "of Panauti", its good if we use "of Kavre" as its location is widely popular by the district (Kavre).— Ascii002 Let's talk! Contribs 13:22, 23 July 2014 (UTC)

Articles created/expanded on July 19[edit]

Vercors Massif

  • ... that ....?

5x expanded by Gilderien (talk). Self nominated at 23:00, 23 July 2014 (UTC). Review:Template:Did_you_know_nominations/Sulu_Bleeding-heart

  • I am in the process of translating this from the article on fr.wiki. I request discretion to delay the DYK until it is "finished".--Gilderien Berate|List of good deeds 23:13, 23 July 2014 (UTC)

Caesar's Camp, Rushmoor and Waverley

Created by Simon Burchell (talk). Self nominated at 19:59, 23 July 2014 (UTC).

Charles de Visscher

Charles de Visscher in profile

Created by Mendaliv (talk). Self nominated at 04:45, 22 July 2014 (UTC).


Kesher Israel Congregation (Harrisburg, Pennsylvania)

5x expanded by Yoninah (talk). Self nominated at 23:19, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Thanks, EEng. Let's go with ALT1. Yoninah (talk) 16:40, 23 July 2014 (UTC)


Tripura local body elections, 2014

Created by Soman (talk). Self nominated at 20:10, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

Symbol question.svg - Upon initial look, the article's new enough, long enough and QPQ's completed. Hook is sourced enough. I'm still in the process in checking the article for instances of close paraphrasing. However, there's an "orphan article" maintenance template in the article. Kindly resolve the issue so there will be no glitches if the article will be promoted. -WayKurat (talk) 14:30, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Afaik, the orphan tag is not a hinder for DYK. --Soman (talk) 18:53, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
Done with the checking. No instance of close paraphrasing upon review. Symbol confirmed.svg GTG for me. -WayKurat (talk) 03:03, 24 July 2014 (UTC)

2013–14 Norwich City F.C. season

Improved to Good Article status by Spudgfsh (talk). Nominated by Matty.007 (talk) at 15:14, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg Interesting hook with a source. Valid date '''tAD''' (talk) 15:07, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg This review needs more details, in accordance with DYK review instructions. Details that are supposed to be checked in a review can be found at DYK Reviewing guide. Yoninah (talk) 16:42, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
  • There also needs be a cite in the paragraph under "Pre-season matches", per DYK rules. Yoninah (talk) 16:42, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
  • It's a summary of the above results, in which there are 11 different links. Thanks, Matty.007 17:09, 23 July 2014 (UTC)

Derek Bourgeois

  • ... that Derek Bourgeois, who became Britain's most prolific symphony composer in 2009, said that the symphonies came "tumbling out"?
  • ALT1 ... that Derek Bourgeois, since 2009 Britain's most prolific composer of symphonies, said that they came "tumbling out"?

2x expanded and sourced (BLP) by Skr15081997 (talk). Self nominated at 12:40, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg The 2x expansion of an unreferenced BLP is technically correct, but the article was 22787 characters, before the huge list of compositions was removed on 19 July. The rules are unclear about whether this 2x expansion would qualify. Spot checking with dup detector finds no significant copyvios or close paraphrasing. However, the English of the article is often cumbersome, idiomatic and with inconsistent use of tenses. For example, the sentence with the hook fact, "Till 2009 he had composed 44 symphonies and became the most prolific symphony composer of Britain." In the third para, the Newsome ref only covers the tuba and first concerto sentences, and the earlier bulk of the para is unreferenced. QPQ done. NPOV enough, but some critical commentary would be desirable, as we get no sense of what his music is like or if it is thought to be good or otherwise. Edwardx (talk) 10:20, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
  • @Edwardx: Thanks for the review. The long list of compositions was added by Derek Bourgeois himself (see article's history). When the rule's are unclear we are supposed to use commonsense. If you insist I can add the list but I will do it by adding "*" before every composition. Actually I did a little mistake, I should have made the list bulleted instead of removing it. What do you say?--Skr15081997 (talk) 10:23, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I think it would be reasonable to say that the the compositions should have been a bulleted list in any event, and if so, would not have counted towards the DYK total. WP is meant to be a summary, and a huge list of compositions from a minor composer does not seem appropriate, so please don't add it back in. Yes, common sense suggests that it now meets the 2x expansion for an unreferenced BLP. Edwardx (talk) 10:33, 23 July 2014 (UTC)

Dogs in the United States

Created by OccultZone (talk). Self nominated at 03:52, 19 July 2014 (UTC).

