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Avatar: The Last Airbender (season 2)[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review as a last review process before an attempted FLC nomination. Please, any and all comments are welcome.

Thanks, haha169 (talk) 19:34, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

PR by Matthewedwards (talk · contribs)

Per WP:LS, don't force the bold title. If it is separated by wikilinks and plain text, it is forced. From the same guideline, references shouldn't appear in the Lede when they can be used in the main text.
- Done --haha169 (talk) 19:17, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
WP:CONTEXT and WP:OVERLINK say not to wikilink two or more words next to each other, so American animated television series needs addressing
- Done. Changed to American animated television series. --haha169 (talk) 19:20, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
WP:MOSNUM says date linking is now optional. I prefer not to link the dates; what does the rubber band and Marcus Aurelius have in common with the season, other than March 17?
As well as the airdates, you should state what network it aired on in the Lede
- Done --haha169 (talk) 19:25, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"The season begins with protagonist, Aang, with his friends Katara and Sokka, and their quest to find an Earthbending teacher." --> "The season begins with protagonist Aang, and his friends Katara and Sokka, and their quest to find an Earthbending teacher."
- Done --haha169 (talk) 19:29, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Nickelodeon, pox, Suki, Jet and Momo are all dablinks
- Done --haha169 (talk) 19:37, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"The show's executive producers and co-creators were " the fact they created and exec-produced it will never change, so "are" rather than "were"
- Done. --haha169 (talk) 20:19, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"the former was co-creator Bryan Konietzko's roommate." you've already said he's the co-creator, so remove that and his first name to read "the former was Koneitzko's roommate."
- Done --haha169 (talk) 20:19, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"...but still has some issues." does it say what issues?
- Yes they did. Done. --haha169 (talk) 20:19, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Don't overlink character names in episode summaries
- Done --haha169 (talk) 20:19, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Try to avoid using Amazon as a reference when possible. We're not here to provide advertising for them, and we should try to be WP:NPOV. What makes them better than any other DVD site? TVShowsOnDVD.com may have the information you need for the US. For region 2, Amazon might have to stay
- Done. --haha169 (talk) 20:19, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Matthew Edwards (talk • contribs • email) 07:06, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

- Done, and thanks. I will fix these issues with the other seasons lists as well. --haha169 (talk) 20:19, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Try not to have references before punctuation. It should be directly after the punctuation per WP:FOOTNOTE. I saw only one, but I may have missed one. I'll fix it for you. Best, RyRy (talk) 05:11, 12 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for the catch. I know about that rule - and I just have to fix it whenever I see it. Bad habit of mine :P. But that's just how refs are added on some wikis as well as other educational publications - and most new editors write like that. --haha169 (talk) 05:21, 12 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]