  • I'm sorry to say that the article has serious drafting and organization problems, and I'm concerned about whether "Dogs in [country]" really justifies a standalone article. Can someone else opine because maybe I'm just being grumpy. EEng (talk) 06:54, 19 July 2014 (UTC)
@EEng: Tried to nominate it before the end of 7th day, you should explain your point. Street dogs in Moscow was also a DYK. OccultZone (TalkContributionsLog) 07:10, 19 July 2014 (UTC)

Articles created/expanded on July 20[edit]

Ali Merchant, Sara Khan

Sara Khan

2x expanded and sourced (BLP) by Skr15081997 (talk). Self nominated at 13:39, 22 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol possible vote.svg: Sara Khan is not a fivefold expansion per WP:DYKSG#A4. There was a previous version of the article that had been gutted immediately before this expansion took place (and even if eligible for the 2x expansion exception, it would not be sufficient). The 2x expansion on Ali Merchant appears good. No comment on the rest at this point. —/Mendaliv//Δ's/ 14:50, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
  • @Mendaliv: this version has 1347 characters. Would it be acceptable if I do 2x expansion?--Skr15081997 (talk) 16:03, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
To my understanding, no: Sara Khan has had sources for a long time. Furthermore, I haven't looked at the other factors for either article because Sara Khan isn't even close. —/Mendaliv//Δ's/ 16:24, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
Presuming this goes forward, I'd also think NPOV and BLP considerations would call for the claim that he married Khan for publicity to be attributed, such as: "Merchant has claimed that his marriage to Khan was for publicity?" I think more experienced DYKers may wish to comment on that. —/Mendaliv//Δ's/ 16:30, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Sorry to spoil the mood; but Merchant's 2011 version was sourced. With Indian television related article, many vandals blank it, remove references (probably hoping the article would get deleted as BLPPROD), remove notability claims like awards, etc. There are promotional IPs and their competitors also disrupting numerous pages. That's a big problem in this field. §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {T/C} 04:20, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
    Hm, quite right. Neither article is eligible for the 2x exemption. Honestly since these are pretty short articles as it is, 5x expansions to both shouldn't be impossible. The longest version of Merchant appears to be 1675 characters, while the longest version of Khan appears to be 1784 characters. As such, we're in Symbol delete vote.svg territory. —/Mendaliv//Δ's/ 04:16, 24 July 2014 (UTC)


Brod Pete

Created by PapaJeckloy (talk). Self nominated at 05:47, 20 July 2014 (UTC).

  • In all seriousness, I don't understand the hook. EEng (talk) 02:49, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
    • He reasoned that he is an alien or creatures that did not originated here on Earth when he failed to give his birth certificate, it is something weird that's why i added it, it will have many hits because of it's weirdness. -PAPAJECKLOY (hearthrob! kiss me! <3) (talk) 10:09, 21 July 2014 (UTC).
Um, are you sure he didn't just mean that he's a non-citizen? That's a more natural assumption in the context of an election. EEng (talk) 18:06, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
As phrased the hook makes no sense anyway. Someone does not usually "reason" as a result of simply doing something, they "reason" when they make a decision or articulate an opinion. Why is "alien" in italics anyway? And looking at the article... how is "alien" an abbreviation? I think this article needs to be copyedited before it can be listed. —/Mendaliv//Δ's/ 15:12, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
Maybe reasoned means explained. Anyway, I want to put this as gently as I can, but the English in the article really needs attention, as M already said. EEng (talk) 15:43, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
Alien is his abbreviation or commonly used word, he always said it for joke, he used it since he failed to do it, because he's a comedian. about the italic i have removed the italics on the alien text, the grammar now is fixed, check it -PAPAJECKLOY (hearthrob! kiss me! <3) (talk) 11:30, 23 July 2014 (UTC).
I'm sorry i have removed the abbreviation word on the article, i have changed it to his commonly used word, alien. I don't know that its the term used for shortening words, as i said he is always saying it since he failed to do it, and he's a comedian take a note of it. Reason is the right term of it he reasoned to the media that he is an alien.-PAPAJECKLOY (hearthrob! kiss me! <3) (talk) 11:34, 23 July 2014 (UTC).

────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────This article needs a full copyediting. I've tagged it as such. If I understand the hook correctly, the idea is that Brod Pete's candidacy was rejected for failure to provide a birth certificate, and that he said he could not provide one because he is an alien (as in extra-terrestrial). —/Mendaliv//Δ's/ 02:28, 24 July 2014 (UTC)

Yes, that's the point, i have removed the tag and rewrited and rephrased the whole article and the grammar is now fixed. -PAPAJECKLOY (hearthrob! kiss me! <3) (talk) 10:27, 24 July 2014 (UTC).


List of Test cricketers who have taken five wickets on debut

Albert Trott

5x expanded by Sahara4u (talk), Lugnuts (talk). Nominated by Sahara4u (talk) at 23:23, 20 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Do we have a photo from before he got the pegleg? EEng (talk) 02:29, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
For the record here's the original photo - DO NOT RUN THIS PHOTO WITH HOOK
  • @EEng, changed the photo! —Zia Khan 02:33, 21 July 2014 (UTC)


Minor White

  • ... that photographer Minor White included two copies of the same photograph in his 1974 work Totemic Sequence, flipping the second copy upside down?

5x expanded by Lexaxis7 (talk). Self nominated at 18:55, 20 July 2014 (UTC).

  • "Flipping upside down" is technically vague. What really happened is the image was reflected over the horizontal axis but that doesn't make for a very good hook. At the risk of being a bit colloquial...
ALT1 ... that photographer Minor White's 1974 Totemic Sequence presents two versions of the same image, flipping the negative over vertically between the first and the second?

EEng (talk)

hen (pronoun)

Created/expanded by Peter Isotalo (talk). Self nominated at 13:05, 20 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg Long enough, newly moved to mainspace. No copyvio, plagiarism or close paraphrasing detected. Neutral. Citations plastered all over the article like they were having a sale at the citation shop (this is a good thing, I'm not criticising). Hook is fine (though it would be lovely to have something with "him/her" in it, I can't think of anything) No image even though there are many available (pathetic joke). QPQ needs doing? (Tell me if not, and I'll give it a tick). On a related note, I do like the self-referential plot summary in Kivi och Monsterhund. Belle (talk) 11:03, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
  • Is it fair to say "recently invented" in the hook? The phrase is piped to neologism which I think is an accurate descriptor - but I'm not sure it's considered a recent invention since the word was first proposed ("invented") in 1966, despite only recently coming into more popular use. (Although I suppose that depends on whether one considers 1966 to be recent...) 97198 (talk) 12:07, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
  • I don't see that as a problem (I have spoken; kneel down and wonder). Belle (talk) 12:21, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
For a pronoun, 50 years would be very recent. And while there were suggestions back in the 60s and 90s, they hardly mattered since no one really took note. It's actually unclear whether current usage was directly inspired by the previous suggestions or invented independently. In Swedish, hen fits very well alongside hon/han both in spoken and written language, unlike the rather bizarre-looking Spivak pronouns.
@Belle:, not your run-of-the-mill synopsis there. :-) I'll see if I can come up with a snazzier hook.
Peter Isotalo 12:41, 21 July 2014 (UTC)

Kingstonian F.C.

A Kingstonian player (in red and white) shields the ball

  • ... that Kingstonian F.C. (pictured in red and white) have had six different names?
  • Reviewed: Put here
  • Comment: Any alts are welcome. I would quite like to use a picture with the nom

Improved to Good Article status by Matty.007 (talk). Self nominated at 12:06, 20 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Do you have any images that won't inadvertently arouse spanking fetishists? EEng (talk) 02:38, 21 July 2014 (UTC) I don't know what's got into me lately.
    • Is that a bad thing? If it generates views... Anyway, in answer to the question, no. And personally I can't see that being too much of an issue, especially if it airs at UK time, where pretty much everyone knows how football works. Thanks, Matty.007 06:59, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
Yes, but it's well known that Brits have a special love for spanking -- all those boarding schools and so on. Orgiastic breaches of the peace could be the result, threatening the very fabric of the social order, especially at tea-time. As a precautionary measure perhaps we should post a link to the Riot Act for ready reference by public officials. EEng (talk) 17:58, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
I think I get what EEng means: it's not such a great picture for the subject because of the hands because at first glance, you've got a guy swinging back to give the other player a hit; you expect an article about an incident of a player being hit. If you can't get a different image, you might consider uploading a crop of just the Kingstonian F.C. player. It would also obviate the "in red and white" (though you'd probably still have to say "player pictured" or something). It's also not such a great photo because all the detail of the Kingstonian F.C. player's face is lost because of the exposure. DYK images should look good, and give detail, at 100x100... this image, with this composition, is an image of a soccer player about to hit another soccer player. —/Mendaliv//Δ's/ 04:58, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
In fact, I just looked at it in Photoshop: it's a bit more serious than I had initially thought. While cropping is definitely possible, the backlighting makes it really hard (if impossible) to boost the foreground brightness without completely blowing out the background. And looking at this image at 100px, you have to realize something: his kit isn't red and white in this image at 100px, it's blue-grey and almost black. You can't distinguish that it's red without the text. Without cropping, I would say this image is not about Kingstonian F.C., but about the other team's player. Sorry, I don't think you should run this DYK with this image. —/Mendaliv//Δ's/ 05:29, 22 July 2014 (UTC)

Hilda Käkikoski

Hilda Käkikoski

Created by 97198 (talk). Self nominated at 11:57, 20 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg Article is new enough (created July 20), long enough, and uses in-line citations. Hook is short enough and interesting. Hook fact is supported by this source. Spot-checking doesn't reveal issues with unduly close paraphrasing, plagiarism or copyright violation. Image listed as public domain. QPQ completed. Cbl62 (talk) 19:33, 20 July 2014 (UTC)


Operation Barkhane

Created by Fotoriety (talk). Self nominated at 08:16, 20 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg Article is new enough, long enough and, to my judgement, neutrally written. No QPQ needed as it seems to be the first DYK nomination of the author - well done!
I have a few concerns though. Firstly, there are a few examples of close paraphrasing that would benefit from being re-written. The hook itself is one, and another sentence very close to the original in the source is "The French forces will be supplied with 20 helicopters, 200 armoured vehicles, 10 transport aircraft, 6 fighter planes and 3 drones." I think it should not be too big a deal to re-work the prose though. My second concern is about the sources. The news sources are reliable but given the nature of the article I was surprised to not find anything sourced from more official sources, like the French ministry of Defence or Foreign Affairs. I think the article would benefit from nor relying solely on information from news agencies. If it's in French, it's no problem - AGF.
My third concern is the biggest, and here I would appreciate input from other editors as well. The article is about a military operation which has just started, and chances are, that there will be reason to change the article, perhaps radically, relatively soon. In other words, it may not be completely stable? I'd appreciate some thoughts and ideas from the author and other editors on how to handle this.
OK, so these are a few concerns, but I'm sure they can be solved rather easily. Yakikaki (talk) 15:44, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
I will try and focus on it when i have some truly valuable free time, perhaps in the coming days. Thanks for your detailed assessment.Fotoriety (talk) 01:34, 23 July 2014 (UTC)

Sleepy Hollow Country Club

Sleepy Hollow Country Club clubhouse

Moved to mainspace by (talk). Self nominated at 18:49, 22 July 2014 (UTC).

Articles created/expanded on July 21[edit]

Texas Wrestling Hall of Fame

Created/expanded by [[User:|User:]] ([[User talk:|talk]]). Nominated by 72.74.215.113 (